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3/25/2013 9:52:18 AM Lynn Dolly Posts: 133	Each limb holds on by a thread Tolerance barometer...BOILING RED Toss, Turn, nightmare becomes reality Seems like an unrealistic brutality Impulses in brain Interrupted by worry Furry over defeat They're not even sorry Nerves like popcorn Arguments explode Break out of sight Much more to this road Wipe my cheeks Tear ducts on their knees My fight far from over I pray god, help me please... edited by svlynn18 on 3/28/2013
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3/27/2013 1:35:23 AM Dane Leong Posts: 4	Tear ducks or Tear ducts? I can really feel your emotion throughout the poem. I also appreciated how you don't really need to pause when you read the poem like you do with most. Overall I thought the quality was consistent. Very Good!
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3/28/2013 3:08:48 AM Lynn Dolly Posts: 133	TheDane wrote: Tear ducks or Tear ducts? I can really feel your emotion throughout the poem. I also appreciated how you don't really need to pause when you read the poem like you do with most. Overall I thought the quality was consistent. Very Good! ducts been corrected. Thank you!
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