Susan Ashley Poet Free verse

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July 20, 2017

~ Ninth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Up To You
Sponsor: Brian Strand

~ Second Place ~
Contest: Premiere Contest Number 15 
Sponsor: SKAT A

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You Are Water

You are water~
fluid moods
overflowing extremes

I dip my toes 
testing
should I dive in
this time
will  y o u  let me sink or swim
have you  r e a l l y  changed

you are a lagoon
soothing   cooling
tranquil
for now   I float
in sweet oblivion

you are a shimmering mirage
of something I hope for
illusional life-giver
a fertile oasis in arid land
giving love unhurt to my heart
you move like an undulating river
natural   flowing   dynamic   definite
sailing the curves 
taking me places never imagined
when we're apart

you are a flash flood
white water without warning
cleansing  destructive 
baptizing both good and evil

you are a raging waterfall
beautiful in your steep revenge
threatening to roil me over the edge

you are a tsunami!
born of violent eruption
mortifying  underestimated   overwhelming
growing larger as I let you get closer
sweeping me up
slamming me along
with the rest of your emotional debris

you are a MAELSTROM!
dizzying  swallowing   suffocating
K i l l i n g
spinning
sucking me down
down
through the center
of a drowning depression

nooo
your circular violence  
h a s n ' t  changed

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Ink Empress February 10, 2024 at 5:41 AM Oh my! Dear susan, how creative is this! How do i praise such beauty with words? In such a soft and delicate manner youve expressed and delivered such a moving write that left me in awe! The similes throughout and descriptive imagery and how youve phrased thoughts is beyond captivating and artistic! How powerful is this! Soul hitting really! I loved the lines You are a raging waterfall! Beautiful in your steep revenge threatening to roil me over the edge. You are a tsunami!” Whoa! FAVE! Congratulations Susan Ashley February 13, 2024 at 5:47 PM Dear Ink Empress, elite poetess, I'm thrilled by your generous response to my poem. It's so wonderful to receive your uplifting and inspiring feedback. Your comments are soul touching! I'm humbled and honored by your fave, my sweet friend. Thank you for sharing in the emotions of this poem with me and for your kind congrats. I love the "waterfall" and "tsunami" lines too. Your soulful words are as beautiful in the comment box as they are in your fascinating and creative poetry. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier April 15, 2018 at 11:03 PM Congrats on your podium finish, Susan. Susan Ashley April 15, 2018 at 11:05 PM I cherish your visit and your kind congrats, Line

Judith S January 23, 2018 at 9:41 AM Wow Susan!!! This is just amazing! You are so creative and inspirational in the way you craft your poems. I love how the mood grows in intensity. Congratulations on your very well-deserved win my NE Friend :) ~Judy Susan Ashley January 23, 2018 at 2:46 PM Judy, the light and joy that you bring to my poetry page is special to me :) Thank you for your uplifting comments that energizes my spirit and inspires me to reach higher. Your beautiful sentiments and warmhearted congrats is dearly appreciated my NE Friend! On to the Super Bowl!! :)) Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Sonia Walker January 22, 2018 at 11:51 PM Susan, congratulations on your winning entry. Such intense and clever descriptions of water within your poem. ~ Sonia Susan Ashley January 23, 2018 at 2:40 PM Thank you Sonia, for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Your wonderful comments and kind congrats are heartwarming and appreciated.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit January 22, 2018 at 10:02 PM Congrats Susan for your top win. A thoughtful depiction of intensity...excellent write. A well deserved win! Susan Ashley January 23, 2018 at 2:38 PM Thank you Vijay for sharing your wonderful thoughts. Your uplifting comments and kind congrats are heartwarming and appreciated.. ~Susan

Sandra Haight January 22, 2018 at 6:25 PM Wow, Susan...such a powerful write. I agree with Agnes' comments below. Excellent metaphors...water...fluid moves...circular violence. Such an outstanding poem. Congratulations on your well-deserved Podium win! Hugs, Sandra Susan Ashley January 23, 2018 at 2:36 PM Sandra, I am thrilled to receive such wonderful comments from you, a poet I truly admire. Thank you for your heartwarming words and kind congrats. Hugs and warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux January 22, 2018 at 6:09 PM Such a great piece. Congrats on your high placement. Susan Ashley January 23, 2018 at 4:37 AM Thank you Richard for your lovely comments and for the heartwarming congrats. Your wonderful visits are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Agnes Krampe January 22, 2018 at 1:53 PM I love all the water metaphors and how you span the arc from tranquil lagoon to violent maelstrom. Great poem - congrats on your win! Susan Ashley January 22, 2018 at 4:46 PM Agnes, your beautiful comments and kind congrats are so thoughtful and uplifting. You inspire me to continue to reach higher my talented friend. Thank you for the delight of your lovely visit and for your heartwarming words.. ~Susan

Skat A January 22, 2018 at 10:39 AM This is a very interesting poem, Susan, and that is why I like it very much. :) Congrats on your win, thank you for entering my contest. HUGS **SKAT** Susan Ashley January 22, 2018 at 11:50 AM Thank you SKAT for your lovely comments and for the honor of my wonderful placement in your contest. I'm thrilled to be on the winners list with such talented poets and I thank you for sponsoring such an excellent contest. Hugs and warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus December 15, 2017 at 8:12 AM Water, water everywhere, and not a drop of hope to drink! Excellent transition from calm fluidity to a maelstrom climax! There can never be an excuse for violent behavior. Such abuse in unending, thus taking a circular shape. This is one of your best poems, Susan! ~ Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley December 15, 2017 at 4:27 PM Paul, I'm thrilled with your response and that you totally understood the 'calm fluidity to a maelstrom', circular aspect to this write. Thank you for your uplifting comments that lends exuberance to my mood. You inspire with your light and joy. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

John Michaels December 2, 2017 at 9:55 AM A deep and meaningful write, Susan! I enjoyed the way you stepped up the water "events" to match the intensity of the emotions and escalating violence! Nicely done! Kind regards, John! Susan Ashley December 2, 2017 at 6:32 PM John, I truly appreciate your wonderful comment. Your interpretation is exactly the way I was hoping this poem would be perceived, as an escalation of emotions and violence. Thank you for your lovely visit and for sharing your treasured thoughts with me. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Harshita Chaudhary October 1, 2017 at 8:11 AM Water, water and water. Such a beautiful poem Susan. I love water but you're right, sometimes it becomes appalling. Thanks for sharing:-)

Rob Carmack September 4, 2017 at 7:19 PM Susan - I see you knew my 1st wife. What a ride that was. You have captured well what it's like. I was never bored with her, and even though I am glad it is over, I would not trade the experiences for the world. Susan Ashley September 4, 2017 at 8:21 PM Hi Rob, wow, what an experience that must have been for you! But you speak of it with compassion and as a gentleman. Very admirable I must say. Thank you so much for your visit and your awesome comment and personal touch. Much appreciation my friend! :) Susan

Bernard Chan August 31, 2017 at 11:41 AM Oh, I almost missed this. Great concept, beautifully penned. What a pleasure to read! :) Susan Ashley August 31, 2017 at 7:21 PM Hi Bernard, I so appreciate your visits and your encouraging comments. Your kind words are uplifting and I thank you for taking the time to read my humble writes and to leave your wonderful words :)

Funom Makama July 22, 2017 at 12:17 PM well crafted into an eye-romancing beauty... Your lines and words are just lovely... Its nice visiting one of your pages again.. Susan Ashley July 22, 2017 at 9:13 PM Hi Funom, thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. Please feel free to visit all of my pages all the time as I visit yours often :)

Faraz Ajmal July 21, 2017 at 8:46 AM Such a nice poem in which you explained depression, many people might not understand it because they haven t experience it but I ve, my father was in depression for 5 years, some other things are that your closed one seemed your enemy, you don t like to do anything, just lay in bed and watch the fan moving and moving, however I want you to read my poems as well and tell me how they are Susan Ashley July 21, 2017 at 7:43 PM Hi Faraz,thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I'm glad we connected through my words and I am sorry to hear about your Dad's experience with depression, I hope the dark cloud has lifted. Thank you for sharing your personal story with me, I'm honored :)

Silent One July 21, 2017 at 4:59 AM An excellent way to express depression, so many do not understand it... Excellent pen. Susan Ashley July 21, 2017 at 11:23 AM Hi Silent One, Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I read your works and collaborations with awe, as they are so rich in imagery, flow and conceptualization. I very much appreciate your kind and encouraging words :)

Subimal Sinha-Roy July 21, 2017 at 2:52 AM Nicely penned power of water. Susan Ashley July 21, 2017 at 11:17 AM Hi Subimal, thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for your kind comment :)