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11/13/2012 8:10:03 AM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

You need more grease on your hands to be a man
Motivation and self esteem to be a powerful woman
How many nails will you gr(POUND)ound
To make success a reeeeemarkable soooouuund?
How many people will you hug
To calm them down and lift away their shoulder shrug
How many times will you use manners
Seems it makes people feel respected,that's what matters

T-r-a-i-n goes by...sparks...sparks
They flicker away the dark
Fairies of inspiration lift spirits ofthose who except their invitation
Sending a positive spell your way
Hope floats in clouds
Greets a new day
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edited by svlynn18 on 11/13/2012
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edited by svlynn18 on 11/14/2012
edited by svlynn18 on 11/14/2012
edited by svlynn18 on 11/14/2012

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