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You Are In My Blood

If I bleed will that be enough for you? I am willing to place my heart on the floor. To be crushed beneath your stilettoed heel! For this heart is of no use without your love. I'm willing to place my heart on the floor, so that you can discover my truth inside. For this heart is of no use without your love. Please pick up my heart with delicate hands So that you can discover the truth inside, I will no longer hide anything from you! Please pick up my heart with delicate hands? Within my blood is the essence of you. I will no longer hide anything from you. Today and tommorow bleed from yesterday. Within my blood is the essence of you! Dreams dreamt on our seemingly endless nights... Today and tomorrow bleed from yesterday, to be crushed beneath your stilettoed heel. Dreams dreamt on our seemingly endless nights... If I bleed will that be enough for you? For Anthony Slausen's "In Your Blood Contest"

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Red Fiery

Date: 2/23/2016 9:01:00 AM

I don't have the capacity to rate this work! This is much more than my tender words....I always look for poems like this...glad that I found this gem. You made my day! I missed so many poems....I should read them one by one....hugs ! love red..:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2016 12:33:00 PM

Thanks Red, let me know when you post a new one.

Pashang Salehi

Date: 12/21/2015 4:29:00 PM

I didn't know what kind of style pantoum was until I googled it! It is a form of poetry that you’re bonded to follow certain repeating lines. I know you entered a contest with this piece, but to me this poem would have been better without those repeating lines. I liked the concept very much, and you have done a great job manipulating it to that style.

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 12/19/2015 4:20:00 PM

A brilliant PANTOUM Richard! The repetitions are perfectly placed and the grammatical flow does not suffer at all from them. A superb piece for this particular contest. Best wishes for success! Keith

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2016 12:34:00 PM

Thanks Keith.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 12/13/2015 10:26:00 AM

I'm impressed - Love it ... CayCay

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/13/2015 10:28:00 AM

Thanks for visiting and leaving behind a bit of sunshine.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/10/2015 10:25:00 PM

Richard, Congrats on your wonderful and sweet win. LINDA

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2015 11:57:00 PM

Thanks Linda.;0)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 12/9/2015 10:10:00 PM

Very wonderful write Richard.. congrats on great win! Loved the title ..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2015 9:20:00 AM

Thanks Upma.

John Hamilton

Date: 12/9/2015 9:47:00 PM

Well done as always, like the repeating lines, what's the difference between this and a terzanelle, just the repeat pattern?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2015 9:21:00 AM

Thanks John.

Casarah Nance

Date: 12/9/2015 6:10:00 PM

I really liked this, you manage to make repeating lines pleasant and not a chore. I see this is a winner too...of course it is, how could you not win with such a skilled pen :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2015 9:23:00 AM

Thanks Casarah, your comment pleases me.

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/9/2015 3:38:00 PM

Wonderful write, Richard. Congratulations on your fine win. Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2015 9:24:00 AM

Thanks Sandra.

Brian Baumgarn

Date: 12/8/2015 11:21:00 PM

Yes, Richard, this should be a contest winner. I wish I would think of entering some of the contests on here as it sounds like fun. Wonderful stark imageries, too.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 9:59:00 AM

Yes it does get the creative juices flowing.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/8/2015 7:37:00 PM

First A7, second, my apologies that you met my ex gf, I didn't mean for that to happen, Third, the imagery in here, perfection.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:00:00 AM

Ha ha!

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 12/8/2015 6:09:00 PM

An excellent PANTOUM Rick... The structure is so well maintained, and the content is waaay dark! BRAVO my friend!! Best wishes, Keith

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:00:00 AM

Thanks Keith, I'm pleased you like it.

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/7/2015 5:10:00 PM

Powerful and deep, Richard. I'm sure this will do well for the contest. All the best. Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:02:00 AM

Thanks Sandra, I hope so.

Carol Eastman

Date: 12/6/2015 5:35:00 PM

That's what I tell Dragon all the time... He's the biggest baby I know and he is forever in my heart... I'm just thankful he doesn't wear pointy shoes or stillettoes... LOL... PS. Dragon got in trouble again... Let me know what you think...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:02:00 AM

Ha ha, that would be quite the sight.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 12/6/2015 4:13:00 PM

This is so so much cute and extreme excellent. I view this to be a winner. Sincerely, you made this extreme fascination............A.M.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:02:00 AM

Thanks AM.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 12/6/2015 3:59:00 PM

"I am willing to place my heart on the floor. To be crushed beneath your stilettoed heel! For this heart is of no use without your love." Love those powerful lines...captivating from beginning to end. We must handle hearts with care...Always, Laura

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:03:00 AM

It's so cool being quoted! Thanks Laura.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 12/6/2015 3:47:00 PM

Oh what being in love can do , it can make us do anything, especially to make it up for when our love wasnt complete cuz of hidden secrets or truths..So much sentiment ..So much.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:04:00 AM

So true, love is a powerful drug! Thanks for visiting Charmaine.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 12/6/2015 12:08:00 PM

There is such depth of emotion in this write....You really were able to capture the heartfelt need for love.... I really like this write, Richard. BTW....Freddie has a blog up about me. Nice of him.....give it a read of you have a few minutes....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2015 10:05:00 AM

I thought I left a response. Either way, as always I appreciate your visits.