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He Wished Upon a Star

The sun shone upon him As he wished all day long Thought odds were grim He'd sing that same song He lost his faith in all Still held on to some hope One day love would call He'd find a way to cope Held onto all his sorrow Refused to let it go But he never had to borrow A love for him did grow She sent it each twilight Upon the gentle breeze Days it shown so bright She sent it with an ease Asking nothing in return Wished only to lift his heart He became her one concern For a true love to be a part

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 10/15/2019 10:44:00 AM
Refined and fine, I'm grateful because its beautiful, great lines with fire, connecting me like a wire, shows the glory of your hand and the power of your mind. An excellent piece my friend.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/15/2019 12:28:00 PM
Funom thank you so much!;)
Date: 10/15/2019 6:52:00 AM
I also read this one too- how I know? the rhythm and rhyme was amazing. I love your adoration. Be blessed and hugs :)-luloo
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/15/2019 12:27:00 PM
Ah Laura thank you once again! You truly are too kind!;)
Date: 10/10/2019 6:25:00 AM
Beautifully written Brenda :-) x
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/10/2019 12:00:00 PM
Elaine thank you so much!;)
Date: 10/9/2019 2:40:00 PM
A rather nice thoughtful piece Brenda, I really loved your rhyme too. Glad to see you're still writing real poetic gems. Poetry hugs,Gordon
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/9/2019 7:47:00 PM
Gordon thx so much for always supporting my work!;)
Date: 10/9/2019 6:09:00 AM
This is very sweet and wonderful rhyme. I enjoyed it and wish you many more great poems. Blessings and love sent your way, Gina
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/9/2019 7:47:00 PM
Thank you so much Regina!;)
Date: 10/9/2019 5:06:00 AM
Nice one sis...your poetry just keeps getting better and better...the Uincornies and I can't keep up lol...puff puff pt 2 coming soon, maybe this weekend...all my love, bro bro...
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/9/2019 7:46:00 PM
Thank you bro bro!;) I cant wait to read part 2! I know it will be amazing as part 1!;)
Date: 10/8/2019 6:41:00 PM
Very enjoyable B, hope this evening carries you well
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/8/2019 7:35:00 PM
Thank you and you too T;)

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