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10/29/2012 7:48:02 AM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
Citizens of the world
Emotional turmoil is exploding like aVolcanic eruption
About 50% of you are broke and unemployed
Thanks to greed and corporate corruption
This month it's either eat or pay bills
Food is the best medicine for most, hunger kills
Eventually, hopefully, one day, someone will erase the bottom line
A hurricane of triumph mimic a large magical wind chime
Quality Assurance will mean something,not just a chart
Change will become more normal, not just a shot in the dark

Work in progress, ideas please?
edited by svlynn18 on 10/29/2012
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