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You Can'T Hide Your Lying Eyes

The truth stood downcast in the lie
I know you’ve fibbed; I have the proof
You cannot look me in the eye
Still adamant you told the truth

I love to watch you backpedal
The truth stood downcast in the lie
Don’t lie to me… there’s no medal
Your mum you think you can defy

Did you eat all the apple pie? 
(Crumbs are visible on your face)
The truth stood downcast in the lie
You grin and say the pie was ace!

You say sorry, and then we hug,
Your hunger you did satisfy
I ask you did you eat the slug!
The truth stood downcast in the lie



The truth stood downcast in the lie contest Sponsored by John Lawless
Title of the poem is from a line from 'Lyin Eyes' by the Eagles

32 syllables per stanza checked with how many syllables

07/27/16

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White Wolf September 23, 2016 at 3:10 AM The end bit got me! Haha, well done. Jan Allison September 23, 2016 at 4:15 AM I love making the reader to think of one thing and then having a twist at the end of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Larry Bradfield August 27, 2016 at 4:29 PM Absolutely love the twist. Excellent!..Larry Jan Allison September 23, 2016 at 4:14 AM Thanks Larry:-) hugs Jan xx

Sushma A. Singh August 27, 2016 at 6:18 AM Congrats! A refreshing take on the subject. Jan Allison August 27, 2016 at 6:39 AM Thanks so much Sushma:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser August 26, 2016 at 11:19 PM Congrats on your win, Jan! Jan Allison August 27, 2016 at 5:47 AM Thanks Laura :-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe August 26, 2016 at 10:16 PM Congrats, Jan. Love the twist :) Jan Allison August 27, 2016 at 5:47 AM Thanks Agnes I do like having a surprising ending on some of my poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Arnone August 26, 2016 at 7:40 PM The slug? Ha, ha. Congrats, Jan. :-) Jan Allison August 27, 2016 at 5:46 AM Nothing worse than finding a slug in your food .. except for finding half a slug lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight August 26, 2016 at 3:16 PM Loved it, Jan, especially the twist mid-way and at the end! Congrats on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison August 26, 2016 at 3:20 PM Thanks Sandra I wasn't sure if John would like a humourous take on the theme but I was delighted to be on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars August 26, 2016 at 10:52 AM Jan, congrats on your placement lovely lady :)-luloo Jan Allison August 26, 2016 at 10:56 AM Thanks so much LuLoo the humour paid off in this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless August 26, 2016 at 9:19 AM Jan, thanks for the humorous take on the theme. Me mom would always say "Now look me in the eye and tell me that." But the apple pie was always worth it. Thanks for participating in the contest. Jan Allison August 26, 2016 at 10:56 AM I'm delighted you liked my take on the theme John:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Schneiter August 10, 2016 at 5:41 PM How utterly delightful! I hung onto every line. I think only you could have written it. Superb, that--in a word--is what it is. hugs x x x Jan Allison August 10, 2016 at 5:58 PM Thanks Paul I do love the contests to inspire me to write in different forms:-) hugs Jan x

Arthur Vaso July 30, 2016 at 1:27 AM Very well written, and I am sure many have read the message! Jan Allison July 30, 2016 at 6:56 AM I went for humour Arthur lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Hagy July 28, 2016 at 3:38 PM Great write Jan...love the ending:) Jan Allison July 28, 2016 at 4:46 PM Thanks Chris:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort July 27, 2016 at 6:43 PM Humor is always wonderful. You are just full of sluggestions. This could be a problem for us bug haters! I sometimes think I see them at the edge of my vision. Ugh!!!! The brain takes reality and turns it into something very strange. Be all dear Jan!! Jan Allison July 28, 2016 at 2:27 AM LOL thanks Duke - got a line that's buzzing in my head and a poem is in the offing... but I need your permission to use the Hilary line from your last poem please lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser July 27, 2016 at 5:30 PM This is a fun, light take on the theme, Jan. I did a darker write...it's interesting to see where people took these lines! Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 5:37 PM I toyed with dark Laura but for many reasons I didn't go down that path so thought I would go for humour instead:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus July 27, 2016 at 1:33 PM You're a tough mummy, Jan:) But you could not keep a straight face, either!! Love the sluggy ending! Hugs // paul Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 1:37 PM Pure fiction Paul lol:-) hugs jan xx

CayCay Godwin July 27, 2016 at 12:50 PM Love the Eagles, love your entry - a combination of truth, seriousness and humor as discussions with children can be. A fun read, well-done, Jan ... CayCay Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 1:17 PM Thanks Cay Cay:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith July 27, 2016 at 11:41 AM lol...that slug line got me..I think he learned his lesson Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 12:17 PM I'm thankful my son always asks - never takes without checking - I love the fact he is honest:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick July 27, 2016 at 10:58 AM Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Way to go..Reads like winning material to me..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 11:16 AM Thanks so much Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel July 27, 2016 at 10:22 AM Great take on the contest, Jan:) Lovely:) Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 10:35 AM Thanks Jo - not sure if the humour will be to John's liking but I go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. July 27, 2016 at 9:16 AM Hi Jan, I catch my kid red handed too. Enjoyed the apple pie minus the slug lol! Good luck in the contest-7:-) Alexis Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 9:24 AM LOL Alexis:-) nothing worse than finding a slug on your food ... apart from finding half a slug when you are eating - eeew:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner July 27, 2016 at 8:45 AM I was looking for some "Eagles" lyrics. I do love me some apple pie and I would lie too if I had stolen it. LOL Enjoyed the read but the slug wasn't very tasty, Jan. Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 8:51 AM LOL Daniel - I was unsure if people would see the 'joke' about the slug but I am pleased to see they do. I have to admit now my hubby is diabetic I have cut down on baking and only make him sugar free flapjacks now:-(mmm applie pie with a little cinnamon in it - oh I would love a slice now (minus the slug lol) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen July 27, 2016 at 8:39 AM - Although the morale comes forward, I still give you my smile - Love it, Jan - a 7 - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 8:49 AM Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis July 27, 2016 at 8:19 AM Interesting and impressive writing dear, Jan! You must be good in detecting the lies even when they do not eat apple pie! haha! A seven! Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 8:25 AM I hate being lied to Demetrios - I will say no more on this particualr subject! This is a fiction write for the contest - my son asks me if he wants food lol he has never taken something then denied it was him.:-) hugs jan xx

Ovidiu Bocsa July 27, 2016 at 7:52 AM I liked your poem including the apple pies, but especially I like your eyes like an inner mirror of joy and suffering . Let them speak softly on love. Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 7:59 AM Thanks for your insightful comment Ovidiu:-) hugs Jan xx