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Winter's Veil

The white of winter like a virgin bride glistens in pureness.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/7/2011 10:01:00 PM

Is this for the contest, George. (in case it is, he wants seven syllables in the middle line) but if it 's not for the contest,it is just FINE for syllable count of a modern haiku. a pretty picture! LUv, Andrea

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/7/2011 11:28:00 AM

Exquisite view, George! Enjoyed! Always, Annalise Soup Mail

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/7/2011 9:51:00 AM

Oh, you must live in an area where it snows to be able to describe it so well. Indeed, newly fallen snow has a "virgin" quality to it, George. A lovely "modern" haiku, the kind that doesn't have to conform to the 5-7-5 syllable count. If this is an entry for Michael's contest, you might ask him if the modern haiku is acceptable. Beautiful description! Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 2/7/2011 9:36:00 AM

Are you sure about the second line syllable count,George. If it's for the contest, p-lease give once over,

Francine Roberts

Date: 2/7/2011 8:50:00 AM

lovely haiku George, it can be a lovely pristine sight when it first snows

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/7/2011 8:12:00 AM

Beautifully written. I've seen too much white of winter already. I want to see the pristine green of spring soon.