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When You Are Alone

When you are alone
In a disaster zone
Being lost and forgotten,
Afraid of the world unknown,
With care and courage I will arrive
And lay down by your side,
In the temple of his kingdom
I will pray for your life.

From hills nearby, I hear your cry
I'll pick you up, and hold you high
I'll hold you tight, won't let you fall
Deep in my heart, I hear your call

You're just a child
You did nothing wrong,
When so many die
And life just tags along, 
With message of hope I will arrive
And lay down by your side,
In the temple of his kingdom
I will pray for your life.

From hills nearby, I hear your cry
I'll pick you up, and hold you high
I'll hold you tight, won't let you fall
Deep in my heart, I hear your call

You miss your Dad,
You miss your Mom,
You miss so much their loving hug
And as you ache for mother's touch
I'll wrap you in my motherly hymn,
A lullaby of love I will sing
And lay down by your side,
In the temple of his kingdom
I will pray for your life
In the temple of his kingdom
You will live and survive.

October 7, 2017
Placed 2nd: Bridge over troubled water
Sponsor: John Hamilton
HM: Strand select 2 contest by Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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George Avatar
July 9, 2023 at 6:30 PM
What a sweet assurance! I can imagine the shock of the baby. When it is at such a bewildered state with no body close to it living and lost in a world of chaos, you are there as a guardian angel. Lovely poem Vijay !
Roper Avatar
July 3, 2020 at 11:11 PM
beautiful poem,Vijay.
Ligon Avatar
January 3, 2020 at 4:57 PM
This is comforting in the midst of disheartening situations. Well written. Congrats!
Chiri Avatar
January 3, 2020 at 1:27 PM
Vijay congrats on honorable mention my friend!;)
Dietrich Avatar
November 29, 2018 at 4:57 PM
I saw this before. sorry I simply can't find one i have not seen before. Anyway I was checking out your fifth most popular poem since 5 is my lucky number, and it's this gem!
Dietrich Avatar
December 31, 2017 at 7:31 PM
I see this is your second best poem at Soup. Congrats for that and also a second place winner with John. Happy New Year, Vijay.
Pandit Avatar
January 1, 2018 at 7:03 AM
Thanks Andrea.
Sewumber Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 11:37 AM
Very well written and well thought out. I love this poem and its technique in particular. Congrats.
Pandit Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 3:10 PM
Thank you Beejadhur!
Bateman Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 10:41 AM
Hello Vijay, Congratulations on your fabulous win!! "When you are alone" is most certainly very emotional and heartfelt, and leaves an indelible impression on the reader. Your last four verses form a passionate and powerful ending for this marvelous free verse. A FAVE!! Best Wishes, Gary
Pandit Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 1:23 PM
Thank you Gary--appreciate your comments!
Barden Avatar
October 13, 2017 at 4:39 AM
Vijay - sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, my friend - keep up the wonderful work! :-)
Pandit Avatar
October 13, 2017 at 5:50 AM
Many thanks Greg!
Haight Avatar
October 12, 2017 at 8:41 AM
Such a beautifully written and emotional Lyric, Vijay. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Sandra
Pandit Avatar
October 12, 2017 at 9:06 AM
Thank you Sandra!
Ashley Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 9:04 PM
Congratulations Vijay on your win with this emotional and stellar poem.
Pandit Avatar
October 12, 2017 at 5:24 AM
Thank you Susan!
La France Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 7:49 PM
Vijay, excellent and wonderful, congratulations on your win !
Pandit Avatar
October 12, 2017 at 5:24 AM
Thank you BW!
Canerdy Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 4:30 PM
I'm back to say congratulations! Janice
Pandit Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 4:30 PM
Thank you Janice!
Smith Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 4:02 PM
A touching lyric Vijay, Congratulations...
Pandit Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 4:30 PM
Thank you Charlie!
May Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 3:28 PM
Congrats on a fine win Vijay
Pandit Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 4:30 PM
Thank you Joseph!
Hamilton Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 12:41 PM
This is an outstanding lyric Vijay, I can hear the melody in my head. I loved the spiritual tone in the refrain, it was all I was hoping for, congrats on a fine shared 2nd place win!
Pandit Avatar
October 11, 2017 at 1:25 PM
Thank you John--appreciate your comments
Roper Avatar
October 9, 2017 at 11:56 AM
Magnificent, Vijay,, Love the theme and the spiritual emotion you have applied to your poem :) a winner already Hugs Eve ~`*
Pandit Avatar
October 9, 2017 at 1:43 PM
Thank you Eve--appreciate your comments!
Dietrich Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 9:04 PM
I think you did a good job. A nice emotive one that could also be put to music. Well done, Vijay.
Pandit Avatar
October 9, 2017 at 6:43 AM
Thank you Andrea--appreciate your feedback!
Wanter Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 5:57 PM
So deep and universal. I know that little girl - she still lives in me.
Pandit Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 7:06 PM
I am touched by what you say about that little girl living in you--my prayers and good wishes--many thanks SW!
Murray Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 4:33 PM
Amazing take on the contest Vijay. So well done. Such a lovely flow.
Pandit Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 5:01 PM
So pleased by you visit and lovely comments, Jean!
Kendrick Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 2:28 PM
Ahh!! A nicely written lyrical poem..Thanks for dropping by..Sara
Pandit Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 4:31 PM
Thank you Sara!
Ashley Avatar
October 7, 2017 at 9:00 PM
Full of such emotional depth and beauty, your poem is truly amazing Vijay. I love the very moving repeats and refrain. A lovely and loving write. Good luck in the contest.., already a winner with me :)
Pandit Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 5:58 AM
Thanks you Susan--always a joy to read your comments!
Anish Avatar
October 7, 2017 at 8:10 PM
Fine sentiments here! Reminds me of the song Bridge Over Troubled Water. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
Pandit Avatar
October 7, 2017 at 8:49 PM
Thank you Matthew--appreciate your comments!
May Avatar
October 7, 2017 at 3:27 PM
Beautiful and moving write Vijay
Pandit Avatar
October 7, 2017 at 6:32 PM
Thank you Joseph!
Muideen Avatar
October 7, 2017 at 1:41 PM
I bet, this is a winner. This gem of yours flows eloquent within my lung. Your poem is an extreme depiction of excellence. I felt like i was the child being lullaby as i read this poem. Great write.
Pandit Avatar
October 7, 2017 at 2:04 PM
Many thanks Afolabi--I really appreciate your comments!
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