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Young Woman At Her Sill

She dreamt in smoky salmon clouds of dawn,
forsaking violets of bitter truth,
that he had stayed and not to heaven gone
still in the cherry blossom of his youth,

that umber hair and eyes he still possessed
and held her gently in his solemn gaze
whilst with his mustached lips he did profess
that he would love her til the end of days.

And that he did, but died as yet to keep
it ever true, and now she sits alone
to look away as jacarandas weep
in June and fledglings in their blush have flown.

She sits alone with tawny braids a-fray
as dreams of his returning fill her day.

She sits alone, eyes closed as if asleep
before her early window dark and chill.
But now awake pretending cannot keep
the truth away; she shakes against her will.

She breaks another nail against the glass
whilst reaching for the strength to keep her hold
on life and hopes the agate specters pass
that she is empty and her heart is cold,

but for a verdant wish:  'tis illusion.
Now she can calm herself and breathe relief.
What passed were dire lilacs of delusion; 
she's now protected from imagined grief.

She sits alone, young woman at her sill.
Continues dreaming he is with her still.

1st Place
She Sits Alone Contest
Sponsor:  Eve Roper
8/4/17
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Roper Avatar
August 13, 2017 at 8:07 PM
Thank you for entering my contest, Dale , very sad, well-crafted poem with great imagery , fantastic flow, and rhyme. Congratulations on your win. ~*
Cozart Avatar
August 13, 2017 at 8:19 PM
Thank you so very much, Eve.
Sands Avatar
August 13, 2017 at 6:08 PM
Congratulations Dale! :)
Cozart Avatar
August 13, 2017 at 7:38 PM
Thanks so much, Heidi.
Ashley Avatar
August 13, 2017 at 5:58 PM
Dale, a truly magnificent poem, the imagery and emotion so strong and vivid. Congratulations on your win!
Cozart Avatar
August 13, 2017 at 7:38 PM
Thanks you so much, Susan.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
August 8, 2017 at 3:23 AM
Oh u have on a young woman too, a widow. Awesome rhyming, and the jacaranda personification was so admirable. You have such great word choice and phrasing too, , like ' verdant wish, lilacs of delusion, cherry blossom of youth, and I'm a flowerlover maniac so it pleases me even more. Kudos for this somber delight. Cheers n best wishes, I say your name is quite poetic, melodic too, rhymes with Mozart, I must say.
Cozart Avatar
August 8, 2017 at 8:09 AM
Thanks you very much!
Allison Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 7:46 PM
Wow Dale the imagery is awesome and I love the emotions linked to the colours - you have excelled with a double sonnet I struggle writing just one!:-) Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
Cozart Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 7:47 PM
Thanks, Jan!!
Sands Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 5:33 PM
Wow Dale! You really have done an amazing write here for the contest! Excellent :)
Cozart Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 5:36 PM
Thanks, Heidi.
Pandit Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 5:28 PM
You have wonderful gift of imagination. I saw the portrait---but you saw so much more!
Cozart Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 5:32 PM
Thanks, Vijay!
Krampe Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 5:14 PM
Dale, this is marvellous. Already the imagery in the first two lines is a gem. You wove an entire story around the painting - this should be a winner. Best of luck.
Cozart Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 5:20 PM
Thanks, Agnes. I enjoyed writing it. It's my fifth sonnet and while initially daunting they have started to get easier(somehow, I'm really not sure why). But I have to keep reading.
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