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You Hide Beneath the Cross Your Sins

in the corner of smoke filled pool hall you sat peering as you quaffed another beer your umber eyes locked in the beryl of mine lost temporarily in the depths you flashed a smile that seemed to glow beneath the dimmed lights my eyes unlocked in a downward shift as i couldn't help but notice the shimmer of gold contouring your neck its intricate design delicately detailed of the Christ child as he hung on splintered wood when he died in vain for our sins my heart skipped with the soft music in the background you approached hands extended I trusted in God, then in you a whirl around as months flew by like fists in rage now memories flash back in my wondering; would you have worn splintered wood instead for salvation of your sins? 8/23/2019 One Hundred Thirty Six Words Poetry Contest Sponsored by John Lawless

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Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 9/14/2019 7:31:00 AM

Powerful ending! Congrats on a top win with this great poem.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/11/2019 8:26:00 AM

Not sure of whom you speak in the last stanza of Christ or your boyfriend? Congrats on your winning work.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/11/2019 9:05:00 AM

the abuser that hides behind a cross.... thank you for your visit today :) hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/10/2019 5:22:00 PM

Glad to see you get a win for this piece. Congrats Rick.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/11/2019 9:06:00 AM

Thank you so much Rick :) hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/10/2019 4:52:00 PM

wow, so profound, Sandy. I love your approach to this theme, which is sadly something all to prevalent in our world. Congrats. this is one of my favorites I have read.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/11/2019 9:07:00 AM

Thank you my friend....just what came to mind that day :) hugs

Brenda Chiri

Date: 9/9/2019 8:58:00 PM

See the beauty of this was right on! Congratulations on a well deserved win!;)

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/9/2019 9:23:00 PM

Thank you. I had to scale it back a little to make the word count but was happy with the way it turned out:) hugs

John Lawless

Date: 9/9/2019 5:40:00 PM

The charlatans of chance haunt and hunt the unwary...Nice write Sandra, the short, direct line breaks accentuated the staccato of the pace....thanks for entering the contest

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/9/2019 6:16:00 PM

Thank you for the placement and for hosting this contest John :) hugs

Caycay Jennings

Date: 8/26/2019 1:56:00 AM

Deep, complex and profound all abound in this spellbinding tale. The ending was hard-hitting and perfect! Good luck in the contest and all else. Poetry hugs .... CayCay

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/26/2019 7:18:00 AM

thank you my sweet friend... :) hugs

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 8/25/2019 2:30:00 PM

Fine write Sandra, extremely well penned especially keeping to the exact number of words. Very impressive! Blessings,Gordon

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/26/2019 7:18:00 AM

Thank you Gordon...you don't realize how fast 136 words can fall... hugs :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/25/2019 7:57:00 AM

- An impressive poem, Sandra - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/25/2019 11:06:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise...it was a fun contest to write for... hugs :)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/25/2019 6:52:00 AM

In 136 words you have perfected a poem that describes life perfectly, a perfect perfect poem, Sandra.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/25/2019 11:05:00 AM

Thank you so much Caren...when penning you don't realize how quickly 136 words fall... loved the challenge of a word limit...hugs :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/24/2019 6:48:00 PM

Your ideas are so unique Sandra. I always know I will be pleased with whatever I read coming from you. This is fantastic! coco

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/24/2019 7:16:00 PM

i often tie life experiences or emotions in my writes, this one was part fiction, we met at the ocean, beneath fireworks, boardwalk music playing with the fireworks, it's a friday night thing at my favorite beach...he wore a huge cross, talked about God and religion...he masked the real him...pity.... thank you for your kind comment... hugs :)

Silent One

Date: 8/24/2019 6:50:00 AM

wow... you did so well with just 136 words..

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/24/2019 6:59:00 AM

Thank you my friend. I had to work from a thought etch the write and then scale back a bit to get it to sit at 136 :) hugs

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/24/2019 5:39:00 AM

You take us to an in depth account of a life riveted in Faith, I love it. perfect in every sense Sandra. xo

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/24/2019 7:01:00 AM

Thank you. I am not sure if people like this think it will be their salvation from sin or if they just want others to believe they are religious ... :) hugs

Winged Warrior

Date: 8/24/2019 4:10:00 AM

A diamond in the rough...a poetic star is born...I bow...^WW^

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/24/2019 7:01:00 AM

Thank you WW for you kind comment :) hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/24/2019 12:50:00 AM

I like your take on the contest. Well done Sandra.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/24/2019 7:03:00 AM

Thank you Rick... I had to scale it back a bit to fall within the word count :) hugs

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 8/23/2019 5:49:00 PM

Fashion Statement Or True Conviction Its like the Plastic Bangles W.W.J.D Or Poppy Badge. Image or Projection

Christopher Flaherty
Date: 8/27/2019 8:24:00 PM

So True

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2019 8:10:00 PM

guess it's a fashion statement until they show their true colors where it then becomes their conviction :) thanks for the visit and comment!

John Hamilton

Date: 8/23/2019 2:39:00 PM

Beer in a pool hall...maybe not the best place to find true love lol...we all make mistakes but hopefully we learn from them. I enjoyed the narration and the free verse mix and the twist in the end. I think John will like this one, as I do.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2019 5:37:00 PM

Lol it’s partly fictional I don’t drink or shoot pool. Met the monster under fireworks by the ocean on the boardwalk... boasted to be very religious part of attempt to hide the real him. True colors always come out eventually no matter how nice they paint the picture! Thanks for making me laugh with your comment :) hugs

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 8/23/2019 2:27:00 PM

Wow. Can't find words, so, another wow, and my virtual vote for a win. ;), xomo

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2019 5:38:00 PM

Thank you Maureen, partially fiction but it made the story better :) hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/23/2019 2:00:00 PM

I like the way you narrated this, though I had that feeling about this guy... Gotta watch out for those who wear their religion on their sleeve--- or around their neck(s). G.L. in the contest! Best wishes, gw

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2019 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Gershon all he talked about was God and answered prayers took me around religious friends and to church... he was related to one of my best friends husbands and though I met him in another state while vacationing he was from my area of pa... it didn’t take long for the truth to arise :) hugs

Chris Green

Date: 8/23/2019 11:13:00 AM

Well there goes my chances of winning. :) Loved this 136 word poetic story Sandra. There is a deep message here that finds it's way to the surface. Really nicely done. I really enjoyed the format of this, it began soft while building as I read leading to an ending that was wonderfully crafted. Best wishes in the contest.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2019 11:22:00 AM

lol actually i thought your poem was wonderful...and thank you i had to cut words and condense once i had the whole poem laid out... thanks for reading and your wonderful comment :) hugs