Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

You Are In My Blood

If I bleed will that be enough for you?
I am willing to place my heart on the floor.
To be crushed beneath your stilettoed heel!
For this heart is of no use without your love.

I'm willing to place my heart on the floor,
so that you can discover my truth inside.
For this heart is of no use without your love.
Please pick up my heart with delicate hands

So that you can discover the truth inside,
I will no longer hide anything from you!
Please pick up my heart with delicate hands?
Within my blood is the essence of you.

I will no longer hide anything from you.
Today and tommorow bleed from yesterday.
Within my blood is the essence of you!
Dreams dreamt on our seemingly endless nights...

Today and tomorrow bleed from yesterday,
to be crushed beneath your stilettoed heel.
Dreams dreamt on our seemingly endless nights...
If I bleed will that be enough for you?

For Anthony Slausen's "In Your Blood Contest"

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Red Fiery February 23, 2016 at 9:01 AM I don't have the capacity to rate this work! This is much more than my tender words....I always look for poems like this...glad that I found this gem. You made my day! I missed so many poems....I should read them one by one....hugs ! love red..:) Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2016 at 12:33 PM Thanks Red, let me know when you post a new one.

Pashang Salehi December 21, 2015 at 4:29 PM I didn't know what kind of style pantoum was until I googled it! It is a form of poetry that you’re bonded to follow certain repeating lines. I know you entered a contest with this piece, but to me this poem would have been better without those repeating lines. I liked the concept very much, and you have done a great job manipulating it to that style.

Keith Bickerstaffe December 19, 2015 at 4:20 PM A brilliant PANTOUM Richard! The repetitions are perfectly placed and the grammatical flow does not suffer at all from them. A superb piece for this particular contest. Best wishes for success! Keith Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2016 at 12:34 PM Thanks Keith.

CayCay Godwin December 13, 2015 at 10:26 AM I'm impressed - Love it ... CayCay Richard Lamoureux December 13, 2015 at 10:28 AM Thanks for visiting and leaving behind a bit of sunshine.

Poet Destroyer A December 10, 2015 at 10:25 PM Richard, Congrats on your wonderful and sweet win. LINDA Richard Lamoureux December 10, 2015 at 11:57 PM Thanks Linda.;0)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma December 9, 2015 at 10:10 PM Very wonderful write Richard.. congrats on great win! Loved the title .. Richard Lamoureux December 10, 2015 at 9:20 AM Thanks Upma.

John Hamilton December 9, 2015 at 9:47 PM Well done as always, like the repeating lines, what's the difference between this and a terzanelle, just the repeat pattern? Richard Lamoureux December 10, 2015 at 9:21 AM Thanks John.

Casarah Nance December 9, 2015 at 6:10 PM I really liked this, you manage to make repeating lines pleasant and not a chore. I see this is a winner too...of course it is, how could you not win with such a skilled pen :) Richard Lamoureux December 10, 2015 at 9:23 AM Thanks Casarah, your comment pleases me.

Sandra Haight December 9, 2015 at 3:38 PM Wonderful write, Richard. Congratulations on your fine win. Sandra Richard Lamoureux December 10, 2015 at 9:24 AM Thanks Sandra.

Brian Baumgarn December 8, 2015 at 11:21 PM Yes, Richard, this should be a contest winner. I wish I would think of entering some of the contests on here as it sounds like fun. Wonderful stark imageries, too. Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 9:59 AM Yes it does get the creative juices flowing.

Arthur Vaso December 8, 2015 at 7:37 PM First A7, second, my apologies that you met my ex gf, I didn't mean for that to happen, Third, the imagery in here, perfection. Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:00 AM Ha ha!

Keith Bickerstaffe December 8, 2015 at 6:09 PM An excellent PANTOUM Rick... The structure is so well maintained, and the content is waaay dark! BRAVO my friend!! Best wishes, Keith Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:00 AM Thanks Keith, I'm pleased you like it.

Sandra Haight December 7, 2015 at 5:10 PM Powerful and deep, Richard. I'm sure this will do well for the contest. All the best. Sandra Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:02 AM Thanks Sandra, I hope so.

Carol Eastman December 6, 2015 at 5:35 PM That's what I tell Dragon all the time... He's the biggest baby I know and he is forever in my heart... I'm just thankful he doesn't wear pointy shoes or stillettoes... LOL... PS. Dragon got in trouble again... Let me know what you think... Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:02 AM Ha ha, that would be quite the sight.

Afolabi Muideen December 6, 2015 at 4:13 PM This is so so much cute and extreme excellent. I view this to be a winner. Sincerely, you made this extreme fascination............A.M. Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:02 AM Thanks AM.

Laura Breidenthal December 6, 2015 at 3:59 PM "I am willing to place my heart on the floor. To be crushed beneath your stilettoed heel! For this heart is of no use without your love." Love those powerful lines...captivating from beginning to end. We must handle hearts with care...Always, Laura Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:03 AM It's so cool being quoted! Thanks Laura.

Charmaine Chircop December 6, 2015 at 3:47 PM Oh what being in love can do , it can make us do anything, especially to make it up for when our love wasnt complete cuz of hidden secrets or truths..So much sentiment ..So much. Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:04 AM So true, love is a powerful drug! Thanks for visiting Charmaine.

Eileen Manassian December 6, 2015 at 12:08 PM There is such depth of emotion in this write....You really were able to capture the heartfelt need for love.... I really like this write, Richard. BTW....Freddie has a blog up about me. Nice of him.....give it a read of you have a few minutes.... Richard Lamoureux December 9, 2015 at 10:05 AM I thought I left a response. Either way, as always I appreciate your visits.