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8/13/2012 10:44:29 PM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

It's date night,
in the car, going to the movies,

I begin to cry,

Try to hold back,

cant fight the insides,

salt, salt, and more salt covers my cheeks,

Want to see this movie,

spend time with my man

...this will pass in a minute,

Don't want to wreck happy times,

I've been holding it in,

Holding it in too long,

somethings is definitely wrong,

I admit defeat,

signs on the freeway seem weak,

I'm trying to sidetrack myself,

make this stop,

my sadness keeps coming out on top,

why now, why not later,

why is he ruining this,I don't like this behavior,

this is what happens when I ignore the obvious,

He'll be with me for life...I'll never get over his bite.
edited by svlynn18 on 8/14/2012

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