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WITHOUT PARENTAL CONSENT

music to kids ears Pete carried on with his flute without parental consent his larynx engaged as his footprints leave their clues there would be scars over soot townsfolk grab pitchforks multilingual torches mad with fear and grief chase down thief find kids in a trance listening to final dirge and piper’s mocking laughter parent takes the flute second silence in forest breaks the jester’s tool in half Peter Piper’s dust to dust

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Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 3/25/2024 5:52:00 PM

" As I’ve said before, I love when readers find their take of the story. We oft write collaborations :)" ~ The big poetess Kim Rodrigues. Wonderful comment reply!

Paige Hind

Date: 3/25/2024 4:31:00 PM

A dark turn- almost like 'laughed to scorn'- hmmm, enjoyed this. Kim-

Robert Gorelick

Date: 3/25/2024 10:01:00 AM

True, our children oft times go astray...As do some parents whom they're told to obey...Let's be good and kind keeping others in mind...And not forget Harper Valley PTA! Much food for thought, easily digested! Robert

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/25/2024 10:21:00 AM

Harper Valley PTA…lol. Glad you like this, Robert!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/25/2024 8:46:00 AM

Dear Kim, I love that it is dark and twisted! The Pied Piper with a dark twist – kids in a trance, torches, and mocking laughter! It leaves me wondering about Peter's motives. Was he angry? Just mischievous? And the ending with the parent breaking the flute – so final. Great Read, Kim! - Blessings, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/25/2024 10:22:00 AM

His tweets went a-flute… Blessings, Daniel!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/25/2024 8:45:00 AM

I enjoyed the poetic retake of the Pied Piper. Wondering if your poem is alluding to the lack of parental consent seen in some public schools as it relates to gender transition? Maybe I'm reading too much into your poem??? Have a great day, hugs, Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/25/2024 10:23:00 AM

As I’ve said before, I love when readers find their take of the story. We oft write collaborations :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/25/2024 8:33:00 AM

I am wondering if this one has a deeper interpretation than it seems on the surface. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/25/2024 10:25:00 AM

Thank you so much! Interpretations are perhaps endless… Blessings!