Lin Lane Poet Verse

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You Are a Thorn, Borne Deep In My Heart

You are a thorn, borne deep in my heart
   The prick that sticks me with each breath I take
A tether, whether I want to be bound to you or not
   The flame I blame for burning holes in my soul

Droning chants are rants lingering in my mind
   Rumblings and mumblings within my sad breast
The wrong kind of song written for those in love
   My eyes sting when I try to sing the sweet lyrics

Broken vows spoken; words shattered like glass
   The refrain of my pain keeps wounds from healing
Sorrowfully shaken and forsaken, I had to walk away 
   Your pretense was immense, the shame of your fall

Love was spoiled, foiled because of your weakness
   Your reason for treason, based on a foundation of lies
The suppression of your confession has taken a toll
   How cruel to fool the one who gave you her heart

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Robert Lindley February 26, 2018 at 3:10 PM This is wonderful and sad poetry my friend. One can feel the epic loss and sadness. Love once lost as this- leaves an empty hole in the heart! A gem and a fav.... Lin Lane March 7, 2018 at 10:20 AM Some wounds are chasms deeper than others, Robert. Thank you for your insightful appreciation.

White Wolf February 19, 2018 at 10:37 PM True poetry, Lin! Beautiful but sad! Loved it... Congrats also to you for POTD Lin Lane March 7, 2018 at 10:19 AM Merci, monsieur Wolf.

James Inman February 18, 2018 at 8:29 AM Ah Lin, your poor broken heart. Loved the unique rhyme. Lin Lane March 7, 2018 at 10:18 AM Thanks for appreciating the poem as well as the rhyming, James.

Kim Rodrigues February 14, 2018 at 8:32 PM Congrats, Lin, on POTD! Lin Lane February 14, 2018 at 8:45 PM Thank you, Kim.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart February 12, 2018 at 6:51 AM Eloquence! Beautiful impactful write Lin, congratulations on potd :) xomo! Lin Lane February 12, 2018 at 12:19 PM Thanks so very much, Mo.

Lewis Raynes February 11, 2018 at 5:13 PM congratulations on ur POTD Lin, cheers :) Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:46 PM I appreciate the read and comments, Lewis.

Donna Loughman February 11, 2018 at 12:47 PM “Sadly shaken and forsaken, I turn and walk away“ your poem speaks eloquently of sadness and the truth one has to face when betrayed. Congratulations on POTD...Well deserved! God bless, Donna Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:46 PM Thank you so much, Donna.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 11, 2018 at 12:36 PM - Congratulations on your wonderful p.o.t.d., Lin :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:45 PM Thanks a bunch, Anne-Lise.

Gregory Richard Barden February 11, 2018 at 12:13 PM Gorgeous, gorgeous write, Dear Friend, and so worthy of Poem of the Day ... so heart-wrenching and melancholy, but dripping in beautiful expression and phrasing! I am so behind in readings and comments, but I seem to be missing a lot of great writes. Absolutely wonderful, and I must fav! Blessings and big congrats, Lin! :-) <3 Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:45 PM Thank you very much for the warm compliments, Greg. I'm grateful.

Darlene De Beaulieu February 11, 2018 at 11:24 AM Hello Lin Lang, this is a heart breaking poem, so sad. have a nice day my friend. Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:44 PM Thank you, Darlene.

Winged Warrior February 11, 2018 at 11:07 AM Congrats!!! my dear lady...your internal rhymes of infernal crimes lol...magnificent ...stay in the light my friend...^WW^ Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:44 PM Thanks ever so much, WW.

Sunlite Wanter February 11, 2018 at 10:13 AM Your skill is amazing. Well deserved POTD. Congratulations. Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:44 PM Thank you so very much, Sun.

Charlie Smith February 11, 2018 at 9:29 AM Back to pat your back Lin, congratulations for POTD honors... Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:44 PM Thanks for the encouragement, as usual, Charlie.

John Gondolf February 11, 2018 at 7:49 AM Nicely written, Lin, I love the internal rhymes. Congrats on the well deserved POTD. John Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:43 PM I appreciate your compliments, John.

John Lawless February 11, 2018 at 7:09 AM internal rhyme draping the internal struggle in poetic beauty....congrats on POTD Lin Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 5:38 PM Thanks very much, John.

Jan Allison February 11, 2018 at 4:40 AM BRAVO Lin many congrats on POTD a very worthy honour for this poem:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 6:39 AM Thanks again for your kind words and friendship, Jan.

Kai Michael Neumann February 11, 2018 at 2:09 AM Sad and true. Hearts will be mended. The internal rhymes will un-shatter once the fool's message will be embrace, 'that he is the fool and she is the spool for change and growth. I like your poem. Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 6:38 AM Thank you, Kai.

John Hamilton February 9, 2018 at 8:28 PM Now you know I had to comment on this sad beauty, the internal rhyme gets me every time, great write Lin! Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 6:38 AM Your words are always a welcome sight, John. Thanks so very much.

Frederic Parker February 9, 2018 at 7:17 PM Love the internal rhyme, and subject matter...and unlike Tim I'm going to enjoy a day of mid-70's tomorrow...maybe take a walk on the beach Lin Lane February 11, 2018 at 6:37 AM Many thanks for the comments, Frederic. Take that walk and enjoy the sunshine.

Jan Allison February 9, 2018 at 4:37 PM Such an emotional write Lin, the feeling of intense pain screams out from every line. Am adding it to my faves , I love the clever use of internal rhyme:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane February 9, 2018 at 5:31 PM Thanks very much, Jan. I appreciate you noticing the placement of rhyme. ;-)

Tim Smith February 9, 2018 at 3:14 PM I love it Lin...I almost died on the second line : ) Please send us some warm weather to melt this snow. Going back out to shovel. Took care of the 10 inches left this morning and now another 5 have hit with no stopping in sight. Jan Allison February 9, 2018 at 4:28 PM lol Tim I splurted my cup of tea reading your comment lol:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane February 9, 2018 at 3:56 PM Thank you, Tim. Prick, in this poem only means as a thorn pierces. Lol I'll send my 75 degrees to you right now. That should defrost you a titch.

Charlie Smith February 9, 2018 at 2:45 PM Loved "shaken and forsaken" Lin, very well done... Lin Lane February 9, 2018 at 3:54 PM and I thank you very much in exchange, Charlie.