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10/14/2012 4:36:37 AM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
I can remember sitting in this place
Looking up got a sense of disgrace
No one is good enough
Must drink from the water
Most the people next to me forget
Under the rocks outside
There lies all the power
His love doesn't occur once a week,
Or one time or day
It's in you and your actions
You must exercise it to make it stay
He doesn't ask that you control others
He never tried to control you
He gave you options
Making decisions are what you have todo
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