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Woman in chains

Arousing opulence of ancient ballrooms She creates her own make-believe world Waltzing coyly in terpsichorean rhythms Upon glittering stage where they sell love Each time she caresses arms of a stranger, Pretending to levitate in sultan’s harem In glitzy appeal of polygamous mansions Where she reiterates to sighs of ambivalence-- This used to be once the venue of glamour. But her allegory of ardor quickly fades As her disillusioned ego yearns for solace When invisible bruises begin to ache Having surrendered esteem to ruthless nights Trading dead-feelings in lavish marbled halls Where stench of alcohol, perfumes, and cigars Traps perturbed anguish inside prison walls From which, she knows, there’s no escape. Initiation period for her was the hardest When beauty and youth at height of apex Squandered her magical Cinderella zeal Abandoning fabled-castle her childhood built Crying into that gutless, gruesome night For lacking the force of fortitude to leave Before she condemned her soul into abyss. She’s worthless to the heartless crowd now— A shriveled rose desolate in parched garden, A discarded bottle of expensive scotch; So, voicing contempt, like a caged bird she sings About the wedding night she always fancied Reciting lyrics, crooning spent feelings, Whispering the names she picked for her kids. Look closely at her, she has no chains now, She can abscond easily whenever she wants But, alas, no longer has she the desire to fly; For her mutilated spirits relentlessly bleed Ever since her own hands clipped her wings. August 29, 2020 Placed 1st: Woman in chains poetry contest Sponsor: John Hamilton Inspired by Woman in Chains song by Tears for Fears

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Date: 9/24/2020 3:38:00 PM
Hello Vijay pandit, I just read your poem. I found it to be very sad. Enjoy your evening my friend.
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Date: 9/23/2020 11:11:00 AM
Sad and painful .please see or comment mine.be well.
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Date: 9/17/2020 8:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/11/2020 3:00:00 AM
this in your words stuns the voices of the caged birds singing beautifully painted, wishing you a blessed weekend
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/12/2020 1:40:00 PM
Much appreciate Liam--many thanks for your visit and comments. Have a wonderful weekend.
Date: 9/8/2020 9:40:00 AM
This is outstanding poetry dear friend absolutely excellent ' A shriveled rose desolate in parched garden, A discarded bottle of expensive scotch' - congratulations again and again on your top win. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 9/10/2020 2:51:00 PM
Thank you Jennifer--much appreciate my friend your visit and kind remarks.
Date: 9/3/2020 5:42:00 AM
A shriveled rose desolate in parched garden~ painful lines dear Vijay sir. Such a heart wrenching poem that you've created .I must say, it truly rolls tears down in the readers eyes.:-( Your works are always so interesting with delicate,meaningful concepts.:-) I am adding this masterpiece of yours in my FAVE list.:-) I believe your doing well.Keep inspiring.Take care.Warmest regards sent your way.:-)
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Date: 9/3/2020 8:15:00 AM
Your are so very kind, Deepa. Much appreciate your delightful feedback...many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 9/3/2020 12:28:00 AM
This Woman in Chains poetry contest has truly inspired you Vijay! The mixture of beautiful and sad have produced a worthy top winner...Congratulations! ...a fav // paul
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Date: 9/3/2020 5:11:00 AM
Much appreciate Paul--many thanks for the kind feedback. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 9/2/2020 10:17:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful story/write. Love your last line. Enjoy your win and day.......................
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Date: 9/2/2020 2:43:00 PM
Thank you Paula--much appreciate.
Date: 9/2/2020 8:40:00 AM
Vijay, Your passion comes through in this potent verse 'Reciting lyrics, crooning spent feelings, Whispering the names she picked for her kids'. -Richard
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Date: 9/2/2020 9:34:00 AM
Thank you Richard--much appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 9/2/2020 1:50:00 AM
Wow! That is all I can say...Wow!
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Date: 9/2/2020 5:24:00 AM
Honored by your visit and comments, Elaine--much appreciate--many thanks.
Date: 9/1/2020 11:29:00 PM
Vijay, I'm agape after reading this.! First time seeing it. Awesome. Honestly a masterpiece. Your painting of WIC extremely poetic, rich. Yet also very direct in telling message. Yours is an outstanding entry. One to treasure among your gorgeous collection of writes. Top Congratulations on brilliant Win..!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/2/2020 5:23:00 AM
You are so very kind--thank you Sigrid--much appreciate your heartfelt comments.
Date: 9/1/2020 3:45:00 PM
very profound, Vijay!! It reminded me of that song by Manilow. the lady Lola, who was a showgirl! Congrats for your win.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/2/2020 5:22:00 AM
Thank you Andrea. Yes--I looked it up--sad ending there as well.
Date: 9/1/2020 2:32:00 PM
Just stopping back with a well-earned Congratulations on your big win! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 9/1/2020 3:08:00 PM
Much appreciate my friend--many thanks, Carolyn.
Date: 9/1/2020 2:23:00 PM
Congratulations on your top win Vijay!
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Date: 9/1/2020 3:07:00 PM
Thank you Mark--much appreciate.
Date: 9/1/2020 11:53:00 AM
wow, we both made it with you a rank higher...huge congrats, vijay!..huggs
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Date: 9/1/2020 12:33:00 PM
Much appreciate, Nette--many thanks.
Date: 9/1/2020 10:58:00 AM
Piercing truth..
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Date: 9/1/2020 12:33:00 PM
Thank you Kirsten--much appreciate.
Date: 9/1/2020 8:39:00 AM
So powerful, Jijay. "A shriveled rose" with no desire to fly - truly tragic. Congratulations on your first place win!
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Date: 9/1/2020 12:33:00 PM
Thank you Sam--much appreciate.
Date: 9/1/2020 8:22:00 AM
Wow Vijay you keep outdoing yourself, just when I think you've peaked you enter another beauty, beautiful in it's sadness and astounding imagery and word pictures, unique phrasing, I can't say enough about how much I love this write, congrats on another top win!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2020 12:33:00 PM
You are so very kind, John. I am thrilled by your comments--certainly means a lot coming from you. Much appreciate--many thanks for holding contests.
Date: 9/1/2020 5:42:00 AM
One of your best, I expect it will do well in the contest.
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Date: 9/1/2020 7:23:00 AM
Thank you Richard--much appreciate your kind feedback.
Date: 9/1/2020 3:44:00 AM
Wow. This poem reaches the reader deeply. Very powerful and sad! And then wrapped up with a bang of an ending too. Your poetry excels. Have a nice day :)
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Date: 9/1/2020 5:08:00 AM
So very kind of you my friend--always appreciate your comments and support. Many thanks, Heidi.
Date: 9/1/2020 2:42:00 AM
- A story that gives me goosebumps, Vijay ... excellent written ... but horrible experience - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2020 5:07:00 AM
Much appreciate your kind remarks, Anne-Lise--many thanks, as always.
Date: 8/31/2020 3:07:00 PM
Oh, my! I got chills when I read how she no longer wants to fly, Vijay. So sad that her happiness had to fade. A stellar entry for John's contest! You won't need luck to win -- talent speaks for itself. Definitely a fave for me. Hugs, Carolyn
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/31/2020 3:56:00 PM
Such delight to read your valued comments my friend. I appreciate your vote of approval, Carolyn. Many thanks, as always. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 8/31/2020 12:13:00 PM
Too great... I liked a lot...
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Date: 8/31/2020 12:44:00 PM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate, Many thanks Pashang for your visit and comments.
Date: 8/31/2020 11:46:00 AM
Magnificent!! This is just a wonderful poem and very true and touching at the same time! You have brought the suffering of many women to surface! Many great lines here!! Well done my friend! This is extraordinary!! A Favourite for me!
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Date: 8/31/2020 12:43:00 PM
Delighted by your visit my friend and such wonderful comments. You are so very kind, Krish. Much appreciate--many many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 8/31/2020 7:52:00 AM
A brilliant poem, Vijay:) she is free now...
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Date: 8/31/2020 8:36:00 AM
Thank you Jo--much appreciate your kind remarks.
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