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Do not come looking for me in small corners of our house I am not there The vast space we occupied where laughter lived I left behind The still place in our bed once radiating love I sense its cold Photoless frames, shattered glass a myriad memories I will forget Do not try to find me in the yard or in the snow of blossom I once loved Forget you ever knew the wrinkles around my mouth and eyes I crumble If you aim to memorize my face know it will fade in time I lost you In any place you find me drifting remember in your heart I find you *** May 28, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/29/2017 7:46:00 AM

I like the feel and mood of this piece Darren.

Darren White
Date: 5/29/2017 7:53:00 AM

Thank you very much Richard. It has some of that picture I used I hope? At least that is what I hoped to achieve.

Chris Green

Date: 5/29/2017 7:31:00 AM

Such a sad poem, so empty and lonely but...but...so damn well written. Your style and execution in this piece are incredible my friend. You pull emotions from the deepest part of us and lay them face up for us to see and dwell in. You are one of the best on this site. I agree with everything that is said below.

Darren White
Date: 5/29/2017 7:45:00 AM

Your comment blows me away and I am blushing... Thank you! Hugs :)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 5/29/2017 2:31:00 AM

Excellent. Well done my friend. Thanks for sharing it.

Darren White
Date: 5/29/2017 2:36:00 AM

Thank you :)

White Wolf

Date: 5/28/2017 7:58:00 PM

21??? This is a poem beyond your years' dear bard! I am keeping this one in my crane bag! Absolutely love it!

Darren White
Date: 5/29/2017 12:04:00 AM

Woot, thanks Budgie :)

Wadih Maakaron

Date: 5/28/2017 5:03:00 PM

Simply , AMAZING

Darren White
Date: 5/29/2017 12:04:00 AM

Thank you so very much, you make me smile :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/28/2017 3:21:00 PM

You poetry is as vivid and emotionally stirring as a painting on the wall , splendid writing,

Darren White
Date: 5/29/2017 12:05:00 AM

Thanks my friend, so much!

Miraj Raha

Date: 5/28/2017 9:42:00 AM

Very enthralling is the structure of the poem. Once again in an effort to write from your heart, you have given us something universally applicable.much respect Darren.

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 9:48:00 AM

Miraj, thank you, I spent a good deal of time finding the right structure for what I wanted to say :)

Phillip Garcia

Date: 5/28/2017 8:53:00 AM

I've been trying to decide if it's about death, loss, or regret (if not all three). It speaks highly of you that with such straight forward clarity you can still evoke such a layered response. The last stanza is chilling. Need my brain to jump into gear so I can make a useful comment, sorry for being so inarticulate. I'll let you be in charge of that from now on

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 8:58:00 AM

You are the first to notice that it is not necessarily about death, and right you are. I hoped to keep it ambivalent, even though ideed the words seem to give clarity.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/28/2017 8:39:00 AM

-- s m i l e -- This is perfect in my eyes for you are no Penguin here. Enjoy the rest of the afternoon and may it be a good night. Thank you Darren for sharing beauty. PS: you did succeed

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 9:04:00 AM

Am I not a penguin here :) Okay then, thank you my friend :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/28/2017 8:09:00 AM

Hello Darren. Top of The Afternoon to you. I love this because it reminds me of my grandmother's house and attic too. A true place and home where love and laughter was always present. Although your words have sadness I also see the light and glorious meaning that memories and moments of life are present and living within the heart and soul. I found this truly beautiful in every way Darren. Honestly. Thank you and have a wonderful afternoon.

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 8:24:00 AM

Thank you my friend. And yes, it does have that feel to it, I hoped I was able to bring that to the reader. Thank you for telling I succeeded :)

Gerald Dillenbeck

Date: 5/28/2017 8:08:00 AM

Wow. I am so sorry. It looked like the character validation box wasn't working, and every time I retried I reiterated the same message. I have been justly accused of redundancy, but this is ridiculous, and I can't erase. With apologies. Gerald

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 8:14:00 AM

Hahaha, it is no problem at all, now i could practice with the new feature: delete redundant or rude comments. I removed all the doubles and triples and it is not bad at all. Thank you :)

Sara Ella

Date: 5/28/2017 8:06:00 AM

This sad one paints so many pictures and with the last line offering a smile - is beautiful <3

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 8:22:00 AM

Thanks my friend. I am happy you like it, including the smile :) <3

Gerald Dillenbeck

Date: 5/28/2017 8:04:00 AM

Come looking for us in large centers of our home, where only we most fully yet become. Thx for visiting my small corner, and for your comment. I enjoyed my visit here, even though you here eloquently speak of no longer being home.

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 8:12:00 AM

You are most welcome, and thank you for the visit :)

Tim Smith

Date: 5/28/2017 7:44:00 AM

So sad but you left room for hope. Laughter will come again..

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 7:50:00 AM

I had that first stanza in my head for a long time now, so it was about time to do something with it :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/28/2017 7:27:00 AM

So many sad and lovely images. Beautiful!

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 7:49:00 AM

Thank you Kim, glad you love it :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/28/2017 6:54:00 AM

Well done Darren ! :)

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 7:09:00 AM

Thanks Heidi :)

Maria Williams

Date: 5/28/2017 5:18:00 AM

This is a brilliant poem Darren, but I tend to agree with Victor, allow your mind to take you to Happy Places dear friend..... Maria 7++

Maria Williams
Date: 5/28/2017 5:38:00 AM

Good to hear dear friend

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 5:25:00 AM

Thank you Maria, also for the invisible sevens :) But I do have to say to you what I said to Victor. This is the sort of poetry I like to write. It doesn't necessarily mean I am depressed, or playing with thoughts of death...