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9/30/2012 12:46:30 AM Lynn Dolly Posts: 133	It's buried deep inside me Feels like know one will ever know, This ache that starts in my toes, I'd scream with all my might, All you'd hear are the echoes I may smile, Day by day Better to be the eagle in the sun Than drown like a chicken in rain I thank the above For pen and paper Allows me to drain my well Maybe help someone exfoliate theirshell edited by svlynn18 on 9/30/2012
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10/2/2012 3:28:34 PM Robert Johnson Posts: 1	svlynn18 wrote: It's buried deep inside me Feels like know one will ever know, This ache that starts in my toes, I'd scream with all my might, All you'd hear are the echoes I may smile, Day by day Better to be the eagle in the sun Than drown like a chicken in rain I thank the above For pen and paper Allows me to drain my well Maybe help someone exfoliate theirshell edited by svlynn18 on 9/30/2012
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10/2/2012 4:10:04 PM Lynn Dolly Posts: 133	It's not showing Roberts feedback on this page
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10/3/2012 1:44:05 PM Stephen Parker Posts: 5	svlynn18 wrote: It's buried deep inside me Feels like know one will ever know, This ache that starts in my toes, I'd scream with all my might, All you'd hear are the echoes I may smile, Day by day Better to be the eagle in the sun Than drown like a chicken in rain I thank the above For pen and paper Allows me to drain my well Maybe help someone exfoliate theirshell edited by svlynn18 on 9/30/2012
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10/3/2012 1:48:32 PM Stephen Parker Posts: 5	You probably need to define what "it" is. Is it: pain, loneliness, low self esteem? The last two lines are revealing, and create nice closure!
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