Yellow Ochre Pond

I used to dream of yellow mud,
well more like yellow water
stained with yellow ochre 
clay, so vast, in it I felt so good.

In this I swam, just like an eel,
in creamy dream of yellow
feel; other people swam about
as shoals of fish , or netted trout.

Ochre pressed against my skin
like custard spread on rubber thin,
I spun my body round and round
like a crocodile does in his pound.

In this dream, I felt so free
the me in there, was the me in me,
shoals that swam around my pond, 
were souls, unfound, on solid ground.

Decades pass and I can see,
the me in there, that’s the me in me,
but nowhere now can I retrieve,
that creamy, dreamy fantasy.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Brown Avatar
January 5, 2010 at 4:10 AM
Thank you for sharing your wonderful poetry with us today David. May your writing take you to new heights each and every day. Love, Carol
Haick Avatar
January 4, 2010 at 5:25 PM
I don't know what this dream meant, David but as long as it made you feel good then it's a good dream! Great personification! Great job! Thank you for your kind comments today. Peace, Audrey
Omaidin Avatar
January 4, 2010 at 12:04 PM
I think this poem is great, and it's so original and so very visual. Regards: Déirdre
Sweetheart Avatar
January 4, 2010 at 9:13 AM
Like your words, David, and your description .. very visual poetry ... enjoyed... cool color ..yellow... blessings.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
Dietrich Avatar
January 4, 2010 at 7:34 AM
WEll done, David. What a strange dream, but COOL. I have actually enjoyed a few Stephen Kingish nightmares. haha. About sonnets, my first one took me 8 hours, now I have done so many, I just love it, but they still take me at least 2 to 3 hours! LUv, Andrea
Kendrick Avatar
January 4, 2010 at 3:45 AM
Lost the dream of being me. Look around and find that dream. Very imaginative presentation of the idea. Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara
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January 4, 2010 at 2:46 AM
Nice work David, loved the imagery...Raul
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