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February 25, 2024


 

Where Shadows Flatter Despair

No– shadows do not love
the angles of your face.
Reflection in a cage;
the mirror— enemy
in atmosphere of age,

no.. shadows do not love
the smoother skin of youth.
Your worries; furrow wears,
a trench where troops retreat,
—accumulated years.

No! shadows do not love
mascara and soft light;
distracts from sense of time
and wishes drowned in wells…
damn clock’s incessant chime—

no, shadows do not love
the wrinkles and the lines.
They etch your map their ink;
topography of life
where sun o’er valleys sink.
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Wilde Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 9:45 AM
Beautiful work, you have a deep and perceptive soul.
Ashley Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 1:02 PM
Dear Roy, thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this piece with me. Your valued thoughts are received with joy and appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
May 10, 2024 at 3:27 PM
So deep and I love the lines that repeated. So poetic. Was this on a contest?
Ashley Avatar
May 10, 2024 at 4:00 PM
Thank you for your wonderful response to my poem, Andrea. I relish your words. No, this poem was not written for a contest, but written for the practice of writing in the poetry form, monchielle stanza. Your presence is uplifting! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Hind Avatar
March 20, 2024 at 7:06 PM
Gosh, I love this- it seems to make me think of the briefness of life itself, and how shadows still do not change. Amazing art- just beautiful
Ashley Avatar
March 21, 2024 at 11:31 AM
Dear Paige, soulful poetess, your gracious comments are a thrill to receive. Your insightful soul sees into the heart of my poem with clarity and finesse. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts. I am humbled and honored by your kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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March 7, 2024 at 10:16 AM
Hi Susan my dear dear friend, your poem reminds us of how the years pass but as my grandfather once said, who was also a poet, if i close my eyes my whole life flashes by in 5 minutes. I have never wished to be younger, but accept that the passage of time alters our looks, but I pay tribute to my life. I love how your poem faces the reality of life and it's aging consequences, but c'est la vie. Your astounding poetry I always relish reading - hugs, blessings, Jennifer.
Ashley Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 8:16 AM
Dearest Jennifer, my shing poetry sis, indeed, "c'est la vie." Your response to my poem is inspiring and is received with my truest appreciation. You're a natural woman, embracing time as it hones your being with its softened beauty and finesse. I feel the same way as you do, as we are connected in our philosophies on life, womanhood, motherhood, family and living in the moment. It's wonderful to know that your grandfather was a poet too.. it runs in the family, sweet talented poetess. Thank you for shining your lovely light upon my poem and my heart. I embrace you and your exquisite poetry. Warmest wishes and hugs sent across the sun spangled waves.. ~Susan
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March 6, 2024 at 11:22 AM
My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your rich words articulate the passage of time on our faces with profound and wistful images that flow so easily from your pen in a gentle stream. Love "damn clock's incessant chime!" Truly, time marches on in the ticking of a clock. What a wonderful metaphor. Your poetic magic leaves me breathless! If this is for a contest, best wishes for a win for it is a profound write. Sending you blessings not in "shadows" but in the grace of sunlight sweet poetry sis!
Ashley Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 8:06 AM
My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, I'm overjoyed to receive your touching response to my poem. Indeed, time marches on doesn't it, ever faster as the days and years go by. Your golden presence graces my poem like the youthful light of dawn, with brightness, clarity and the generosity of your poetic spirit. I embrace both your spirit and your thoughts. Thank you, my sweet poetry sis, for shining on my page. You and your exquisite poetry are ever appreciated. Warmest wishes sent on rays of the new day.. ~Susan
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March 4, 2024 at 6:44 AM
Gosh, that refrain is so powerful and made me feel so much dear sweet susan, poetic soul, your way with expressing is special and has an authentic vibe to it, which i truly admire and that line “ shadows do not love” made me think in so many different ways, powerful it is! Sometimes our biggest enemy is our reflection, what the mirror shows as time goes by we do not appreciate, topography of life and acceptance so well delivered here. It is always my pleasure reading your work.
Ashley Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 7:53 AM
Dear Empress, poetic North Star, I'm thrilled to receive your insightful response to my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. It's gratifying to know that the refrain moved you in different ways, I especially appreciate your words on that, dear poetess. Your presence lights my page with the glow of your heart and soul. Warmest wishes, my poetry friend.. ~Susan
Brul Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 11:15 PM
how can I forget this poem? while reading this I felt like being transported to a world of Frost and Wordsworth's pen. Majestic write.
Ashley Avatar
March 5, 2024 at 6:36 PM
My dear friend, Jcb, it's so wonderful to see you! I revel in your uplifting response to my poem. I'm humble and honored by your mention of Frost and Wordsworth in your lovely comments, as I adore them both. You're far too kind. Thank you my dear poetry friend. Your words are received with joy and appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Rodgers Avatar
February 29, 2024 at 8:10 AM
Dear Susan, Your poem is a wonderful exploration of the relationship between shadows and aging, beautifully crafted with vivid imagery and profound reflection. Your words convey a sense of acceptance and reverence for the passage of time, acknowledging the marks it leaves on our faces as a testament to our experiences and journeys. This is an evocative piece that celebrates the beauty of life's journey, wrinkles and all. - Blessings, Daniel
Ashley Avatar
February 29, 2024 at 8:27 AM
Dear Daniel, it's always a great pleasure to find your thoughtful and meaningful comments gracing one of my poems. Indeed, our faces wear the impressions of life's journey upon our skin and in our facial expression. Shadows find their home within the furrows and grooves of aging skin - smooth youthful skin does not offer them such a cozy place to settle in. Thank you for sharing in the emotions of this piece with me. Your insightful thoughts are received with joy and appreciation. Warmest wishes my esteemed poet friend.. ~Susan
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February 29, 2024 at 1:39 AM
When I see some woman with her face all in color, long eyelashes and terrible lipstick color, I say she's old. Lovely ideas. Great poetic form.
Ashley Avatar
February 29, 2024 at 8:10 AM
Dear Victor, it's true that too much make-up can age a woman's face instead of enhancing its beauty. Terrible lipstick color is a big no-no! There's never an excuse for that. Thank you for your gracious visit and valued comments, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Schatz Avatar
February 28, 2024 at 11:27 PM
To borrow from Frederic's comment, your poem exudes wisdom. Wisdom and timelessness. The shadows know no bounds...
Ashley Avatar
February 29, 2024 at 8:07 AM
Dear Robert, your thoughtful words are filled with "wisdom and timelessness" that reflects the depth of your poet's soul. Indeed, "The shadows know no bounds..." a profound expression, my friend. Thank you for sharing in the emotions of this piece with me. Your valued thoughts are received with joy and appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Parker Avatar
February 28, 2024 at 7:33 AM
dear poet, dear friend, your wisdom shines through in this poem, the last line expresses finality, as shadows disappear when the sun sets...Frederic
Ashley Avatar
February 29, 2024 at 8:04 AM
Dear friend, dear poet, your poet's soul easily sees into the heart of this poem. Indeed, "shadows disappear when the sun sets..." beautifully said dear Frederic. Thank you for sharing in the emotions of this piece with me. Your esteemed thoughts are received with joy and appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Brotherton Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 5:38 PM
Susan, this is a wonderful poem filled with fantastic imagery. Shadows do not show the lines of age or imperfections. Have a blessed day.
Ashley Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 6:12 PM
Dear Jerry, thank you for your gracious visit. Your wonderful comments are received with joy and appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Slaughter Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 10:21 AM
Elegant imagery, Susan. This is a new form for me, too.
Ashley Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 5:21 PM
Dear Jim, Your gracious visit and heartwarming words are received with appreciation. Thank you for your kindness. You should try this poetry form, your gifted pen would shine within its frame! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Volumes Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 4:14 AM
Yes loved your poem Susan, shadows can be flattering when it comes to age They are kindest to my wrinkles and don't even highlight my greying hair, but I still have a complaint with the way shadows depict my shape !!!!!! Beaut poem, well thought out and written by the hand of a talented poet. From your "not so skinny" friend Wen
Ashley Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 5:17 PM
Dear Wen, inspiring poetess, I'm delighted by your gracious visit and heartwarming words. Thank you for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me. Your kindness is humbling. I prefer the word "shapely" to "not so skinny" my lovely friend and beautiful soul :) Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Buehler Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 9:18 PM
Although the form of this poem is new to me, its elegant meaningfulness and beauty touched me deeply. Wonderful writing, my friend. :)
Ashley Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 3:01 PM
So happy to hear that dear Evelyn. I look forward to enjoying the beauty of your verse framed in the monchielle stanza form. Happy writing my sweet friend:)
Buehler Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 9:18 PM
Thank you for your kind words, my friend. I admit I am intrigued, and I do believe I will give the monchielle stanza a try. It's a beautiful form. Best of wishes. :)
Ashley Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 5:12 PM
Dear Evelyn, gifted poetess, your beautiful comments are received with joy and appreciation. I'm heartened to know that my poem touched you deeply. Thank you for sharing your inspiring thoughts with me. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan P.S. you should give this poetry form a try, your golden pen would shine in this format :)
Severo Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 8:16 PM
You made me smile, lovely poetry.
Ashley Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 8:42 PM
Dear Aurore, I’m so glad to know my poem made you smile. Thank you for your wonderful visit and kind words.. you made me smile. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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