Whisper

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Opening the scene with a Sestet (6-line stanza) based on the following syllables:

Line 1 - 5 syllables

Line 2 - 12 syllables

Line 3 - 13 syllables

Line 4 to 6 - 16 syllables

 

Followed by a Decastich (10-line stanza) in Free Verse style interlaced with a Couplet (2-line stanza) of 13 syllables in each line. The 13-syllable count denotes the unfortunate circumstances or consequences described in the poem to give the slight edge in tone.

 

Ending the scene with a Sestet based on the same structure as in the opening verse, followed by a Couplet.

I heard a whisper…

In my dream last night,  you've found another to hold

Where the blind ones tossed and turned, lost in a labyrinth 

Your lonely nights becoming  a sanctuary forming  desires

Turning your head away from an old promise, facing a new one

Faraway in another cosmos under a starlight banner 

 

A deafening silence too much to bear closes in

Sounds of murkiness cave in as crows begin to caw

 

From the raindrops falling on grey cold pavement

Where blue ice cut into clouds sparsely scattered 

Wet on the inside not covered by a roof

The gentle tapping driven by the wind's breath

Dry on the side that lay below the roofs

Looking through the panes, a vacant stare 

There, on the dry side, slept a homeless elderly man

His hands weathered and bleached by nature's curse 

Lying on used cardboard boxes and covered by layers of them 

Each day opening his eyes, the struggle to survive begins all over again 

 

Has he given up hope for his own society?

Or has society abandoned him to the streets?

 

From the coffee dripping into a pot

stirring as it freshly brews a warm steam

Smell of caffeine fills the air delighting the senses

into the cup of memories sharing visions 

Camouflaging the scent of loneliness 

mingling with thoughts of happiness  

There, on the coffee table, sits a poorly dressed elderly woman

her hands shaking with the feebleness of age deeply moving 

Talking loudly to an invisible friend with two places set

ghosts from the past appear living always dearly beloved free will 

 

Has she cast out hope of opening up to friends?

Or have they labeled her as an insecure outcast?

 

From the keyboard typing sounds in an office

idle gossip begins the background stage chatter 

Heat produced by machines blends within substance

tattooed underneath a thin veil opens up pages incomplete ink 

Together with human activities rising high in temperature soars 

the hustle and bustle begins from trained commands laid down 

There, on the window side, a nervous working man keeps his head down

focused on the job at hand calculating his time how its spent wisely 

Yielding to all demands and pressure from the top

everything in relation to work becomes orders to complete 

 

Has he surrendered hope to the ignorant and proud?

Or have they trampled on his integrity and strengths?

I heard a whisper…

Silently calling that 'Hope' was laying asleep

At the bottom of Pandora's box collecting dust

From the mischief of human actions remained the bleached bones laid bare 

Slowly rotting away among fallen light of heaven's outcasts 

Living in agony suppressed by hate of a thousand nightmares 

 

The whisper dissipates into a black hole adrift

What was once beautiful now turns bitter and sullen
a Collaboration by Liam Mc Daid and Angeline Lim i forgot to post in 2017

Copyright © | Year Posted 2022



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