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When You Were You, and I Was I

When you were you, and I was I
And starlight spilled from midnight sky
When sunlight flared and passion dared
We bathed in love, THAT you and I

When you were you, and I was I
And truth was truth and not a lie
When promise made was promise kept
We lived the dream, THAT you and I

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When you were true and love was new
And passion blessed like morning dew
When you professed your love would last
Who knew your words would prove untrue
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When you were you, and I was I
And kisses notes of lullaby
When love was deep and love was dear
We sailed the clouds, THAT you and I

When you were You, and I was I
And romance brought a deep felt sigh
When sweetest grace lit up your face
We danced all night, THAT you and I

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When you were true and love was new
And passion blessed like morning dew
When you professed your love would last
Who knew your words would prove untrue
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When you were you, and I was I
Alas, Alas, do tell me why?
The pleasure’s gone, remains the sigh
THAT you has changed, and so must I

Eileen

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 6/11/2015 11:27:00 AM
Eileen, oh how beautifully penned, I loved the wondrous flow 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, God ... yes it is true
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/11/2015 12:07:00 PM
Oh...I'm so sorry it was a true story, dear. Thank God we have hope for a better day to come. Sending you love....
Date: 6/10/2015 8:15:00 AM
Well penned Eileen, that is what people is, a person you know to day may change before to morrow and changing of a person should not be a surprise for us because that is what we called HUMAN. Excellent write for your great insight friend I really enjoyed your poem.........A.M.
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Date: 6/9/2015 1:49:00 PM
Hi Eileen.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/9/2015 3:10:00 PM
Hey....Hi, Richard. :)
Date: 6/8/2015 2:59:00 PM
I tend to expect the best from people and sometimes that can backfire. For the most part though I would say it has worked out pretty well.
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Date: 6/9/2015 3:12:00 PM
I'm glad it has. I have high expectations...that always backfires. It goes with my personality type...Melancholy/sanguine. Melancholy people are perfectionists....and they except perfection in relationships. It's never that way....Thanks for the post. Hugs
Date: 6/8/2015 12:50:00 AM
Change creeps like the damp, and so many forget to take stock and look at what attracted themselves to each other when they met. We're all guilty, to one degree or another. Great write, Eileen, and a salutary warning to all. Viv x
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/8/2015 11:13:00 AM
It takes an investment of time and emotions. When the blush of excitement fades...those are the things that keep a relationship going. Few are willing to make that commitment. Thanks, Viv, for dropping by. I do appreciate it! :)
Date: 6/7/2015 11:00:00 PM
I think for the most part people tend to stay the same unless something drastic happens. Sometimes the person was never who we thought they were. I enjoyed the poem and the format Eileen. 7 all the way.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/8/2015 11:14:00 AM
Hi, Richard. Glad to have you stop by. I think, perhaps, the second sentence of your post hits the nail on the head. It's sad...whatever way we look at it. Thanks for dropping by. Hope all is well.
Date: 6/7/2015 6:49:00 PM
People do change , as so do times , and even if against our will,at times we need to change too. Heart wrenching dear Eileen.. Loved reading it.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/8/2015 11:15:00 AM
Yes, dear. It's true. Sometimes we have no other option but change. Thanks for the visit. Hugs
Date: 6/7/2015 11:32:00 AM
Beautifully written Eileen....The love is deep but the heartache is deeper....a fav Tim
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Date: 6/8/2015 11:12:00 AM
I hate it when people change..... :( Thanks for the visit, Guys!
Date: 6/7/2015 9:07:00 AM
The raw emotions within your words capture the heart with their strength of truth while devastating the soul with their sadness. Emile. #7
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/7/2015 11:07:00 AM
It is sad when people change, Emile. Nothing Gold can Stay (Frost). Thank you for your lovely visit. Hugs
Date: 6/7/2015 7:42:00 AM
A sad truth that it happens. Wouldn't it a perfect world if people marry the greatest love of their lives and grow old with the same zeal and passion of a young love... Alas, many drift apart. Loved your rhyme, Eileen. 7, of course. hugs!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/7/2015 11:08:00 AM
Thanks for the visit, Kim. A writer writes...the reader interprets. That is the beauty of poetry. Each takes what he/she wants. Hope all is well.
Date: 6/6/2015 8:17:00 PM
Sad but very, very beautiful poem my little Desert Orchid, reminds of some lines from an old song, 'If I were you and you were me, inside each others eyes, what would we see. If I was me and you were you, inside each others arms, what would we do'..... I hope that other hasn't changed. Take care, Richard
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Date: 6/7/2015 1:19:00 AM
Hello, Richard. Thanks for sharing the lyrics of the song with me. I don't know this song you are referring to, but the lyrics are sweet. Well, when one changes, the other must change. What do you think about that, Mr Seal? Is Agony Auntie right? If someone where to write in to me and say, "The man I love no longer loves me. I love him and can't let go," what should my response be but...."Get on with your life, dear. There are other fish in the sea!" You got me in Agony Auntie mood, Mr Seal. Ok...I'll revert to Desert Orchid and thank you for your lovely visit. Hugs
Date: 6/6/2015 3:24:00 PM
- Time passes .... the years go ..... - A beautiful poem, dear Eileen - I wish you a lovely weekend - hugs & <3 // Anne-Lise :)
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/7/2015 11:09:00 AM
Thanks, sweetie. I haven't visited for awhile. So sorry...I was wrapping things up. Hope you are well. Hugs!
Date: 6/6/2015 8:46:00 AM
When you were you and I were I ....boy that was before I wore glasses. Loved your poetry.....thanks
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Date: 6/7/2015 11:10:00 AM
:) Thanks, Judy. Good to have you visit, dear. Hugs
Date: 6/6/2015 6:26:00 AM
Eileen, this is beautiful! Alas, people do change and once that happens there is no going back. Both the repeated lines and the refrain are effective. This would be the basis for a lovely ballad. Hugs // paul
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