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When you are alone In a disaster zone Being lost and forgotten, Afraid of the world unknown, With care and courage I will arrive And lay down by your side, In the temple of his kingdom I will pray for your life. From hills nearby, I hear your cry I'll pick you up, and hold you high I'll hold you tight, won't let you fall Deep in my heart, I hear your call You're just a child You did nothing wrong, When so many die And life just tags along, With message of hope I will arrive And lay down by your side, In the temple of his kingdom I will pray for your life. From hills nearby, I hear your cry I'll pick you up, and hold you high I'll hold you tight, won't let you fall Deep in my heart, I hear your call You miss your Dad, You miss your Mom, You miss so much their loving hug And as you ache for mother's touch I'll wrap you in my motherly hymn, A lullaby of love I will sing And lay down by your side, In the temple of his kingdom I will pray for your life In the temple of his kingdom You will live and survive. October 7, 2017 Placed 2nd: Bridge over troubled water Sponsor: John Hamilton HM: Strand select 2 contest by Brian Strand

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Date: 7/3/2020 11:11:00 PM
beautiful poem,Vijay.
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Date: 1/3/2020 4:57:00 PM
This is comforting in the midst of disheartening situations. Well written. Congrats!
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Date: 1/3/2020 1:27:00 PM
Vijay congrats on honorable mention my friend!;)
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Date: 11/29/2018 4:57:00 PM
I saw this before. sorry I simply can't find one i have not seen before. Anyway I was checking out your fifth most popular poem since 5 is my lucky number, and it's this gem!
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Date: 12/31/2017 7:31:00 PM
I see this is your second best poem at Soup. Congrats for that and also a second place winner with John. Happy New Year, Vijay.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/1/2018 7:03:00 AM
Thanks Andrea.
Date: 11/6/2017 11:37:00 AM
Very well written and well thought out. I love this poem and its technique in particular. Congrats.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 3:10:00 PM
Thank you Beejadhur!
Date: 11/3/2017 10:41:00 AM
Hello Vijay, Congratulations on your fabulous win!! "When you are alone" is most certainly very emotional and heartfelt, and leaves an indelible impression on the reader. Your last four verses form a passionate and powerful ending for this marvelous free verse. A FAVE!! Best Wishes, Gary
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 1:23:00 PM
Thank you Gary--appreciate your comments!
Date: 10/13/2017 4:39:00 AM
Vijay - sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, my friend - keep up the wonderful work! :-)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/13/2017 5:50:00 AM
Many thanks Greg!
Date: 10/12/2017 8:41:00 AM
Such a beautifully written and emotional Lyric, Vijay. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Sandra
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/12/2017 9:06:00 AM
Thank you Sandra!
Date: 10/11/2017 9:04:00 PM
Congratulations Vijay on your win with this emotional and stellar poem.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/12/2017 5:24:00 AM
Thank you Susan!
Date: 10/11/2017 7:49:00 PM
Vijay, excellent and wonderful, congratulations on your win !
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/12/2017 5:24:00 AM
Thank you BW!
Date: 10/11/2017 4:30:00 PM
I'm back to say congratulations! Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2017 4:30:00 PM
Thank you Janice!
Date: 10/11/2017 4:02:00 PM
A touching lyric Vijay, Congratulations...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2017 4:30:00 PM
Thank you Charlie!
Date: 10/11/2017 3:28:00 PM
Congrats on a fine win Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2017 4:30:00 PM
Thank you Joseph!
Date: 10/11/2017 12:41:00 PM
This is an outstanding lyric Vijay, I can hear the melody in my head. I loved the spiritual tone in the refrain, it was all I was hoping for, congrats on a fine shared 2nd place win!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2017 1:25:00 PM
Thank you John--appreciate your comments
Date: 10/9/2017 11:56:00 AM
Magnificent, Vijay,, Love the theme and the spiritual emotion you have applied to your poem :) a winner already Hugs Eve ~`*
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/9/2017 1:43:00 PM
Thank you Eve--appreciate your comments!
Date: 10/8/2017 9:04:00 PM
I think you did a good job. A nice emotive one that could also be put to music. Well done, Vijay.
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Date: 10/9/2017 6:43:00 AM
Thank you Andrea--appreciate your feedback!
Date: 10/8/2017 5:57:00 PM
So deep and universal. I know that little girl - she still lives in me.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/8/2017 7:06:00 PM
I am touched by what you say about that little girl living in you--my prayers and good wishes--many thanks SW!
Date: 10/8/2017 4:33:00 PM
Amazing take on the contest Vijay. So well done. Such a lovely flow.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/8/2017 5:01:00 PM
So pleased by you visit and lovely comments, Jean!
Date: 10/8/2017 2:28:00 PM
Ahh!! A nicely written lyrical poem..Thanks for dropping by..Sara
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/8/2017 4:31:00 PM
Thank you Sara!
Date: 10/7/2017 9:00:00 PM
Full of such emotional depth and beauty, your poem is truly amazing Vijay. I love the very moving repeats and refrain. A lovely and loving write. Good luck in the contest.., already a winner with me :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/8/2017 5:58:00 AM
Thanks you Susan--always a joy to read your comments!
Date: 10/7/2017 8:10:00 PM
Fine sentiments here! Reminds me of the song Bridge Over Troubled Water. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/7/2017 8:49:00 PM
Thank you Matthew--appreciate your comments!
Date: 10/7/2017 3:27:00 PM
Beautiful and moving write Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/7/2017 6:32:00 PM
Thank you Joseph!
Date: 10/7/2017 1:41:00 PM
I bet, this is a winner. This gem of yours flows eloquent within my lung. Your poem is an extreme depiction of excellence. I felt like i was the child being lullaby as i read this poem. Great write.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/7/2017 2:04:00 PM
Many thanks Afolabi--I really appreciate your comments!
Date: 10/7/2017 10:59:00 AM
Oh my word Vijay. This really reached me and was the most powerful poem I have read that you have entered. I am saving it as a favorite. Very well done. I hope this places high in the contest as it should!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/7/2017 11:20:00 AM
Thank you Heidi--I am encouraged by your kind words--and thanks a million for such meaningful joyous support!
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