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Winter Haiku

a flash of scarlet robin chirps its sweetest song snowflakes gently fall Inspired by a frosty morning at my home we didn't have no snow but the ground was white with frost on Sunday 1/20/20

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Line Gauthier

Date: 2/18/2020 8:21:00 PM

So lovely, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/8/2020 5:25:00 AM

thanks line sorry i missed replying sooner:-( hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/1/2020 4:48:00 PM

Beautiful contrast of scarlet to snow, another beauty, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/1/2020 5:35:00 PM

Thanks Michelle, yes the contrast in colour is quite breath taking to see, and the little robin always makes me smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Jude Herrick

Date: 1/24/2020 1:00:00 PM

The snow is playing Misty, for backdrop, this time, backstage, upstaged only by design of contract, each of these plotters, in turn. An endearing scene. Staged. It seems. Uncaged. Released, beautifully.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/24/2020 1:22:00 PM

Thanks Jude I think this is one of my favourite haiku I have written, have learned a lot since I first picked up my pen in 2013:-) thanks for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/24/2020 11:20:00 AM

I love birds. Come on Spring away from the cold. Have a wonderful weekend.....

Jan Allison
Date: 1/24/2020 11:23:00 AM

Thanks Paula:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/23/2020 9:21:00 AM

Such a cute video! I love God’s placement of songbirds!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/23/2020 9:49:00 AM

what a sweet comment Kim:-) hugs Jan x

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/22/2020 1:34:00 PM

A beautiful piece, I can easily visualize him chirping away. Enjoyed.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2020 3:30:00 PM

they are so friendly ML, I love seeing them in the garden:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/21/2020 9:23:00 PM

I feel I have seen it.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2020 3:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Caren:-):-) hugs Jan xx

Joe Dimino

Date: 1/21/2020 5:50:00 PM

Such a beautiful moment in time captured by an artist. Great concise write!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2020 3:26:00 PM

I often struggle with the form but from the comments I've got I think its a proper haiku!:-) thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/21/2020 2:06:00 PM

- A glimpse of winter beauty ... lovely haiku, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2020 3:25:00 PM

Thanks Anne-lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Adams

Date: 1/20/2020 7:55:00 PM

such a beautiful portrait you painted with your words....beautiful well crafted haiku :) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2020 3:25:00 PM

Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/20/2020 7:17:00 PM

a lovely haiku, jan, and thanks for the accompanying video. it's interesting - our robins look very different here. i guess there are many varieties of them.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 7:20:00 PM

I must look up and see what your robins look like, ours are so cute and very friendly!:-) hugs jan xx

Indiana Shaw

Date: 1/20/2020 4:37:00 PM

Love Robins, this is a lovely roll off the tongue haiku, so exquisitely balanced, beautiful, so enjoyed the video too . . . : )

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 4:53:00 PM

Thanks Indiana they are such sweet birds I find them so friendly and always smile when they are in the garden:-) hugs Jan x

Robert L. Hinshaw

Date: 1/20/2020 3:46:00 PM

A wonderful haiki, Jan - no matter the form you use for your poems, I enjoy them! I took the liberty of using your island town of Ryde in my latest nonsensical write called "Thee Nocturnal Ryde of Pall Revere" Best to you in 2020 and all the ensuing years to follow - Bob

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 4:03:00 PM

Thanks for your comment Bob, I live in the Isle of Man not Isle of wight but I will drop by and read your poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/20/2020 3:12:00 PM

what a beautiful sight for your inspiration, JAn. Now to see your other new one.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 3:26:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, I think my haiku writing has improved from my first attempts when I joined:-) hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/20/2020 2:24:00 PM

I enjoyed this Jan. Beautiful :)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 3:00:00 PM

Thanks so much Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 1/20/2020 2:17:00 PM

Gorgeous haiku Jan! :) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 2:59:00 PM

I think its one of my better efforts Tania:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 1/20/2020 1:47:00 PM

The Captcha Code is AWH - as in Aw How Sweet? An omen? Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 2:59:00 PM

aww glad you enjoyed Rico, I think Robin's are such sweet birds they always make me smile when I see one:-) hugs Jan xx

Anil Deo

Date: 1/20/2020 1:26:00 PM

glad U snapped the bugger, so we may enjoy. Robin looks a hardy boy, albeit more delicately built than my locals in South Africa. Thanks and Peace Sis (Shalom, shalom)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 2:58:00 PM

The clip is just from you tube I wouldn't know how to post it if I managed to take footage ... but my phone is so basic there is no way I can do it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/20/2020 12:21:00 PM

Very sweet!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 2:57:00 PM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Dm Babbit

Date: 1/20/2020 10:24:00 AM

Wonderfully expressed, oh to be on an island farw away from the madness of this world.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2020 11:40:00 AM

I could never live anywhere else DM, being island bound can have its drawbacks but to me its my little bit of heaven. its a safe haven and far removed from the madness of the world:-) hugs jan xx