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You Were the Purpose of My Life

You were the purpose of my life 
you were the reason of my smile
Without you I m hollow, I can t swallow
I Can't eat, why shouldn't I let out of breath?
There s only one thing which is grieve

You were the reason why I smile 
I still remember you shouting fighting
It was like a lightning 
But everytime I woke up which was usually at nine
I still remember the apologies in your eyes
telling me everytime  that it was fine 
You just don t know how lonely I m without you 
You just don t know how much I ve cried every second waiting for you 

You were the purpose of my life 
Without you I can t eat,I don t want to go to bed to sleep
The pressure I feel is very deep 
Oh again it s the grieve 

I still clearly remember your blue beautiful eyes with blonde hairs
Your perfect skin and your body language and talks absolutely fair

You gave me the time of my life 
Giving me a purpose to live
Making me who I m now
But my smile which was with you is nowhere to found

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Viv Wigley Date: 7/25/2018 7:08:00 AM Very deep and heartfelt work, Faraz, impressive. Regards, Viv Login to Reply

Susan Ashley Date: 7/21/2018 3:52:00 PM A sadly beautiful and emotional first poem posted here at PS Faraz. The raw ache of your heartbreak is palpable and your poetic expression is so poignant.. Your last stanza really reaches in deeply and squeezes my heart. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan Login to Reply

Yuhi Musinga Date: 4/9/2018 3:35:00 AM i love the content of this poem Login to Reply

Muhammad Imtiaz Date: 2/23/2018 11:19:00 AM beautiful expression of your sad feelings of your loved one Login to Reply

Silent One Date: 2/11/2018 3:07:00 PM A well written piece wit ha few grammar issues, if you ever need any help, feel free to ask.. Login to Reply

Andrea Storrier Date: 12/11/2017 6:52:00 PM Beautifully written and the raw emotion in this piece really touched me. Well done!!! Login to Reply

Sarah Sublett Date: 12/11/2017 8:33:00 AM We all know this feeling all too well. Beautiful write and expression. Login to Reply

Hardik Gala Date: 10/11/2017 4:39:00 AM Faraz, This poem is really beautiful. How you described all the emotions that you felt and written beautifully Login to Reply

Dave Timperley Date: 8/31/2017 7:04:00 AM Faraz, if the road of life was like a flat and featureless motorway it would so boring. It is however up hill and down hill. Peaks and troughs, good times and hard times. It is all a learning curve. I love this work of yours and will read more later. Login to Reply

Sandy Tadros Date: 8/22/2017 8:23:00 AM These words are very sweet especially the last verse. Login to Reply

Robert Lindley Date: 7/29/2017 8:17:00 AM Great first offering here. As noted by others, and knowing that English language is not your mother tongue, this shows true poetic talent. I'd love to see your poems after grammar and spelling mistakes are corrected. Login to Reply

Alisa Balaieva Date: 7/23/2017 5:47:00 AM The title is so expressively touching. Sometimes people leave and it seems that there's no option except shed a tear. Everything seems so hopeless and nonsense. But it's great that people are able to become even stronger than they were before. Nice work. Login to Reply

L.C. Jarrette Date: 7/8/2017 6:55:00 AM i love the content of this poem...i really wish i could make romantic poems such as this one.keep writing! :) Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 6/30/2017 2:59:00 PM Hi Faraz, as everyone has said the content is touching. Download & use Grammarly it is free. Also, remember the first & last words of every line are important so begin & end with a strong word! Think of verses as paragraphs. [do repost once ycorrections]Light & Love Login to Reply

Bette Bavington Date: 6/19/2017 8:02:00 PM Welcome to Poetry Soup. I hope it works out for you. Since English doesn't seem to be your native tongue I give you kudos. It is wonderful to be in love and to lose someone is catastrophic as you have said. Nice writing. Login to Reply

John Beam Date: 6/18/2017 8:21:00 PM Hi, Faraz. I like this the best but i will soup mail the rest to you Login to Reply

The Brooklyn Six Project Date: 6/18/2017 2:53:00 PM Well written poem here Faraz. Always care for your significant other in times of happiness and in times of grief. Just continue to be there. Login to Reply

John-Ovan.P. Hull Date: 6/17/2017 5:47:00 PM Greetings Faraz welcome to poetrysoup and thankyou for sharing. For someone who's new on the site you've had a lot of views. Also thanks for checking out my poem (just out of curiosity, how did you find that poem?) I'm going with the crowds this time with regards to this poem, I liked it a lot, the general anatomy of the poem was great, but some of the bones were out of place. I hope you don't mind, but I'd never done any copy editing before and I had an empty head and a blank page, so I'm going to try to send you a soupmail (if my phone will allow me to)of how I personally would switch a few things around. Login to Reply Kay Roberts Date: 6/21/2017 6:55:00 AM Hi John. In regards to your query about the Soup Mail. I think you have to be following the poet, however you can also search the name and send it that way. At least that's what I had to do the other day when I wanted to send a mail to someone. I hope this helps. Regards Kay John-Ovan.P. Hull Date: 6/17/2017 6:24:00 PM I'm not sure if you have to activate soupmail? I just tried to send it to you but I could only send mail to about 5people? I'm not sure how to send it to you? Any help please soupers?

Funom Makama Date: 6/17/2017 10:04:00 AM Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure. Login to Reply

Jocelyn Dunbar Date: 6/14/2017 8:03:00 PM Sometimes our emotion is deep as we felt the feeling in that moment time. But as we look at the situation do not forget that love is two to tango. If you give love, you need to receive back if not, do not waste your emotion to someone not willing to. In life waiting and patience is the most important tools of having a right someone in life. Believing in love story is exciting and interesting moment in life. It will come. Login to Reply

Debbie Duncan Date: 6/14/2017 2:26:00 PM This is very nice write, aside from the grammar mistakes. Before you post you should check your spelling. But your words in the poem are very nice. Welcome to poetry soup. And thank you for reading my Her Tears :) Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 6/12/2017 6:50:00 PM You have reached the reader to feel what you are feeling with this one. That alone is a success with a poem :) Login to Reply

Molly Pryor Date: 6/11/2017 10:44:00 AM Hello Faraz, this poem is brilliant and reminds me of a favourite poem of mine (she walks in beauty), your poem seems to grasp feelings over a period of time. However be careful with your punctuation and grammar! Also, your poem seems to lack a structure! Other than that, this is a brilliant poem, Well Done! Login to Reply

Elle Smith Date: 6/11/2017 5:55:00 AM Hello Faraz :) I'm a newbie but will review your poem as requested. I read this poem & for me it's all about capturing feelings. You have done this, especially the pain & anguish. That's the hard part! Just think the poem would be improved with work on structure, grammar & spelling. I often have poems 'in limbo' for months 'waiting' for the structure & even the right words.. but it's GREAT as I can feel of the pain & good memories too! Well done, as it's never easy to express feelings of love :) Login to Reply

Vivien Wade Date: 6/10/2017 1:07:00 AM Hi Faraz, Like you I am very new to this site I read The Purpose of My Life, and it showed depth of meaning. Blonde hairs should be hair to rhyme with fair. Some lines too long. I find it helpful to count syllables in lines. you say you can't swallow, then can't eat which is tautology. without you I can't even swallow, I don't sleep, continue to grieve Without you I am left hollow. All writing is re-writing. Blessings, Vivien Login to Reply

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