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Youth's Vim and Vigor

Bedtime a time of quiet remembering Surely there is the Whip-poor-will's call Definitely thrice was the ghost calling No_only an old woman's dream in fall Now my life seems to pass uneven As a winter's night storm first rain _ice Wrestling against old age soon engraven Longing for youth's vim and vigor thrice Somehow there'll be a brand new season Spring soon will spring_ridding earth of ice There will be a very great reunion Where the birds and butterflies entice To all things good or bad there are seasons Now flash forward__to forever spring paradise (Se terminer) Don't tell me wrong count!..Poetic license

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 2/7/2011 6:25:00 PM
Sara, since I'm not familiar with sonnet form, I have no idea if there's anything wrong! Poetic license works for me LOL I like this, it comes from the heart;) Thanks for the comment on my limerick, my first attempt;) it was more challenging than I thought! sonnets are next to try:)
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Date: 2/7/2011 2:33:00 PM
Hon, I love the way you finished this as a sonnet. Excellent use of the form and the upbeat ending is very welcome. Great piece of introspection here, Sara. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/6/2011 11:50:00 AM
Sara, I'm also"wrestling against old age" and appreciated the comparison of this to the onset of winter. Let me know when it's done, dear. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/6/2011 9:03:00 AM
Such great rhyme and descriptiveness. You are well on your way to glory with this. Robert is not the only one who can rhyme here.
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Date: 2/6/2011 8:48:00 AM
i love the sweet, fancy feel of this write, sara... you're not getting older, just wiser!! :) hugggs, nette
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Date: 2/6/2011 8:13:00 AM
your off to a great start nice rhyme on your part
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