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The truth stood downcast in the lie I know you’ve fibbed; I have the proof You cannot look me in the eye Still adamant you told the truth I love to watch you backpedal The truth stood downcast in the lie Don’t lie to me… there’s no medal Your mum you think you can defy Did you eat all the apple pie? (Crumbs are visible on your face) The truth stood downcast in the lie You grin and say the pie was ace! You say sorry, and then we hug, Your hunger you did satisfy I ask you did you eat the slug! The truth stood downcast in the lie The truth stood downcast in the lie contest Sponsored by John Lawless Title of the poem is from a line from 'Lyin Eyes' by the Eagles 32 syllables per stanza checked with how many syllables 07/27/16

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Date: 9/23/2016 3:10:00 AM
The end bit got me! Haha, well done.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 9/23/2016 4:15:00 AM
I love making the reader to think of one thing and then having a twist at the end of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/27/2016 4:29:00 PM
Absolutely love the twist. Excellent!..Larry
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Date: 9/23/2016 4:14:00 AM
Thanks Larry:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/27/2016 6:18:00 AM
Congrats! A refreshing take on the subject.
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Date: 8/27/2016 6:39:00 AM
Thanks so much Sushma:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 8/26/2016 11:19:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Jan!
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Date: 8/27/2016 5:47:00 AM
Thanks Laura :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/26/2016 10:16:00 PM
Congrats, Jan. Love the twist :)
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Date: 8/27/2016 5:47:00 AM
Thanks Agnes I do like having a surprising ending on some of my poems:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/26/2016 7:40:00 PM
The slug? Ha, ha. Congrats, Jan. :-)
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Date: 8/27/2016 5:46:00 AM
Nothing worse than finding a slug in your food .. except for finding half a slug lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/26/2016 3:16:00 PM
Loved it, Jan, especially the twist mid-way and at the end! Congrats on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 8/26/2016 3:20:00 PM
Thanks Sandra I wasn't sure if John would like a humourous take on the theme but I was delighted to be on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/26/2016 10:52:00 AM
Jan, congrats on your placement lovely lady :)-luloo
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Date: 8/26/2016 10:56:00 AM
Thanks so much LuLoo the humour paid off in this contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/26/2016 9:19:00 AM
Jan, thanks for the humorous take on the theme. Me mom would always say "Now look me in the eye and tell me that." But the apple pie was always worth it. Thanks for participating in the contest.
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Date: 8/26/2016 10:56:00 AM
I'm delighted you liked my take on the theme John:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/10/2016 5:41:00 PM
How utterly delightful! I hung onto every line. I think only you could have written it. Superb, that--in a word--is what it is. hugs x x x
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Date: 8/10/2016 5:58:00 PM
Thanks Paul I do love the contests to inspire me to write in different forms:-) hugs Jan x
Date: 7/30/2016 1:27:00 AM
Very well written, and I am sure many have read the message!
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Date: 7/30/2016 6:56:00 AM
I went for humour Arthur lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 3:38:00 PM
Great write Jan...love the ending:)
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Date: 7/28/2016 4:46:00 PM
Thanks Chris:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 6:43:00 PM
Humor is always wonderful. You are just full of sluggestions. This could be a problem for us bug haters! I sometimes think I see them at the edge of my vision. Ugh!!!! The brain takes reality and turns it into something very strange. Be all dear Jan!!
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Date: 7/28/2016 2:27:00 AM
LOL thanks Duke - got a line that's buzzing in my head and a poem is in the offing... but I need your permission to use the Hilary line from your last poem please lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 5:30:00 PM
This is a fun, light take on the theme, Jan. I did a darker write...it's interesting to see where people took these lines!
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Date: 7/27/2016 5:37:00 PM
I toyed with dark Laura but for many reasons I didn't go down that path so thought I would go for humour instead:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 1:33:00 PM
You're a tough mummy, Jan:) But you could not keep a straight face, either!! Love the sluggy ending! Hugs // paul
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Date: 7/27/2016 1:37:00 PM
Pure fiction Paul lol:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 12:50:00 PM
Love the Eagles, love your entry - a combination of truth, seriousness and humor as discussions with children can be. A fun read, well-done, Jan ... CayCay
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Date: 7/27/2016 1:17:00 PM
Thanks Cay Cay:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 11:41:00 AM
lol...that slug line got me..I think he learned his lesson
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Date: 7/27/2016 12:17:00 PM
I'm thankful my son always asks - never takes without checking - I love the fact he is honest:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 10:58:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Way to go..Reads like winning material to me..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara
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Date: 7/27/2016 11:16:00 AM
Thanks so much Sara:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 10:22:00 AM
Great take on the contest, Jan:) Lovely:)
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Date: 7/27/2016 10:35:00 AM
Thanks Jo - not sure if the humour will be to John's liking but I go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 9:16:00 AM
Hi Jan, I catch my kid red handed too. Enjoyed the apple pie minus the slug lol! Good luck in the contest-7:-) Alexis
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Date: 7/27/2016 9:24:00 AM
LOL Alexis:-) nothing worse than finding a slug on your food ... apart from finding half a slug when you are eating - eeew:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 8:39:00 AM
- Although the morale comes forward, I still give you my smile - Love it, Jan - a 7 - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/27/2016 8:49:00 AM
Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 8:19:00 AM
Interesting and impressive writing dear, Jan! You must be good in detecting the lies even when they do not eat apple pie! haha! A seven!
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Date: 7/27/2016 8:25:00 AM
I hate being lied to Demetrios - I will say no more on this particualr subject! This is a fiction write for the contest - my son asks me if he wants food lol he has never taken something then denied it was him.:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 7:52:00 AM
I liked your poem including the apple pies, but especially I like your eyes like an inner mirror of joy and suffering . Let them speak softly on love.
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Date: 7/27/2016 7:59:00 AM
Thanks for your insightful comment Ovidiu:-) hugs Jan xx