Remarking Poems | Examples


Love Poetry a la carte

I thought:
why not write a love poem,
everyone is doing it,
how hard can it be?

First, I need a woman
(let's not drag my wife into this exercise),
a pet dog or cat perhaps.

Maybe some sexual content
(best to rule out the dog and cat).

Once I wrote about a certain flower
remarking upon its sprays of golden showers,
some smart ass wrote back asking
if I knew what the term 'golden showers' meant?
Got me thinking.

Probably need romantic sensitive moments
under moonlit glitzy stars -
pursed lips slurping up sticky passions.

What I got is a nice wife and a dopey-eyed dog,

just about enough I reckon.
Categories: remarking, poetry,
Form: Free verse

The Sky's Everlasting Spark

A girl named Sky, 
always hoped to fly high.

Her aura was as white as the clouds 
and her light could brighten the darkest of clouds.

You could always see her spark,
even in the dark,

The color of her eyes was as deep blue as the Pacific ocean;   
her skin, aureus 
and her mind, elysian.

The blush on her cheeks
and the way her eyes speak,
nothing was imperfect about her.

The dawn began to encapsulate 
as she slowly began to achromatize

When the cerulean dawn approached,
her glazing heart began to dwindle;
evanescing somewhere in the mountains.

Gradually the golden light ceased and became stygian,
but you could still see her rhinestone bracelet shining from somewhere in the middle of the dark,
remarking on her presence of still being there, 
but somewhere far away with an everlasting spark.
Categories: remarking, poetry, sky,
Form: Free verse


Moons Chasity

“The moon’s vision of humanity 
Was something that it once desired  
Tinkle, swoouf, it pondered  
As it’s luminescence gazed at its prodigious oceans  
The defunct dissection of the body fell into silence as it glanced back
Clish, clash, it wavered  
It’s fluorescence gestured odiously 
Enraging it’s radiance with envy 
Woosh, clasps, oceans grew in his incensed intention  
It never had a society that walked on its ground 
A place, that humans recall home 
stomp, clasp, It thought
Oceans trickled with peril as the moon grew its waves   
Slash, sloosh, the clutter that pollutes the water clustered against its weight  
The moon then rebounded; remarking the objects  
Sling slang, swoosh, oceans sang it's mercy  
It’s reminiscence then discerned the cunning truth  
“The grass always seems greener on the other side”
Categories: remarking, community, conflict, confusion, discrimination,
Form: Other

Premium MemberNot Prejudiced But

I’m in no way prejudiced she said
But that one is white and that one is mixed
Skin color prominent in her head
Always remarking on it; her mind fixed
Categories: remarking, prejudice,
Form: Rhyme

Finding Equilibrium Through the Depths of Solitude

Socially unorganized, I place critics down a size
Standing with preferred confidence gave me insight
Partially adapted from the root of fear
I sometimes hear my inner voice remarking that my time is near

Position to overcome challenging courses
By altering our contained nature to make stronger choices 
Often at the mill I witness the loud of noises
I either adjust or continue breathing in the poison and drown in my salty ocean


Maybe tears can be manufactured through happy times
Is it weird I fake my laughter through your own surprises 

Some may question my ability to think and process
I reveal the sources to my brightened conscience

Assemble the many gears we set in stone
Ever wonder what's it's like to be thrown?

My past creates a memory lane for me to see
I rather improve my empathy willing to still believe

In love with a spirit because I glance swiftly while there is no in sight
Passport to find true family as I hunch over my seat, in hopes to discover actual happiness during a safe flight
Categories: remarking, imagery, light, missing, political,
Form: Prose Poetry


A Night of Elegance

The night has come, and the elegance begins.
Everyone arrives, dressed in their finest;
Some who resemble royalty waltz in,
Many people remarking to them, "your highness."

They gather around to socialize and converse;
Most of them complement each other on their looks.
Then all of a sudden the band plays a song without a single verse;
Every being in the room becomes quite shook.

With every note and sound played, everyone becomes mesmerized.
The song that is played I don't quite know how to pronounce.
Everyone is taken aback.
All the worries in the room have suddenly been denounced.

Then a giant demon come out of the tomb.
Give me happiness.
I feel as if my tears are spurring
Eat me I want you to eat me.

I have no meaning in this world.
Give me black eyeliner
I ran out the other day
I need to eat it.
Categories: remarking, adventure, appreciation, art, beauty,
Form: ABC

Premium MemberWithin a Gilded Frame

wandering the rooms of the art gallery was bliss
and soon, I found myself in the rooms of Gothic and Renaissance
I could just fall into the frames and become part of the paintings
the beauty is tragic and beautiful, the colors sublime
his eyes follow me and whisper-  come my beauty
a painting of a man, I stand staring at it
his dark eyes are fathomless pools-   I am drawn to him
I could  l o v e  this man within a frame, old
I want to stroke his long, soft raven hair
kiss his full lips and hands-
breath life into his body . . . 
then he reaches out for me . . . all I have to do is take his hand 
within a gilded frame at the art gallery, a handsome raven haired man
kisses the ruby lips of a beautiful woman, who is weeping
many pass,  remarking on how beautiful and in love the couple are . . .

____________________________
April 26, 2016



Poetry/Free Verse/Within A Gilded Frame
Copyright Protected, ID 16- 782-911-0
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.


Submitted to the contest, Free Verse On Love
sponsor, Laura Loo

Second Place
Categories: remarking, art,
Form: Free verse

Premium MemberWide-Eyed Dreamers

 



*Entry for Gail’s “Sandcastles by the Seashore” contest
By Carolyn Devonshire
Categories: remarking, childhood, sea,
Form: Free verse

Sloppy Seconds

and the whole time that the big family meal had been going on
sister went to pass the bowl of Manwich, but brother, being the
vegetarian now (having changed so since leaving the nest to college)
shook his head slowly with food in his mouth (salted baby Yukon Golds) &
sister scanned the rest of the table when her cousin (the attractive lawyer who moved to LA) threw up her hand remarking that she’d like some, sister who never liked her
“hot” cousin who never passed up a moment to rub her success in the face of everyone, replied “oh, i didn’t know that you did sloppy seconds---“
Categories: remarking, life, cousin,
Form: Free verse

Choices

Stay now with me , and listen to my sighs,
Bidding me to drain the curse and know it all.
	Feigned that I spake ill of thee,
As to who beholds two currents thwart amid
	the fluctous profound.

	Pass , pass upon your way , for 
I grow never old...and townward take to their
	whirring flight. That o'er the green 
cornfield did pass as I trembled.
Remarking how ill we are ; all 
		dissembled.
Hands, that the rod of empire might have 
swayed, in one long yelllow string wound.
	Tell how they lived and died
not heeding to the blight.
	Dying in distant music, even as it came...
upon the fated night ,  gloomy encompassing 
	thee around.
And in the green underwood and cover, up ,
	from the mystic play of shadows twining
and twisting as if they were alive...
	Mindful the while that thus time flies for you,
That I myself was not more whimsical. Burning
	more truely as it dwells, than 
where the lights scatter amid two voices.
	And all else is silent & perfect
with my choices.
Categories: remarking, angst, art, devotion, fantasy,
Form: Free verse
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