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Why Didn'T He See It Coming

It was late on Saturday night, 
the girls were out for fun. 
We were in fancy dress costumes -
I was dressed as a nun!

We had got our seats booked to see
a psychic medium.
We’d had a busy week, so could
escape from tedium.

Heading off to a bar, we looked
such an amusing sight,
sipping cocktails in our costumes -
we gave so much delight!

We giggled like schoolgirls, but soon
time came for us to go.
We walked to the venue to see
our pre-booked psychic show.

But much to our chagrin, we found 
that it had been called off 
due to ‘unforeseen reasons’… at
this “psychic” we did scoff!

Contest Pink Dominoes sponsored by Sara Kendrick
syllable counter used how many syllables 8,6,8,6. lines 2 and 4 rhyming


07~21~16

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Anisha Dutta Date: 7/30/2016 8:49:00 AM Congrats JAN to win. Love Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/30/2016 3:15:00 PM Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/30/2016 8:44:00 AM Your wonderful work got my attention! I am so glad to place it in the winners’ list..Congrats to you. Sara ..I guess it just wasn't written in the cards for him to see the unexpected event..LOL.. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/30/2016 3:15:00 PM LOL love that comment Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra Date: 7/30/2016 7:04:00 AM Congrats on your win, Jan. It was a difficult contest no doubt.(at least for me) ~karam~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/30/2016 7:07:00 AM Thanks Karam yes I too found it a challenge - my original poem I had 6,8,6,8 and not 8,6,8,6 syllables so I had to do a rehash lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 7/29/2016 3:22:00 PM Hi Jan, I had a feeling you were going to be on the winner's list with this hilarious write. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/29/2016 3:47:00 PM Thanks so much Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx Phillip Garcia Date: 7/29/2016 3:22:00 PM Did you have trouble, as I did, switching back to normal rhyme mode after you wrote this?

Phillip Garcia Date: 7/29/2016 12:10:00 PM You had me at "I was dressed as a nun". Hilarious as always, Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/29/2016 3:47:00 PM No I have no trouble ever writing with rhyme:-) hugs jan xx Jan Allison Date: 7/29/2016 3:09:00 PM Thanks Phillip - I had fun writing for the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel Date: 7/27/2016 12:37:00 AM I like your entry, Jan:) Sounds real fun:) All the best:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2016 3:32:00 AM Thanks Jo it was quite a challenge as I got the lines the wrong way round on my first attempt and had to do changes lol - need to read the rules more carefully next time!:-) hugs Jan xx

Old Man Emu Date: 7/23/2016 10:06:00 PM Cool Jan, love the title too. Very gifted you are. As always enjoy your poem Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2016 3:48:00 PM Thanks Craig for your very kind comment:-) I do enjoy playing with the title - to me it is as important as the poem itself:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 7/22/2016 5:29:00 AM Charmingly hilarious dearest, Jan! Certainly you have a fine talent for humorous writing! Enjoyed it and a seven! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/22/2016 7:15:00 AM I love writing with humour Demetrios but I can turn my hand to write more serious poems too:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer Date: 7/21/2016 6:32:00 PM ha! very funny, jan! my favorite part is the rhyme of medium and tedium - very clever! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/21/2016 6:40:00 PM Thanks Ilene - am in the process of amending it for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/21/2016 6:10:00 PM Ha ha, the physic should have warned you not to come. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/21/2016 6:13:00 PM Exactly lol - need to rewrite it for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 7/21/2016 5:01:00 PM What a hopeless psychic medium!! Should have seen that coming days before! Excellent, especially the last stanza. hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/21/2016 5:11:00 PM I wrote it for the contest then was advised I'd got the syllables the wrong way round 8,6,8,6 and I'd done 6, 8,6,8 - doh bird brain so I need to amend it :-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 7/21/2016 2:44:00 PM lol...She should have known Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/21/2016 2:46:00 PM LOl - I wrote it for the contest then discovered it should be 8,68,6 doh - bird brain:-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 7/21/2016 12:49:00 PM Hi Jan, I'm not suprised that you nailed this difficult theme. Because you are one funny lady. I enjoyed the humor. Best of luck in the contest. A Big seven:-) Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/21/2016 4:24:00 PM I did 6,8,6,8 it should be 8.6.8.6 - doh I didn't copy the rules properly lol hugs Jan xx Alexis Y. Date: 7/21/2016 4:22:00 PM It looked fine to me. I'm sure the revised version will be even better. :-) Alexis Jan Allison Date: 7/21/2016 2:19:00 PM I've got the syllable count the wrong way Alexis! have a lot of editing to do to get it right for the contest so I've removed it for now:-( hugs Jan xx

Constance La France Date: 7/21/2016 10:32:00 AM Jan, well done, I like where you took this difficult theme, a BIG 7 ~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/21/2016 10:47:00 AM Thanks Constance:-) hugs Jan xx