Jan Allison Poet Quatrain

Why Didn'T He See It Coming

It was late on Saturday night, 
the girls were out for fun. 
We were in fancy dress costumes -
I was dressed as a nun!

We had got our seats booked to see
a psychic medium.
We’d had a busy week, so could
escape from tedium.

Heading off to a bar, we looked
such an amusing sight,
sipping cocktails in our costumes -
we gave so much delight!

We giggled like schoolgirls, but soon
time came for us to go.
We walked to the venue to see
our pre-booked psychic show.

But much to our chagrin, we found 
that it had been called off 
due to ‘unforeseen reasons’… at
this “psychic” we did scoff!

Contest Pink Dominoes sponsored by Sara Kendrick
syllable counter used how many syllables 8,6,8,6. lines 2 and 4 rhyming


07~21~16

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Anisha Dutta July 30, 2016 at 8:49 AM Congrats JAN to win. Love Jan Allison July 30, 2016 at 3:15 PM Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick July 30, 2016 at 8:44 AM Your wonderful work got my attention! I am so glad to place it in the winners’ list..Congrats to you. Sara ..I guess it just wasn't written in the cards for him to see the unexpected event..LOL.. Jan Allison July 30, 2016 at 3:15 PM LOL love that comment Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra July 30, 2016 at 7:04 AM Congrats on your win, Jan. It was a difficult contest no doubt.(at least for me) ~karam~ Jan Allison July 30, 2016 at 7:07 AM Thanks Karam yes I too found it a challenge - my original poem I had 6,8,6,8 and not 8,6,8,6 syllables so I had to do a rehash lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. July 29, 2016 at 3:22 PM Hi Jan, I had a feeling you were going to be on the winner's list with this hilarious write. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis Jan Allison July 29, 2016 at 3:47 PM Thanks so much Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx Phillip Garcia July 29, 2016 at 3:22 PM Did you have trouble, as I did, switching back to normal rhyme mode after you wrote this?

Phillip Garcia July 29, 2016 at 12:10 PM You had me at "I was dressed as a nun". Hilarious as always, Jan Jan Allison July 29, 2016 at 3:47 PM No I have no trouble ever writing with rhyme:-) hugs jan xx Jan Allison July 29, 2016 at 3:09 PM Thanks Phillip - I had fun writing for the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel July 27, 2016 at 12:37 AM I like your entry, Jan:) Sounds real fun:) All the best:) Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 3:32 AM Thanks Jo it was quite a challenge as I got the lines the wrong way round on my first attempt and had to do changes lol - need to read the rules more carefully next time!:-) hugs Jan xx

Old Man Emu July 23, 2016 at 10:06 PM Cool Jan, love the title too. Very gifted you are. As always enjoy your poem Jan Allison July 24, 2016 at 3:48 PM Thanks Craig for your very kind comment:-) I do enjoy playing with the title - to me it is as important as the poem itself:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis July 22, 2016 at 5:29 AM Charmingly hilarious dearest, Jan! Certainly you have a fine talent for humorous writing! Enjoyed it and a seven! Jan Allison July 22, 2016 at 7:15 AM I love writing with humour Demetrios but I can turn my hand to write more serious poems too:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer July 21, 2016 at 6:32 PM ha! very funny, jan! my favorite part is the rhyme of medium and tedium - very clever! Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 6:40 PM Thanks Ilene - am in the process of amending it for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux July 21, 2016 at 6:10 PM Ha ha, the physic should have warned you not to come. Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 6:13 PM Exactly lol - need to rewrite it for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus July 21, 2016 at 5:01 PM What a hopeless psychic medium!! Should have seen that coming days before! Excellent, especially the last stanza. hugs // paul Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 5:11 PM I wrote it for the contest then was advised I'd got the syllables the wrong way round 8,6,8,6 and I'd done 6, 8,6,8 - doh bird brain so I need to amend it :-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith July 21, 2016 at 2:44 PM lol...She should have known Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 2:46 PM LOl - I wrote it for the contest then discovered it should be 8,68,6 doh - bird brain:-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. July 21, 2016 at 12:49 PM Hi Jan, I'm not suprised that you nailed this difficult theme. Because you are one funny lady. I enjoyed the humor. Best of luck in the contest. A Big seven:-) Alexis Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 4:24 PM I did 6,8,6,8 it should be 8.6.8.6 - doh I didn't copy the rules properly lol hugs Jan xx Alexis Y. July 21, 2016 at 4:22 PM It looked fine to me. I'm sure the revised version will be even better. :-) Alexis Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 2:19 PM I've got the syllable count the wrong way Alexis! have a lot of editing to do to get it right for the contest so I've removed it for now:-( hugs Jan xx

Constance La France July 21, 2016 at 10:32 AM Jan, well done, I like where you took this difficult theme, a BIG 7 ~ Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 10:47 AM Thanks Constance:-) hugs Jan xx