Where Bumbles Bounce and Blooms Bedazzle

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People are asking me if this is true. No, it is fiction. But I imagine it has happened to somebody at one time or another.

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I’ve come back to that place 
where bumbles bounce and blooms bedazzle -
a place that ought to be one of happy recollections,
for it is so pretty here. . . even now,
and the air so fragrant.

Despite its loveliness, the garden of this city park
can never more enchant me,
and the ruby bedazzlers that still reside here
I never can forgive for their betryal.

How innocently they all looked on as my dearest childhood friend – 
pleased to lean in to inhale their petals’ sweet scent -
gasped upon receiving that sharp sudden sting.
Her face ballooned out, becoming nearly unrecognizable 
as she struggled to breathe, but we both were unaware
of my darling friend’s most severe of allergies. . .

She fainted then, never to bounce back,
unlike those bumbles in the garden
where the blooms had so bedazzled her.
They bumble around even now, forever bouncing back
to remind me of that most dreadful of days.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 10/3/2019 4:54:00 PM
Andrea congratulations on your place in the contest with this wonderful write!
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Date: 9/20/2019 7:11:00 PM
I hope this is fiction Andrea. It is so tragic when someone doesn't know they have an allergy until they are stung. You convey the sadness of her incident so beautifully. This must be for a new contest I haven't seen yet. I'm sure this will do really well Andrea. xxoo
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Date: 9/20/2019 5:30:00 PM
This empathizes the drastic impact something so small as a bee can have on someone's life. I'm expecting this to place well in the contest.
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Date: 9/20/2019 4:03:00 PM
You tell a sad tale in this work. Is it about something that really happened? Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/20/2019 3:28:00 PM
"She fainted then, never to bounce back, unlike those bumbles in the garden" sadly sad, and yet, I am hoping this is a fantasy. Just done well.
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Date: 9/20/2019 2:01:00 PM
How tragic, Andrea...lured by bedazzlement to a dreadful end. Who would have guessed that a moment's joy would end this way! I really like your take on this prompt theme, and I hope Craig will, too. Regards // paul
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Date: 9/20/2019 1:13:00 PM
A sad poem Andrea, but so beautifully penned with and charm and absolute realism - I was stung by a hornet whilst on holiday but lucky I always travel with an antibiotic and an antihistamine because within seconds my arm was like a balloon. A great poem which brought back the fear I felt that particular day. Hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 9/20/2019 12:55:00 PM
Very sad my friend but beautifully written. I just recently found out, the hard way, that I am allergic to wasp stings. never was before but I am now. Best wishes in the contest
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Date: 9/20/2019 10:07:00 AM
A tragic story Andrea , that you hear of often. So sad for your friend. Tom
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Date: 9/20/2019 7:37:00 AM
A story than began with blooms ended so sadly. You certainly painted what the memories evoked (as the contest theme stated) and I wish you the best for a win, Andrea.
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Date: 9/20/2019 4:31:00 AM
I always did swell when stung, but didn't faint or (as you guessed) die... This is sad and should do well in the contest. Blessings to you
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