While Judging My Own Poem

Can an  earthquake judge its own tears 
of fury and frustration
Can a sunlight assess  the black stains on a rose,
its creation
I don't know precisely but as my eyes move 
up and down my poem
I myself am almost lost into a prose where 
no river is flowing


I started with the metaphor of the letter
alpha
With the intention of crisscrossing
to omega
In between your hands and feet got entangled
in the bush on the hills
So much so that I now find the poem
going haywire
Why so happened, I feel it's better not to
 inquire further


Even so, a few connoisseurs happened to taste
the flavor
Feebly radiating from the apples most of which
looked stale
The cracked crimson, yellow and green were growing 
pale

Still the few likes made me bold enough
to keep out of
the rain and hail that had broken out 
while I read
the 'also ran' poem with no distinct course leading to
the desired omega

I read it once again alert to the erratic enjambment
Rated it 'honorable mention'
No, the apples have started gathering fungus
I deleted honorable mention

Dated 25 March 2019

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 3/29/2019 4:48:00 PM
LOL Probir. Believe me, far from fungus are your wonderful apples.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/30/2019 12:38:00 AM
Hahaha ... You don't see the fungus because you see beauty in words ( or in their generator!) ... Thank you, my dear friend ...
Date: 3/29/2019 12:35:00 PM
None need to be judged the world stands on its own imagery. Your work more than honorable mention. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 3/26/2019 1:27:00 PM
- Not easy to judge your own poems, but you always write great poems Probir :) - Welcome back, you were missed :) - hugs //Anne-Lise :)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/29/2019 5:23:00 AM
Thank you, Sunshine ... You always encourage ...
Date: 3/25/2019 5:36:00 PM
I have many H.M. LIke your outlook on things. BG
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/26/2019 8:57:00 AM
Thank you so much ...
Date: 3/25/2019 4:38:00 PM
i like the tone and play of words, probir... this gets a hugh placement if i were the judge!...huggs
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Date: 3/26/2019 8:57:00 AM
Thank you, nette ...
Date: 3/25/2019 1:32:00 AM
impressive and self-discovery writings // like it, love it /// America was America before discovering By Colombus, I am always I'm before discovering myself; Oh! Yes; I cannot measure up myself if you discover me truly then I can realize the truth of Myself Being..!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/25/2019 1:42:00 AM
Thank you so much ....
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