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4/29/2024 9:45:43 PM

Kirsten McC
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Hi all! I just wanted to say hi to everyone and I am so excited to have joined this forum to get feedback and read other people's work. I am fairly new to writing poetry and still figuring a lot of things out so please be gentle (as the title of this forum suggests)! Thanks in advance!

*warning: contains the F word*

7=1

It's first on the page, last in the mind

Anticipation kills the calm,

And then it comes, the beginning unwanted.

F*cking cyclical.

It's a little easier next, but we are still stuck fast

In this arbitrary world, time on a track made of dollar signs.

The middle is a place we can handle,

the comforting balance of a scale

then suddenly tipped in our favour,

one foot lifted from the quick sand breathes at last.

And we're there, the destination arrives,

the last in a vicious, uncaring sequence.

A night of possibilities, that seems endless,

opens and stretches like the limbs after a long car ride.

The moon rises and we are free.

One day to live, to do all, be all.

Perhaps this is why they say life is short.

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