Wiser

I'm a forlorn sunset, streaked with wise light of marine swells in heart's pulse.

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Mat Ignacio

Date: 11/6/2023 3:18:00 PM

nicely expressed in its brevity

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/22/2023 12:08:00 AM

Every-thing is part of everything else, Hiya.' In this you highlight the elements of our World so well.' Yet also you refrence yourself.' Both seem dichohtomy's often.' yet all have energy and create energy.' So that alone is a Connection, does everything have sentience Then? I wonder.!

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/22/2023 12:08:00 AM

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/22/2023 12:07:00 AM

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/20/2023 6:02:00 PM

Dearest Hiya, even in such a short form as this, your golden pen shines! Such beautiful melancholy balanced by the knowledge that after every sad sunset there is a "wiser" sunrise. You poetic talent radiates in brevity far beyond the confines of a monoku. Congratulations for your excellent win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes, my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 10/19/2023 11:40:00 AM

An excellent arrangement of words.. Congratulations on your placement.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/19/2023 5:57:00 AM

Poem brings to my mind an island sunset thst is relaxing and clean. Perhaps love is in bloom. Thank you for the image that this poem brings.

Valsa George

Date: 10/18/2023 8:48:00 PM

Lovely monoku. Oh, 'Forlorn sunsets' and 'marine swells'..... your indelible mark is sealed on them, dear Hiya.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 10/18/2023 4:12:00 AM

"forlorn sunset" - So lovely.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/18/2023 4:10:00 AM

I love the beauty of your one liner Hiya, have a blessed day full of inspiration and love

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/18/2023 2:30:00 AM

Brilliant Monoku. Blessings.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/17/2023 9:52:00 PM

Very deep one, Hiya:)

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/17/2023 8:29:00 PM

I love how you've woven wise and a beautiful sunset, that is unique and powerful. Best of luck for the contest! xooxo Anaya

Lin Lane

Date: 10/17/2023 4:09:00 PM

The setting sun has earned his rest, but there's always something final about his sinking into the horizon that saddens me. Nicely written, Hiya.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/20/2023 10:42:00 AM

Indeed- thank you so much for your beautiful visit on my page, dear Lin. Your comment is so thoughtful itself, very grateful for your kind feedback as well :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/17/2023 2:59:00 PM

Hiya--I appreciate the image of 'a forlorn sunset, streaked with the wise light...so eloquent, so powerful, and wise. Beautifully done. Have a pleasant evening, Sara

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/20/2023 10:39:00 AM

Thank you so much dear beautiful Sara, your graceful compliments truly touch my heart.. I'm really happy to recieve this precious feedback from you, sending so much love :)

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/17/2023 2:24:00 PM

Beautifully written, dear Hiya. Your piece is filled with concise yet profound observations, showcasing both strength and vulnerability.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/20/2023 9:59:00 AM

Thank you so much for your incredible support always, dear Sotto! I'm so grateful for your beautiful comments always, you're truly kind :)

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 10/17/2023 12:18:00 PM

Lovely piece of brevity Jiya, so excellently penned with nice insightfulness too, Gordon

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/20/2023 9:58:00 AM

Thank you so much for your wonderful words of appreciation, I'm so glad that you felt the depth here.. Grateful for the kind visit- Hiya :)

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 10/17/2023 10:37:00 AM

Brilliant! Love the image of a “forlorn sunset”! You are such a gifted poet!

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/20/2023 9:57:00 AM

Thank you so much dear beautiful poetess, this means a lot to me, coming from a gorgeous soul like you, sending love :)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/17/2023 7:30:00 AM

Wonderful. Much love. God bless you, love, Gina

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/18/2023 8:53:00 PM

Thank you so much my dear Gina, you're always so kind & sweet, sending love :)

James Marshall Goff

Date: 10/17/2023 7:08:00 AM

Strength yet fragility expressed well Hiya! Cheers!

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/18/2023 8:52:00 PM

Thank you so much for your beautiful visit, you really understood the depth of this monoku very well! I'm grateful for you reading this & commenting too.. :)

Ink Empress

Date: 10/17/2023 6:51:00 AM

You definitely are a wise soul my angelic star! I love how you’ve expressed here in such a creative and eloquent manner in just 17 syllables! How creative is that! A forlorn sunset! Despite the weariness of life that weathers your petals down, i see wisdom emanating through your marine swell heart, and for a young girl like you to feel this way is beyond strong of you! Keep the light close to your heart, and even if anyone tries to ever dim your light, remember you are more than any darkness!

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/18/2023 8:47:00 PM

Awwn, you're the bestest my dear Ink!! You definitely know how to make my heart warm, so much love and kindness you radiate! It's an honour to receive such beautiful words of appreciation from you, who has been my inspiration since the beginning.. And you really understand the depth of this monoku, to the core.. What else can a poet wish for!? Sending you tons of love and hugs :)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/17/2023 6:51:00 AM

Loving the alliterations and diction and emotions flowing throughout! Exquisite one liner! Goodluck for the contest