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June- 13- 2025
Echo, Enduring or Empty Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Constance La France
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Why I Feel Empty

“Emptiness is an all- pervasive feeling of lack of movement or fulfilment in life. It is a hollowness that can’t be filled. It is stagnancy like doldrum”~ By Poet


 Of late, I am haunted by an empty feeling.
  This I have been trying to overlook,
   But it has grown into alarming proportions.
    No one can really know what I am passing through.

With vicious teeth and jagged talons,
This morbid feeling tears me from inside out.
There’s a kind of emotional void in me.
My mind is adrift and I can’t find solid ground. 

 You can never see it in my demeanour,
  Nor discern any trace of it in my voice.
   Somehow, I try to hide it from others
    With a bubbling and facetious façade.
 
But it fattens in me, making me feel I am done 
Which I can no more, ignore. 
What I have is not actually pain or bitterness
But something I cannot name or define.

 I feel life is empty without the option of any choice
  A cosmic blink determines the pattern of our lives
   Our status, rank, our highs and lows, all determined
    By a power beyond our conscious control. 

This emptiness inside, stays on with me
Without the outer world coming to know of it.
It is as if everything is slipping away from me.
I fear, I am fated to carry that feeling till my end.
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Date: 6/15/2025 11:03:00 AM
- Back with a congrats, Valsa :) - hugs
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Date: 6/15/2025 6:10:00 AM
As time hastens, the more I realize how much I have missed and will never attain. "...it fattens in me, making me feel I am done" – priceless dear Valsa. Congratulations! :)
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Date: 6/15/2025 3:22:00 AM
Back with congratulations Valsa on your well-deserved win in this contest. Wishing you a cheerful day.
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Date: 6/14/2025 9:20:00 AM
Actually I can really relate to this. I felt so much more alive when I was young and full of dreams. Then you realize certain things are worsening and sometimes you just feel empty. I even felt this before I turned five. Nice one. Love the phrase" it fattens in me"
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Date: 6/13/2025 11:33:00 PM
A great poem on the mental state many like me possess. You have articulated the growing emptiness so beautifully and touchingly.
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Date: 6/13/2025 8:08:00 AM
A lovely poem. Liked particularly the penultimate stanza "Lilting songs tuned up at tea time, Mint scent pervades the nearby air, No time better than at morn On to start the day with soft taste, Pursue the journey with a bang." So beautifully expressed in simplicity. Best wishes in the contest.
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Date: 6/13/2025 4:53:00 AM
Hollowness of emptiness so aptly portrayed, Valsa ~ all the best for the contest.
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Date: 6/13/2025 4:40:00 AM
Valsa, you have so perfectly described this gut wrenching feeling! Hoping this is fiction but if not, sending hugs, well how about I send hugs anyway! Good luck!!
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Date: 6/13/2025 2:01:00 AM
- A feeling that is conscious, but we often try to hide it, Valsa - A poem with deep feelings written from the heart - Best wishes in the contest - Have a lovely day :) - hugs
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Date: 6/13/2025 1:27:00 AM
Dear Valsa. your title should have four words including empty. It would be a pity not to get a placement for this wonderful poem.
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Valsa George
Date: 6/13/2025 1:35:00 AM
Thank you so much dear Victor for your timely reminding. It just slipped out of my mind. Immensely grateful, my friend. I have changed the title.
Date: 6/12/2025 9:47:00 PM
Oh, Valsa, you have expertly encapsulated the heartbreak of nihilism. For what it's worth, the balancing factor of nihilism happens to be storytelling. And you, my friend, are a great storyteller. Keep your voice and I hope you are well.
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