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Winter Ruins

Bask in fervor lasted indeed Lingered enough to corrupt the seed Selfish, greedy, paid no heed Piqued and wounded took new lead Tender caress abandoned gifted Of flowing afflictions, life sifted Earth defiant, all essence lifted Bloom to plunder, cycle drifted Looming shadows withered progresses Life abandoned asunder tresses Came the worst of nature's dresses My bearings wander unworthy recesses The warmth of you when left embrace The light of you when shifted place Adieu, with you, all glow, all trace The leafless tree now bears no grace Hope of return, I thrive upon Keeps me moving, though you are gone Winter Ruins, my jewels in pawn I seek salvation at a distant dawn (I was inspired to write in this style by the numerous sensational works of my dear friend, Elizabeth Wesley - I know mine doesn't even come close)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Date: 6/11/2012 11:25:00 AM
I think it is a masterpiece and feel humbled that you find inspiration in me. However, if you got busy, your genius would take its rightful place right here. I'm sure all who have been here wish more of you was available. P S There's a new one at my place; would love to know what your think! :)
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Date: 3/15/2012 12:01:00 PM
Hi, Mr. Effendi. Thanks for reading my poems. I look constantly for something new from you. Hope you are having a wonderful life. Love, daver
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Date: 3/14/2012 2:32:00 PM
An awesome write beautifully rhymed. Brilliant. I am glad I stopped by to read this.
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Date: 2/7/2012 2:38:00 PM
You can view my face all the way down, hope it doesn't irritate you but I love to keep in touch and hope sometime you get inspired again. How are you? I guess you are busy and happy I hope. Love, LIzzy
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Date: 12/26/2011 8:46:00 PM
Guess who! Just me again stopping by to give my ego a boost. Love it Hussain, hope the new year fills you up with inspiration. Can I give you a hug to get it started?
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Date: 12/2/2011 10:48:00 PM
A brilliant write... Liz is a very nice and thoughtful women... ... enjoyed stopping by tooo read your poem~;-) always,..p.d.
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Date: 11/29/2011 7:19:00 PM
I have it in my favs but I like to come and visit - to read and enjoy again and keep in touch with you. Your visits are always so special luv.
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Date: 11/13/2011 10:38:00 AM
"The leafless tree now bears no grace." I like this line. Ruin can have no better definition. LOve, daver
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Date: 11/6/2011 2:20:00 PM
I love how you give each stanza one rhyme - I wonder if they have a name or category for this. It is so creativel and of course, what you have to say always has a special depth. Luv, Lizzy
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Date: 11/5/2011 11:50:00 PM
Awesome piece!!! I enjoyed immensely! Keep up the excellent work and thanks for the comments. :) Always, Laura
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Date: 11/5/2011 3:31:00 PM
This is a masterpiece! Brilliant write. Eloquent, lucid expressions with such deep meanings. Profound!
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Date: 11/4/2011 6:20:00 PM
Yes dear one, I am moved and those last two verses especially light my eyes and heart. Thank you dear Hussain, you give esteem when I don't deserve it but I am warmed by your thoughts and kindness. Love, Elizabeth
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Date: 11/4/2011 2:33:00 PM
Very impressive work..Good rhyming..Enjoyed reading your work this afternoon..I am glad that I chose this one..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara
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