Whitby By Night

The moon reflected on the sea,
A night more beautiful than day.
I wheezed and struggled up the steps
And looked out over Whitby Bay.

I saw the harbour far below,
And heard the splashing of the waves,
I turned around to see the church,
The ruined abbey and the graves.

I thought of Dracula, the Count,
Imagined him and Lucy there,
And then I saw a hulking shape -
But, oh, the menace in that glare.

He showed his fangs and hissed at me;
My feet were rooted to the spot.
I cried for help and waved my arms
At people on a distant yacht.

He lunged and bit into my neck;
I tried to fight but felt so weak.
And that is how I came to die -
And you’re the prey I need to seek…

for Darren's Bram Stoker contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 4/16/2014 6:12:00 PM
JACK, Congratulations, enjoyed stopping by. Luv ~SKAT~
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Date: 4/16/2014 5:41:00 AM
excellent Jack, another one I thought fitted the brief and should have placed higher xx
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Date: 4/15/2014 8:05:00 AM
Feeling like Bram Stoker is alive. Congrats on the win, jack
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Date: 4/15/2014 3:52:00 AM
Congrats on fine placing Jack. // enjoyed the transformation and the atmosphere. // paul
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Date: 3/31/2014 4:14:00 PM
Should do well in the contest good Luck Jack I really enjoyed the way you built up the tension in this poem. hugs Jan x
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Date: 3/21/2014 10:05:00 AM
Jack, wow and wow, this is wonderful, your love of the dark shows bright and clear in this write, best of luck in the contest
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Date: 3/18/2014 12:41:00 PM
So evoking of the darker side of life jack. Awesome, Awesome write. Your frightening tale of Whitby by night. Peace. :) Someone's going to have to write one heck of a piece to beat this one.
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Date: 3/18/2014 8:25:00 AM
hey, this is GREAT. You are so good at doing these kinds of contests, Jack. You are being inspired by contests that I have not even considered trying . I like the quiet terror this one evokes. the way you built the poem up!
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Date: 3/17/2014 4:52:00 PM
Reads like a winner..Way to go for the contest...Thanks for the visits..So you are now dead and still writing poetry?..Sara
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Date: 3/17/2014 4:18:00 PM
I love it Jack..Good luck in the contest....Tim
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Date: 3/17/2014 11:51:00 AM
Good luck in the contest with this great poem. Thank you Jack for reading and commenting on mine. You are a great friend. Love, Joyce
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