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When Time Stood Still

When time stood still, it found us two
on higher ground. A wondrous view
lay below, for it was spread
with jasmine blossoms white and red
and bluebells nodding in the breeze
nearby weeping willow trees.
We stood there on that hill -
amazed - when time stood still.

We stood between the day and night,
a radiant light in our sight.
Sun that had begun to slide
beyond our small hill’s western side.
We watched it touch down, saw it gild
all the flowers in the field.
When all the world was good,
on verge of dusk we stood.

When time moved on, it found us then
asleep in our old spot, a glen.
Tired at last, we’d made our way
that moonless night, until we lay
in darkening serenity.
Then awakened, we would see
the whispering of dawn
as precious time moved on. . . 

5/6/2022
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Watt Avatar
May 29, 2022 at 11:03 PM
I love the way you describe the setting sun in the second stanza. Although this might be describing a romantic encounter, there is room to interpret "we" as two siblings, friends, parent / child... but the sense of awe and wonder is palpable. A real joy to read, my friend.
Meadows Avatar
May 29, 2022 at 10:47 PM
A beautiful poem. Well done.
Baker Avatar
May 10, 2022 at 2:43 PM
Congratulation on the win, Andrea. This was a lovely poem. It flowed so smoothly and had such calm imagery. That was a great romantic time for you I sure. Smiles ~ Blessings, Bill
George Avatar
May 9, 2022 at 9:22 PM
A lovely write which glides as smooth as the sun glides behind the western hills. Congratulations on your win Andrea !
Gibson Avatar
May 9, 2022 at 11:05 AM
So smooth and lovely, Andrea. Thanks for your visit; I have been so busy. It seems like life is busier now than ever. I come to PS in spurts.
Deo Avatar
May 8, 2022 at 8:31 AM
Beautiful. I love how u painted this poem along with sliding sun " on west side" of the hill. A FAVE for me, ThanX Andrea
Leiser Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 1:10 PM
I truly enjoyed your romantic, melodic poem, Andrea! It reads so smooth and evenly, and speaks of beauty all around. Love this, and congrats on your win! :)
Chamberlain Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 12:23 PM
I enjoyed your poem. I particularly enjoyed the third stanza. Congratulations on your winning placement.
Hankins Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 11:50 AM
A novel idea well-handled in your poem, Andrea. Congratulations on your top win.
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 9:28 AM
You express a moment in time so beautifully in this poem Andrea. Congratulations on your top win. I love this! Blessings xxoo
Kendrick Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 8:39 AM
Back with congrats on this winner in Brian's contest. Way to go. Sara
Kendrick Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 3:33 AM
A romantic work to be proud of writing. I enjoyed reading it today. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara
Horsman Avatar
May 6, 2022 at 7:47 PM
I'm going to fav this, Andrea, just like the old times, my memory of your poetry then, yes reading this, remines me 'When time stood still' truly beautiful poetry.
Buhagiar Avatar
May 6, 2022 at 12:29 PM
Examples of nature enhance this marvellous poem, though I am always fascinated with the willow tree. And so life goes on until we rest and wait for the magnificent sunrise. A fav.
Maverick Avatar
May 6, 2022 at 11:48 AM
I think it's time I made a comment, I find this Most enriching, as you draw word scenes.. Pictures that may be variously viewed by some And others..' glad I stopped.. A poetical other I was going to put brother..Would that have Been too melodramatic though.? I really Don't Know.' Well written.,)
Leffanta Avatar
May 6, 2022 at 11:16 AM
As if we could all enjoy a moment a wee bit longer . . . Well thought and done! Aloha!
Kauffman Avatar
May 6, 2022 at 10:45 AM
This is a wonderful picture of romantic images Andrea and an utterly delightful picture of time standing still then moving on - wonderful poetic movement! It really captures the imagination!
Cunningham Avatar
May 6, 2022 at 10:39 AM
Love the imagery Andrea, an enchanting verse. Enjoy your weekend Tom
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