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White On White

Midday light unfolds a shawl
How strange that it can numb the cold
Sun skirts the brow of peak and mound
where white on white can blind the eye
and seize the moment for awhile

Sweat trickles from his forehead,
He pauses now, to take a breath
He'll hesitate to scar the snow
this sterile and pure from earth to sky
like fresh washed sheets hung out to dry

The dunes above are striped with trails,
like distant rails, of twin-lines drawn
He'll take a rest, then a last shalom, 
until, at last, he'll head for home

He frowns against the brilliant glare
reminded of a Hitchcock tale
He's spellbound in the frigid air. 
A  morning haze rescinds to blue 
The world he knew of silent clues
will not respect his fortitude
He knows not of its will to take
or stake its claim without remorse

He pushes off at lightning speed
A deep crevice, the deed is done
The bliss is gone, the thief has won
And  what is lost, can't be recalled

When last, he's  found, ..a  bird ascends
to sweep the sky, to lift him high
High into clouds, and through the sky
to where tall mountains must be climbed

It's white on white, where sheets are sterile, 
a life unfurled against the light
The light is strong, it blinds the eye
The bone, the spine , the pain, the plight
He'll live somehow.  A chair, he's bound 
from now until the light is gone....

White on white…the nights live on,
……and life is changed from this day on



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Based on a true event
4/9/17
For Charlotte's contest: Open Poetry Contest 2
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Makama Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 10:16 AM
Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure.
Richards Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 10:33 AM
Thank you so much, such a great compliment and so appreciated, Funom ;)
Michelle Avatar
May 24, 2017 at 2:12 PM
A beautiful write, Carrie! White is such a wonderful metaphor for so many things and you captured that spendidly! Love, Juli-Michelle
La France Avatar
May 9, 2017 at 10:03 AM
Carrie, I love this write so much ..a winner to me 7+++
Dietrich Avatar
May 8, 2017 at 5:57 PM
Who was it?
Richards Avatar
May 8, 2017 at 7:37 PM
This recent event happened in January to a friend of my daughter's
Dietrich Avatar
May 8, 2017 at 5:57 PM
OMG, Carrie. What amazing poetry this is. I was reminded of Christopher Reeves when just one small mistake on a horse cost him his acting career and a normal life from then on. You really excelled in this form with this poem! FAVE
Richards Avatar
May 8, 2017 at 7:39 PM
Thank you, however, it makes me sad to think of the consequences of a such tragic turn of events. Somehow I had to write about it, and I don't know why it helps to reveal how life can change in an instant.
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 3, 2017 at 1:56 AM
This poem is magnificent Carrie! I'm reminded of "what price glory". I wish I could write half this great! 7 ; )
Sullivan Avatar
April 22, 2017 at 7:05 AM
Amazing work Carrie. :)
Mark Avatar
April 18, 2017 at 5:35 AM
Oh my Carrie , some wonderful stuff going on here, kept it in simple speech throughout but manipulated the words cleverly without over cooking ....truly a great piece that I see Charlotte would have wrung hands over....well done..xxIan
Puddifoot Avatar
April 17, 2017 at 6:03 AM
'although chair-bound' altogether, so it would read "he'll live somehow, from now/until the light is gone..." or you could put something like "the spine, the pain, the plight, the chair.../he'll live somehow, from now" trust the reader to fill in the blanks...congrats on your win in my contest with this excellent poem!
Puddifoot Avatar
April 17, 2017 at 5:58 AM
carrie, it was with heavy heart i placed this outside the top three...an epic, affecting piece, with a superb opening line...some wonderfully rendered lines; the sheer graft that went into this intricate piece, and a poem of this magnitude deserves further refining...i hope what i say is construed as helpful and not critical: if it were me, i would go through it and see if there are any overstated bits that could be taken out, and in that last stanza i would be tempted to remove
Parker Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 11:16 AM
I know that chair well dear poet and the reckless abandon of the spirit that now sits..my oldest son now 40, met that chair at 17 and his life was changed from that day on
Richards Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 11:22 AM
I'm so very sorry, Frederic, that this hits close to home. We just recently had a 'friend of a friend' meet this same chair-bound world, and it is still such a mountain to climb. We must be grateful for each day we can walk, see or climb :)
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