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10/20/2012 3:38:55 AM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

That bottle of booze might be old news
But it never kept you from me

Your addiction switched from alcohol toher
She's tricked you to think I'm an evillittle girl

Possessed with her looks and mind
You had no problem leaving my existencebehind

Too much for you, shutting the doorseemed like the easiest choice
I hope every day for the the rest ofyour life you hear this child's voice

How does it feel to know you're notthere
When you look at her,
Does she have enough happiness to share
I can't imagine yours is real
So she'd have to have more than enoughto steal
For you to get by and fake
Your okay with your choices and yourfate

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