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11/4/2012 1:32:33 PM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

What I have to say does matter
I intend to serve it on a silver platter
If you think I'm gonna sit and hide
I'll have to kiss your curdled booty goodbye

Not a sleeve you can tuck away
I do a lot of work and contribute everyday
Recommend I keep an aspirin between my legs?
Maybe you outta keep your men out of American Pies!

You're pretending to be stuck in the 40s man
You're trying the be a magnet to older crowd
I'll do what I can to make sure it bites you in the ass
Your respect barometer for women is down,

Just looking at you I get a seedy feeling
I picture you in a Vegas strip at a VIP Lounge
Taking advantage of troubled ladies stamped with hearts that are bleeding
You'll make sure you apply first aide
Enter a contract to give her one hell of a bonus on every payday!
edited by svlynn18 on 11/4/2012

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