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You Are a Thorn, Borne Deep In My Heart

You are a thorn, borne deep in my heart
   The prick that sticks me with each breath I take
A tether, whether I want to be bound to you or not
   The flame I blame for burning holes in my soul

Droning chants are rants lingering in my mind
   Rumblings and mumblings within my sad breast
The wrong kind of song written for those in love
   My eyes sting when I try to sing the sweet lyrics

Broken vows spoken; words shattered like glass
   The refrain of my pain keeps wounds from healing
Sorrowfully shaken and forsaken, I had to walk away 
   Your pretense was immense, the shame of your fall

Love was spoiled, foiled because of your weakness
   Your reason for treason, based on a foundation of lies
The suppression of your confession has taken a toll
   How cruel to fool the one who gave you her heart
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 2/26/2018 3:10:00 PM
This is wonderful and sad poetry my friend. One can feel the epic loss and sadness. Love once lost as this- leaves an empty hole in the heart! A gem and a fav....
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/7/2018 10:20:00 AM
Some wounds are chasms deeper than others, Robert. Thank you for your insightful appreciation.
Date: 2/19/2018 10:37:00 PM
True poetry, Lin! Beautiful but sad! Loved it... Congrats also to you for POTD
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/7/2018 10:19:00 AM
Merci, monsieur Wolf.
Date: 2/18/2018 8:29:00 AM
Ah Lin, your poor broken heart. Loved the unique rhyme.
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/7/2018 10:18:00 AM
Thanks for appreciating the poem as well as the rhyming, James.
Date: 2/14/2018 8:32:00 PM
Congrats, Lin, on POTD!
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/14/2018 8:45:00 PM
Thank you, Kim.
Date: 2/12/2018 6:51:00 AM
Eloquence! Beautiful impactful write Lin, congratulations on potd :) xomo!
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/12/2018 12:19:00 PM
Thanks so very much, Mo.
Date: 2/11/2018 5:13:00 PM
congratulations on ur POTD Lin, cheers :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:46:00 PM
I appreciate the read and comments, Lewis.
Date: 2/11/2018 12:47:00 PM
“Sadly shaken and forsaken, I turn and walk away“ your poem speaks eloquently of sadness and the truth one has to face when betrayed. Congratulations on POTD...Well deserved! God bless, Donna
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:46:00 PM
Thank you so much, Donna.
Date: 2/11/2018 12:36:00 PM
- Congratulations on your wonderful p.o.t.d., Lin :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:45:00 PM
Thanks a bunch, Anne-Lise.
Date: 2/11/2018 12:13:00 PM
Gorgeous, gorgeous write, Dear Friend, and so worthy of Poem of the Day ... so heart-wrenching and melancholy, but dripping in beautiful expression and phrasing! I am so behind in readings and comments, but I seem to be missing a lot of great writes. Absolutely wonderful, and I must fav! Blessings and big congrats, Lin! :-) <3
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:45:00 PM
Thank you very much for the warm compliments, Greg. I'm grateful.
Date: 2/11/2018 11:24:00 AM
Hello Lin Lang, this is a heart breaking poem, so sad. have a nice day my friend.
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:44:00 PM
Thank you, Darlene.
Date: 2/11/2018 11:07:00 AM
Congrats!!! my dear lady...your internal rhymes of infernal crimes lol...magnificent ...stay in the light my friend...^WW^
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:44:00 PM
Thanks ever so much, WW.
Date: 2/11/2018 10:13:00 AM
Your skill is amazing. Well deserved POTD. Congratulations.
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:44:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Sun.
Date: 2/11/2018 9:29:00 AM
Back to pat your back Lin, congratulations for POTD honors...
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:44:00 PM
Thanks for the encouragement, as usual, Charlie.
Date: 2/11/2018 7:49:00 AM
Nicely written, Lin, I love the internal rhymes. Congrats on the well deserved POTD. John
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:43:00 PM
I appreciate your compliments, John.
Date: 2/11/2018 7:09:00 AM
internal rhyme draping the internal struggle in poetic beauty....congrats on POTD Lin
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 5:38:00 PM
Thanks very much, John.
Date: 2/11/2018 4:40:00 AM
BRAVO Lin many congrats on POTD a very worthy honour for this poem:-) hugs jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 6:39:00 AM
Thanks again for your kind words and friendship, Jan.
Date: 2/11/2018 2:09:00 AM
Sad and true. Hearts will be mended. The internal rhymes will un-shatter once the fool's message will be embrace, 'that he is the fool and she is the spool for change and growth. I like your poem.
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 6:38:00 AM
Thank you, Kai.
Date: 2/9/2018 8:28:00 PM
Now you know I had to comment on this sad beauty, the internal rhyme gets me every time, great write Lin!
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 6:38:00 AM
Your words are always a welcome sight, John. Thanks so very much.
Date: 2/9/2018 7:17:00 PM
Love the internal rhyme, and subject matter...and unlike Tim I'm going to enjoy a day of mid-70's tomorrow...maybe take a walk on the beach
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2018 6:37:00 AM
Many thanks for the comments, Frederic. Take that walk and enjoy the sunshine.
Date: 2/9/2018 4:37:00 PM
Such an emotional write Lin, the feeling of intense pain screams out from every line. Am adding it to my faves , I love the clever use of internal rhyme:-) hugs jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/9/2018 5:31:00 PM
Thanks very much, Jan. I appreciate you noticing the placement of rhyme. ;-)
Date: 2/9/2018 3:14:00 PM
I love it Lin...I almost died on the second line : ) Please send us some warm weather to melt this snow. Going back out to shovel. Took care of the 10 inches left this morning and now another 5 have hit with no stopping in sight.
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Jan Allison
Date: 2/9/2018 4:28:00 PM
lol Tim I splurted my cup of tea reading your comment lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/9/2018 3:56:00 PM
Thank you, Tim. Prick, in this poem only means as a thorn pierces. Lol I'll send my 75 degrees to you right now. That should defrost you a titch.
Date: 2/9/2018 2:45:00 PM
Loved "shaken and forsaken" Lin, very well done...
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/9/2018 3:54:00 PM
and I thank you very much in exchange, Charlie.
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