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For the Glenn Hughes contest by Robert James Liquori

 

I wanted to be your Captain America, but I feel like the remorseful 'Joker,' who has lost his 'Harley Quinn.' Do you recall our first song, how I strummed guitar strings to reflect our romantic symphonies, but now all I hear are unfinished lyrics. The flowers we planted now wilt, as you left them unattended. I tried to release all the budgerigars, but they slump in their cage with broken wings. You left me abandoned, where the wildcats cry. I'm lost, alone in an asylum of angst, ready to erupt like a firework fuse, as slowly, sanity vanishes in flashes. The weight of my tears sting like acid on my cracked porcelain skin, as lungs collapse from screaming, like a broken brittle bridge, unable to hold the burdens - all that remains is brick and mortar. I don't want to live among the shattered pieces you left behind, so I travel from Jersey shores, to ivory sand dunes, building castles, but you keep on moving, so racing waves wash them away. Empty echoes and silent rooms, mean my heart dissolves like those sand particles, lying upon the sea bed, resembling ruptured dreams. As the Red Oak trees release their leaves, they prepare a scarlet carpet, adorning you in admiration, hoping you return to me in the fall. I won't forget nor stop loving you until my last breath and if I'm fortunate, maybe you will place a bouquet, perfumed in your tenderness upon my final resting place. .

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Date: 12/6/2024 3:18:00 AM
There isn’t anything more rewarding than writing and sharing a Glenn Hughes inspired poem. Your poem here is very entertaining and emotional. Thanks for the write and entering. Luck has it that there is a new Glenn Hughes contest running…
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Date: 9/18/2024 4:15:00 PM
One could not help but feel the tone of this poem. I loved the last stanza. Beautiful writing
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Date: 9/17/2024 12:37:00 PM
Separation and circumstance of the heart is always a devastation to all involved, beautiful Kelli
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Date: 9/16/2024 9:12:00 AM
Hello SO, Oh, the turmoil of break up and pain so well said and laid out. I think that we have all been there and your words have expressed our feelings so well. I loved these lines. "I won't forget nor stop loving you until my last breath and if I'm fortunate, maybe you will place a bouquet, perfumed in your tenderness upon my final resting place." Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 9/16/2024 8:14:00 AM
A very beautiful poem filled with reflection and heartbreak, the passion is felt, and the sad melody is heard.
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Date: 9/16/2024 7:07:00 AM
beautiful flow. congratulations dear poet.
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Date: 9/16/2024 6:02:00 AM
How beautiful... full of emotion and passion causing the reader to feel each word as we would the notes of music... nothing stirs the passions like music and you've captured that in words! Amazing! Xo
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Crystol Woods
Date: 9/16/2024 6:02:00 AM
A fav for me!
Date: 9/15/2024 3:28:00 PM
Hello Silent One, A love that went wrong. is so sad and heart breaking. I sense the love you felt for her was one sided. Yo side was fi;led with love. yet hers was not. My dear friend enjoy your evening. /Darlene/
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Date: 9/15/2024 12:54:00 PM
Dear silent one, its good to see you write after a while! And wow so many brilliant metaphors and so much depth in these words! This song must be really touching! I love the opening lines, with harley quinn etc, sounds unique! To be included in a poem. And i love how descriptive it is, shows and emanates hints of grief in such an eloquent manner! Some songs stay forever as our faves, no matter what, and the ending depicts timeless love! “As the Red Oak trees release their leaves,they prepare a scarlet carpet, adorning you in admiration, hoping you return to me in the fall.” Wow how do you come up with such imagery? I wouldnt know! This is one of those poems that made me tear up a little
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/15/2024 12:56:00 PM
Every word woven in this feels like its carefully done, to express exactly what the song says! I think this poem, robert will love too! Best wishes for the contest dear silent one! Your poems are awe inspiring and touching and so very soulful! I must also highlight this line “ I'm lost, alone in an asylum of angst, ready to erupt like a firework fuse, as slowly, sanity vanishes in flashes.” heart wrenching! Fave it is! Best wishes. Sending you light always

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