Winter Heart

winter heart
  
winter prowls
 my barren heart
   leaves
crystal jewels 
       in
 my meadow

1-7-22
Contest: Haiku Contest Inspired by Basho
Sponsor: Damned I -Be
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Kaur Avatar
January 29, 2022 at 4:39 PM
Aha! So beautiful...I feel a similar connection with winter
Faulkner Avatar
January 15, 2022 at 12:37 PM
Lovely imagery of the crystal jewels of winter, it can feel sometimes like a barren season but there is also beauty to be found, best wishes for the contest~
Kauffman Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 10:32 AM
Michelle, a big thank you! Even though I hate being cold - it's a wonder I ever learned to ski or taught skiing - winter, for me, is like a sculptural, visual, masterpiece of contrasts, shapes, textures and colors. I so agree with you there is a unique beauty in this season. Hope you are staying healthy, warm and cozy! Blessings my friend :)
Proxenos Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 9:08 AM
Best wishes with this wonderfully descriptive poem you have entered into Basho's Haiku contest - though I perceive a win without my wishes for this Winter heart and crystal jewels entry. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Kauffman Avatar
January 11, 2022 at 11:05 AM
Hi Jennifer! Happy New Year. There must be a little gremlin on the soup! Your delightful words of encouragement just popped up in my inbox! Gave my winter heart another jewel to add to its collection. Thank you so much dear friend. Sending you sparkling blessings for your new year and a big hug :D
Messina Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 2:29 PM
Wonderful and stunning, Sam. I believe you captured Basho's form very well. Twice I had to change my entry (lol) Have a great and safe weekend my friend. Hugs Charlie
Kauffman Avatar
January 11, 2022 at 11:02 AM
Hi Charlie! Thank you so much. I am truly honored by your feedback! Had a chance to read both of your Basho haikus. I think you were also able to get into the spirit of his writings. Blessings and best wishes to you for the contest. Happy New Year! Love and hugs!
Cunningham Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 11:49 AM
Beautiful imagery Sam, great use of metaphors. Good luck and enjoy your weekend. Over Fork Over. Tom
Kauffman Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 11:59 AM
Hi Tom! Happy New year again! Thank you so much. Winter is such an amazing time of contrasts especially for writing images and metaphors. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. Sending you bright blessings for the new year. Over Fork Over.
Ahmed Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 11:30 AM
Beautiful metaphorical imagery! Loved your haiku poem! very poetic! Can i ask you about your haiku's construction sequence? Haiku, as far as i know is composed of 5/7/5 syllable lines. are there other forms? Thanks - Marshall.
Kauffman Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 11:55 AM
Hi Marshall! Thank you for your lovely words and feedback. You are correct about the composition of traditional haiku which I love. For this contest the sponsor wanted a non-traditional version based on the haiku master Basho and asked us to read some of Basho's writings and base our entries on his examples. Hope that clears up the mystery. And I hope you will enter the contest. Let me know if you decide to write and enter. Would love to see your entry. All the best for the new year.
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