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Nine beautiful lines (with a twist) contest Sponsored by Constance La France, 4/4/25

Will you marry me

Sue's
surprise
birthday treat.
A romantic
picnic on the beach
with roses and champagne.
Bill kneels down, and proposes
then produces a diamond ring
Will she marry him ... what do you think?

proposalromantic lovenonet

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Terry Miller

April 11, 2025 at 7:48 AM

I'm guessing yes, great poem, congratulations

David Crandall

April 9, 2025 at 5:11 PM

Good one - I'm guessing yes!

Duke Beaufort

April 9, 2025 at 4:20 PM

Jan, the poem is so well constructed, I am sure she would say yes. Yet I love that you leave it up to us....that gives readers a chance to think about our own experiences and think about the circumstances. Great poem and poetic technique!!! Smiles!

Linda Alice Fowler

April 9, 2025 at 6:18 AM

I dunno. How does this turn out Jan ;);) Congratulations on the win! :)

Paula Goldsmith

April 7, 2025 at 12:17 PM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write again. Please do a part 2... Have a blessed day with your win..............

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 7, 2025 at 12:04 PM

- Back with a congratulation, Jan :) - hugs

James Peranteau

April 5, 2025 at 6:16 PM

do ya mind if I have a talk with her first ,) so you are a bit thuh romantic now Jan are ya ') now you've cauze'd thoze silly muzez uv mine....much love to ya

Beryl Edmonds

April 5, 2025 at 2:10 AM

Most likely she said yes, carried away by the romance of the day… Beryl

David Kavanagh

April 4, 2025 at 3:28 PM

Imagine being put on the spot like that, How many carats did you say were in that ring Jan? Lol! Great nine liner for the contest, cheers David

CayCay Godwin

April 4, 2025 at 11:56 AM

Very clever. I'm sure no other entry will be anything like this, but then no other poet is like you. A joy to read ... CayCay

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 4, 2025 at 11:48 AM

- If love is true she will say yes, Jan :) - Lovely poem - best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Tom Cunningham

April 4, 2025 at 10:53 AM

How could she refuse an offer like that. Love is in the air. Tom

Paula Goldsmith

April 4, 2025 at 10:40 AM

I think this is a wonderful write to read. Great Picture... Will there be a part 2??? "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a wonderful day/weekend writing away.......

Ilene Bauer

April 4, 2025 at 10:34 AM

I sure hope so! Best of luck in the contest, Jan!

Kim Rodrigues

April 4, 2025 at 10:20 AM

Likely! So cute!

Lin Lane

April 4, 2025 at 8:58 AM

I don't know. Does she love him? To be continued? lol Jan. I'm just kidding you. You've entered a different take on nine lines but different can be refreshingly good.

Jan Allison

April 4, 2025 at 9:58 AM

I discovered i could do a reverse nonet so it worked well with the last line being 9 syllables. I hope Constance likes it - its rare for me to write romantic lines lol. got some penguin humour i will post later xx

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