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You Can'T Hide Your Lying Eyes

The truth stood downcast in the lie
I know you’ve fibbed; I have the proof
You cannot look me in the eye
Still adamant you told the truth

I love to watch you backpedal
The truth stood downcast in the lie
Don’t lie to me… there’s no medal
Your mum you think you can defy

Did you eat all the apple pie? 
(Crumbs are visible on your face)
The truth stood downcast in the lie
You grin and say the pie was ace!

You say sorry, and then we hug,
Your hunger you did satisfy
I ask you did you eat the slug!
The truth stood downcast in the lie



The truth stood downcast in the lie contest Sponsored by John Lawless
Title of the poem is from a line from 'Lyin Eyes' by the Eagles

32 syllables per stanza checked with how many syllables

07/27/16

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White Wolf Date: 9/23/2016 3:10:00 AM The end bit got me! Haha, well done. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/23/2016 4:15:00 AM I love making the reader to think of one thing and then having a twist at the end of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Larry Bradfield Date: 8/27/2016 4:29:00 PM Absolutely love the twist. Excellent!..Larry Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/23/2016 4:14:00 AM Thanks Larry:-) hugs Jan xx

Sushma A. Singh Date: 8/27/2016 6:18:00 AM Congrats! A refreshing take on the subject. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/27/2016 6:39:00 AM Thanks so much Sushma:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser Date: 8/26/2016 11:19:00 PM Congrats on your win, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/27/2016 5:47:00 AM Thanks Laura :-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe Date: 8/26/2016 10:16:00 PM Congrats, Jan. Love the twist :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/27/2016 5:47:00 AM Thanks Agnes I do like having a surprising ending on some of my poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Arnone Date: 8/26/2016 7:40:00 PM The slug? Ha, ha. Congrats, Jan. :-) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/27/2016 5:46:00 AM Nothing worse than finding a slug in your food .. except for finding half a slug lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 8/26/2016 3:16:00 PM Loved it, Jan, especially the twist mid-way and at the end! Congrats on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/26/2016 3:20:00 PM Thanks Sandra I wasn't sure if John would like a humourous take on the theme but I was delighted to be on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars Date: 8/26/2016 10:52:00 AM Jan, congrats on your placement lovely lady :)-luloo Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/26/2016 10:56:00 AM Thanks so much LuLoo the humour paid off in this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless Date: 8/26/2016 9:19:00 AM Jan, thanks for the humorous take on the theme. Me mom would always say "Now look me in the eye and tell me that." But the apple pie was always worth it. Thanks for participating in the contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/26/2016 10:56:00 AM I'm delighted you liked my take on the theme John:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Schneiter Date: 8/10/2016 5:41:00 PM How utterly delightful! I hung onto every line. I think only you could have written it. Superb, that--in a word--is what it is. hugs x x x Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/10/2016 5:58:00 PM Thanks Paul I do love the contests to inspire me to write in different forms:-) hugs Jan x

Arthur Vaso Date: 7/30/2016 1:27:00 AM Very well written, and I am sure many have read the message! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/30/2016 6:56:00 AM I went for humour Arthur lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Hagy Date: 7/28/2016 3:38:00 PM Great write Jan...love the ending:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/28/2016 4:46:00 PM Thanks Chris:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort Date: 7/27/2016 6:43:00 PM Humor is always wonderful. You are just full of sluggestions. This could be a problem for us bug haters! I sometimes think I see them at the edge of my vision. Ugh!!!! The brain takes reality and turns it into something very strange. Be all dear Jan!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/28/2016 2:27:00 AM LOL thanks Duke - got a line that's buzzing in my head and a poem is in the offing... but I need your permission to use the Hilary line from your last poem please lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser Date: 7/27/2016 5:30:00 PM This is a fun, light take on the theme, Jan. I did a darker write...it's interesting to see where people took these lines! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 5:37:00 PM I toyed with dark Laura but for many reasons I didn't go down that path so thought I would go for humour instead:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 7/27/2016 1:33:00 PM You're a tough mummy, Jan:) But you could not keep a straight face, either!! Love the sluggy ending! Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 1:37:00 PM Pure fiction Paul lol:-) hugs jan xx

CayCay Jennings Date: 7/27/2016 12:50:00 PM Love the Eagles, love your entry - a combination of truth, seriousness and humor as discussions with children can be. A fun read, well-done, Jan ... CayCay Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 1:17:00 PM Thanks Cay Cay:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 7/27/2016 11:41:00 AM lol...that slug line got me..I think he learned his lesson Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 12:17:00 PM I'm thankful my son always asks - never takes without checking - I love the fact he is honest:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/27/2016 10:58:00 AM Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Way to go..Reads like winning material to me..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 11:16:00 AM Thanks so much Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel Date: 7/27/2016 10:22:00 AM Great take on the contest, Jan:) Lovely:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 10:35:00 AM Thanks Jo - not sure if the humour will be to John's liking but I go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 7/27/2016 9:16:00 AM Hi Jan, I catch my kid red handed too. Enjoyed the apple pie minus the slug lol! Good luck in the contest-7:-) Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 9:24:00 AM LOL Alexis:-) nothing worse than finding a slug on your food ... apart from finding half a slug when you are eating - eeew:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner Date: 7/27/2016 8:45:00 AM I was looking for some "Eagles" lyrics. I do love me some apple pie and I would lie too if I had stolen it. LOL Enjoyed the read but the slug wasn't very tasty, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 8:51:00 AM LOL Daniel - I was unsure if people would see the 'joke' about the slug but I am pleased to see they do. I have to admit now my hubby is diabetic I have cut down on baking and only make him sugar free flapjacks now:-(mmm applie pie with a little cinnamon in it - oh I would love a slice now (minus the slug lol) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 7/27/2016 8:39:00 AM - Although the morale comes forward, I still give you my smile - Love it, Jan - a 7 - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 8:49:00 AM Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 7/27/2016 8:19:00 AM Interesting and impressive writing dear, Jan! You must be good in detecting the lies even when they do not eat apple pie! haha! A seven! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 8:25:00 AM I hate being lied to Demetrios - I will say no more on this particualr subject! This is a fiction write for the contest - my son asks me if he wants food lol he has never taken something then denied it was him.:-) hugs jan xx

Ovidiu Bocsa Date: 7/27/2016 7:52:00 AM I liked your poem including the apple pies, but especially I like your eyes like an inner mirror of joy and suffering . Let them speak softly on love. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 7:59:00 AM Thanks for your insightful comment Ovidiu:-) hugs Jan xx