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2/8/2013 12:16:29 PM
Jerome Kidd
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I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I could drink clean water,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I could eat clean food,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When people would be able to see,
That all should be treated equally,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
Without sorrow,
Always telling myself “It will come tomorrow.”
I’ve dreamt of a time,
Without war,
For it fills the shore with bodies of those I adore,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I wasn’t looked at,
As just being some black,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I wasn’t looked upon by the ignorant,
As being some illegal immigrant,
I've Dreamt
-Jerome L. Kidd Jr.
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2/10/2013 9:25:59 AM
thelast don
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jkidd223 wrote:
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I could drink clean water,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I could eat clean food,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When people would be able to see,
That all should be treated equally,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
Without sorrow,
Always telling myself “It will come tomorrow.”
I’ve dreamt of a time,
Without war,
For it fills the shore with bodies of those I adore,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I wasn’t looked at,
As just being some black,
I’ve dreamt of a time,
When I wasn’t looked upon by the ignorant,
As being some illegal immigrant,
I've Dreamt
-Jerome L. Kidd Jr.
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2/10/2013 9:26:13 AM
thelast don
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nice post
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