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Within Her Eyes

Sun Be Gone Let Her face befriend darkness so he may not seek those lips of red that plead that beg , needy for his kiss nor feel the aching for his touch So he may not look within her eyes and find there the afterglow of his love.
Brief Memories -For Flo's Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 9/5/2017 10:22:00 AM
This is very beautifully written :)
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Date: 5/12/2016 11:32:00 AM
Straight from the heart with a cleanser for the mind. A powerful seven and an absolute wonder.
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Date: 5/5/2016 1:15:00 PM
This is is fine piece with soul-reaching quality. I love this so much
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Date: 4/27/2016 5:40:00 PM
Sweet words - and good use of the form. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 4/24/2016 7:16:00 AM
Uniquely creative..Enjoyed reading your emotive work..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Sara
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Date: 4/20/2016 2:10:00 PM
Beautiful, though sad; I feel you are saying 'Go' and yet deep down you plead "Come"....as if there is forbidden love involved. #7 Regards // paul
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Date: 4/16/2016 12:40:00 AM
So,now its obvious Global warming is all your fault!!! You sure warmed me with this! :)
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Date: 4/15/2016 2:38:00 PM
beautiful but sad etheree Charma:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/15/2016 8:31:00 AM
So much passion in such a few lines. This must be a Poetic Quickie!
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Date: 4/14/2016 7:56:00 AM
Excellent. A beautiful and touching write. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 4/13/2016 7:17:00 PM
In the afterglow of love a luminance of lust lives in the truth of two hearts, that need is not a want, that love is not a whim...your heart beats so dire in sweet panic Poetess, so warm in it's ache...the sensuality of your feelings is amazing in this brilliant poem my Lady Hawk...J.A.B. A FAV!
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Date: 4/13/2016 2:54:00 PM
Beautifully painted afterglow charmaine excellent pen dear pal wishing you a blessing of a weekend
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Date: 4/12/2016 4:03:00 PM
very interesting and well crafted etheree. Afterglow is a good thing and yet I sense negative images of not wanting him to see you beg. That makes it a very original idea!! Love when you write these short ones.
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Date: 4/12/2016 1:19:00 AM
not sure about the first 2 lines, they seem disjointed, and not in keping with the write,...maybe " light - be gone " ??
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 4/12/2016 10:44:00 AM
I changed the second line..Yes took your advice on that, thanks. .But I prefer My Sun to your light : )..Sun Be gone....What do you think?.Thanks
Date: 4/11/2016 9:39:00 PM
Charmaine, there is a sadness in this sultry write that touches the soul, I am loving it 7 ~
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Date: 4/11/2016 5:45:00 PM
Sad write Charmaine but well written. Peace pretty lady:)
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Date: 4/11/2016 4:49:00 PM
Very sad piece Charmaine. I sense a loss of love...gives my heart a tug
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