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1/21/2024 8:13:05 AM
Bob Atkinson Posts: 295
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Mona Lisa ***** Viale Niccolo on her right Boboli Gardens on her left the woman of subtle beauty lays her hands down to rest
the painter gives her words his frustration evident “...asked you to keep your hands laying by your side...,” he said
she smiled in appreciation of emotions she had brought to the surface of the man who no one else had mocked
“....you fool, you cannot tell me what to do here in my life I am not your concubine, neither am I your wife....”
he fumed at this sign of bravery on her part the chaotic situation brought him quickly to a stop
slamming down the painter's brush not motivated to continue on he stomped out of the room to walk quietly in the garden
she touched his hand so gently and kissed him on the neck she whispered softly in his ear “....you are such an impulsive man..
you have no thoughts for others concentrate only on your task you need to feel emotions that can be laid down with your colored paints
else, you'll be only one of many with talents large and small to freeze emotions fully takes bravado and fierce gall
so, dear let us return to the setting you have made and put into your painting that wild internal rage..."
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