You Hide Beneath the Cross Your Sins

in the corner
of smoke filled pool hall
you sat peering
as you quaffed another beer

your umber eyes
locked in the beryl
of mine
lost temporarily
in the depths

you flashed a smile
that seemed to glow
beneath the dimmed lights

my eyes unlocked
in a downward shift
as i couldn't help but notice
the shimmer of gold
contouring your neck
its intricate design
delicately detailed
of the Christ child
as he hung
on splintered wood
when he died
in vain for our sins

my heart skipped
with the soft music
in the background

you approached
hands extended

I trusted in God,
then in you
a whirl around
as months flew by
like fists in rage

now memories flash back
in my wondering;

would you have worn
splintered wood instead
for salvation of your sins?


8/23/2019
One Hundred Thirty Six Words Poetry Contest 
Sponsored by John Lawless
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Mcgee Avatar
September 14, 2019 at 7:31 AM
Powerful ending! Congrats on a top win with this great poem.
Kendrick Avatar
September 11, 2019 at 8:26 AM
Not sure of whom you speak in the last stanza of Christ or your boyfriend? Congrats on your winning work.
Adams Avatar
September 11, 2019 at 9:05 AM
the abuser that hides behind a cross.... thank you for your visit today :) hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
September 10, 2019 at 5:22 PM
Glad to see you get a win for this piece. Congrats Rick.
Adams Avatar
September 11, 2019 at 9:06 AM
Thank you so much Rick :) hugs
Dietrich Avatar
September 10, 2019 at 4:52 PM
wow, so profound, Sandy. I love your approach to this theme, which is sadly something all to prevalent in our world. Congrats. this is one of my favorites I have read.
Adams Avatar
September 11, 2019 at 9:07 AM
Thank you my friend....just what came to mind that day :) hugs
Chiri Avatar
September 9, 2019 at 8:58 PM
See the beauty of this was right on! Congratulations on a well deserved win!;)
Adams Avatar
September 9, 2019 at 9:23 PM
Thank you. I had to scale it back a little to make the word count but was happy with the way it turned out:) hugs
Lawless Avatar
September 9, 2019 at 5:40 PM
The charlatans of chance haunt and hunt the unwary...Nice write Sandra, the short, direct line breaks accentuated the staccato of the pace....thanks for entering the contest
Adams Avatar
September 9, 2019 at 6:16 PM
Thank you for the placement and for hosting this contest John :) hugs
Godwin Avatar
August 26, 2019 at 1:56 AM
Deep, complex and profound all abound in this spellbinding tale. The ending was hard-hitting and perfect! Good luck in the contest and all else. Poetry hugs .... CayCay
Adams Avatar
August 26, 2019 at 7:18 AM
thank you my sweet friend... :) hugs
Mcconnell Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 2:30 PM
Fine write Sandra, extremely well penned especially keeping to the exact number of words. Very impressive! Blessings,Gordon
Adams Avatar
August 26, 2019 at 7:18 AM
Thank you Gordon...you don't realize how fast 136 words can fall... hugs :)
Andresen Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 7:57 AM
- An impressive poem, Sandra - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Adams Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 11:06 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise...it was a fun contest to write for... hugs :)
Krutsinger Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 6:52 AM
In 136 words you have perfected a poem that describes life perfectly, a perfect perfect poem, Sandra.
Adams Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 11:05 AM
Thank you so much Caren...when penning you don't realize how quickly 136 words fall... loved the challenge of a word limit...hugs :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 6:48 PM
Your ideas are so unique Sandra. I always know I will be pleased with whatever I read coming from you. This is fantastic! coco
Adams Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 7:16 PM
i often tie life experiences or emotions in my writes, this one was part fiction, we met at the ocean, beneath fireworks, boardwalk music playing with the fireworks, it's a friday night thing at my favorite beach...he wore a huge cross, talked about God and religion...he masked the real him...pity.... thank you for your kind comment... hugs :)
One Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 6:50 AM
wow... you did so well with just 136 words..
Adams Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 6:59 AM
Thank you my friend. I had to work from a thought etch the write and then scale back a bit to get it to sit at 136 :) hugs
Rose  Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 5:39 AM
You take us to an in depth account of a life riveted in Faith, I love it. perfect in every sense Sandra. xo
Adams Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 7:01 AM
Thank you. I am not sure if people like this think it will be their salvation from sin or if they just want others to believe they are religious ... :) hugs
Warrior Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 4:10 AM
A diamond in the rough...a poetic star is born...I bow...^WW^
Adams Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 7:01 AM
Thank you WW for you kind comment :) hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 12:50 AM
I like your take on the contest. Well done Sandra.
Adams Avatar
August 24, 2019 at 7:03 AM
Thank you Rick... I had to scale it back a bit to fall within the word count :) hugs
Flaherty Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 5:49 PM
Fashion Statement Or True Conviction Its like the Plastic Bangles W.W.J.D Or Poppy Badge. Image or Projection
Flaherty Avatar
August 27, 2019 at 8:24 PM
So True
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 8:10 PM
guess it's a fashion statement until they show their true colors where it then becomes their conviction :) thanks for the visit and comment!
Hamilton Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 2:39 PM
Beer in a pool hall...maybe not the best place to find true love lol...we all make mistakes but hopefully we learn from them. I enjoyed the narration and the free verse mix and the twist in the end. I think John will like this one, as I do.
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 5:37 PM
Lol it’s partly fictional I don’t drink or shoot pool. Met the monster under fireworks by the ocean on the boardwalk... boasted to be very religious part of attempt to hide the real him. True colors always come out eventually no matter how nice they paint the picture! Thanks for making me laugh with your comment :) hugs
Pigeon Tart Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 2:27 PM
Wow. Can't find words, so, another wow, and my virtual vote for a win. ;), xomo
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 5:38 PM
Thank you Maureen, partially fiction but it made the story better :) hugs
Wolf Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 2:00 PM
I like the way you narrated this, though I had that feeling about this guy... Gotta watch out for those who wear their religion on their sleeve--- or around their neck(s). G.L. in the contest! Best wishes, gw
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 5:42 PM
Thanks Gershon all he talked about was God and answered prayers took me around religious friends and to church... he was related to one of my best friends husbands and though I met him in another state while vacationing he was from my area of pa... it didn’t take long for the truth to arise :) hugs
Green Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 11:13 AM
Well there goes my chances of winning. :) Loved this 136 word poetic story Sandra. There is a deep message here that finds it's way to the surface. Really nicely done. I really enjoyed the format of this, it began soft while building as I read leading to an ending that was wonderfully crafted. Best wishes in the contest.
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 11:22 AM
lol actually i thought your poem was wonderful...and thank you i had to cut words and condense once i had the whole poem laid out... thanks for reading and your wonderful comment :) hugs
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