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4/25/2013 2:33:42 PM
Joshua Brown Posts: 2
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Everything around this feels so wrong, Feeling as if this does not belong,
Feeling trapped inside a world that isn't for this, Retreating within to the recesses of this mind full of bliss,
This feels like screaming but to let it out would not do, The people would hear this and wonder to what is wrong with you,
Then to shield this so no one would understand, Wandering the depths of mind of this barren empty land,
Alone and confined in and of this cold crystal heart, How can this ever hope to help others when this is crumbling apart?
Note: First 2 edits were spelling corrections, third was a reconstruction of the poem, and the fourth was because when posted, it screwed up. edited by Krada91 on 4/27/2013 edited by Krada91 on 4/27/2013
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