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8/1/2012 8:50:54 AM Lynn Dolly Posts: 133	Not Fair When I Think it's done, My emotions become undone, I cried for hours for you, You always fail to come through, Not fair, I cry and cry My love will never die, Been 6 years for me. You live 10 min from me, Never bother to call, Apologize for sorrow you installed, Not fair, I cry and cry, My love for you will never die, Your the ass I cant shake, Thought I'd get over you, Huge mistake, With every milestone. Every happy moment, there's a part of me, your love would be my happy token Not fair,I cry and cry, My love for you will never die
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8/4/2012 12:40:24 AM femi joey oloidi Posts: 13	Nice and touching! I like, "your the ass,I can't shake" cool! Lol Kingfemi.
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