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8/7/2012 8:29:38 PM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

Talking in the kitchen,
All five of us are joking around,
One of us feels singles out,
From the counter pulls you off and your head meets the grout,

Suddenly you get up, start laughing,and the rest join.
You become possessed and punch him inthe back,
First can't tell what with but something with a point,
Suddenly everyone becomes victim of attack,
Strikes over and over until until he'son the floor,
You sound like the devil when he rours,

Environment has changed and we're surrounded by strangers,
They've come to witness the comedy show but now they're in danger,
They all scatter and run for their lives,
Escaping into fake staircases, walls, afew run into bee hives,

Somehow I just stand there, watch it happen,
No fear in me that I may become part of this,
I tell myself I need this info for the therapist,
No fear that I may be at risk,
Witnessing a demonic demonstration,
You want loved ones to feel intimidation.

Then I woke up..
edited by svlynn18 on 8/7/2012

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