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Love is like playing the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play from your heart..

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It's 3 am,
her pillow soaked in regret.
Loss has left her spirit lonesome,
darkness a definition of insanity.

In the silence of the night,
vexatious voices vibrate inside
her somber state of mind.

Restless, she sits at her proverbial piano,
as a plethora of pain bleeds through
her fingers onto ebony and ivory keys.
Rain drops drip from her eyes,
unable to contain the sorrows in her heart.

In perfect harmony with her faithful piano,
her heartache performs the perfect poetic personification, 
echoing a serenade of melancholic melodies.

Her whole body is numb, but the 
music mesmerises her mind, as memories
of her prophetic protagonist persist.

Her souls sighs, as she sings; "If only you could see the pain, maybe then you would explain, what do you think you will gain, from my mind going insane? It seems like you don't care, tell me how is that fair? You'll say it's you and not me, because you're too blind to see, only your love can set me free, but you say it's not meant to be. It seems like you don't care, tell me how is that fair? Oh my love, is this goodbye? Your silence makes my heart cry. Within the deepness of each sigh, I will always question why."
27 March 2018 Simple Musing Silent One

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Date: 11/6/2018 7:11:00 PM
Well done in all respects. Story was hauntingly sorrowful and moving, alliteration was very good. I’m new here but this my favorite by far.
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Date: 5/1/2018 8:40:00 AM
Could hear and feel the intensity of pain grow with each melancholic note..."as memories of her prophetic protagonist persist"...heart breaking but lovely lines and imagery throughout your entire poem
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Date: 4/19/2018 12:02:00 PM
Great alliteration in your intro, it was done tastefully not overpowering the sentiment, I actually didn't sense the alliteration until after the read, so well blended. The verses that followed were so melodic, I could hear the melancholy dripping from the piano, great personification also, I have to fave this one!
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Date: 4/4/2018 10:59:00 AM
Hello Silent One, this poem has a lot of heartache for this person in this poem. I feel the sadness for her. Have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 4/1/2018 11:59:00 AM
Heartaches are so well translated by piano music and magnificent verse. This sadly romantic piece hits every note my friend. As does the superb alliterations. A fav....
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Silent One
Date: 4/1/2018 1:08:00 PM
Thank you Robert..
Date: 3/31/2018 9:28:00 AM
Beautiful alliteration, SO. I'm a sucker for this poem form. Guess it's the phonetic closeness of the twinning words. Whatever ... your blackened pen tickles the ivory pain of an empty page. Keep filling us w/joy. Gorgeous poem. Love and peace.
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Silent One
Date: 4/1/2018 1:09:00 PM
Thank you Freddie... Twinning words are always my fave..
Date: 3/30/2018 7:53:00 PM
Oh wooow S1. Hauntingly gorgeous!
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Silent One
Date: 4/1/2018 1:23:00 PM
Thank you Shadow..
Date: 3/30/2018 4:48:00 PM
I could have sat all day in the rain at my computer and never compete with this rushed wonder Silent. "I saw the crescent, you saw the whole of the moon." I'm glad I took myself off to the beach instead.
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Silent One
Date: 4/1/2018 1:24:00 PM
I am sure you could have done so much better, at least you enjoyed the beach... Thank you Jean..
Date: 3/30/2018 1:44:00 PM
A powerful image! A deep note! A poet playing passionately his words! I can hear the melody and I do see the beauty of alliteration in the kingdom of words.. The moaning of profound pain in the dead of darkness! "Voices vibrate" "plethora of pain" amazingly beautiful! Poetry interwoven with music and ache, a masterpiece emerges! Great !
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Silent One
Date: 4/2/2018 8:46:00 AM
Thank you Besma, that is the image I wanted to create..
Date: 3/30/2018 11:03:00 AM
Wow. Awesome SO. Really fabulous lines. Great one. I enjoyed it thoroughly.You are so talented.
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Silent One
Date: 4/2/2018 8:46:00 AM
Thank you Supraja...
Date: 3/29/2018 10:49:00 PM
This is so incredibly beautiful and yet so sad. I feel the pain (literally) in my throat as it seems to close, for to breathe means to live when sometimes we want to die. Dear, dear ZZ, remember us who live and breathe adore you and your wonderful poetry and tender heart. <3 A FAV....
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Silent One
Date: 4/2/2018 8:46:00 AM
Thank you Carole, for the sweet feedback..
Date: 3/29/2018 3:35:00 PM
A beauty this is! One fave line: her heartache performs the perfect poetic personification. The pics and music! Nice one, Silent! Fave!
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Silent One
Date: 4/2/2018 8:47:00 AM
Thank you Kim, you always seem to like my sad ones..
Date: 3/29/2018 12:51:00 PM
It s another beautiful written poem of yours, the words itself bleeds the pain, I really like the way you write the poems, every single word can be felt, there s nothing worse than a incomplete love, love is something which is the best thing but if gone wrong, it destroys the person, you don t want to do anything apart from being in the memories, imagining things that will never happen,and crying upon realizing the reality, but that s what life is,
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Silent One
Date: 3/29/2018 3:23:00 PM
Thank you Faraz, always enjoy your analysis of my poems..
Date: 3/29/2018 7:58:00 AM
Dear friend, I echo Tom's comments... "Another beautiful verse from you S.O. accompanied by beautiful music!" You are my hero!!! Happy Jack from Canada!!!
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Silent One
Date: 3/29/2018 8:01:00 AM
Thank you Jack, nice to see you..
Date: 3/29/2018 7:57:00 AM
I do like your song lyrics. Set to music would add a lot of mood. Well done, S.O. SuZ
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Silent One
Date: 3/29/2018 8:02:00 AM
Thank you Suz, Judy said that she would put it to music, a piano piece.. Can't wait for the outcome..
Date: 3/28/2018 6:04:00 PM
Alotta alliteration. As you know that's not my cuppa tea, but I do love the poem for it's sentimentality.
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Silent One
Date: 3/29/2018 7:59:00 AM
I thought it was quite mild in this one.. Thanks for the visit..
Date: 3/28/2018 4:31:00 PM
A great write from such a gifted poet... Brilliants shines through each letter, words and line.... thanks for sharing your talent, Write On James
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Silent One
Date: 3/29/2018 8:06:00 AM
Thank you James..
Date: 3/28/2018 3:06:00 PM
Gut Wrenching, Solo. Reminds Me Of Love And Its Beautiful Pain. Love It...Vickie.
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 4:14:00 PM
Thank you Vickie..
Date: 3/28/2018 10:18:00 AM
Silence .. : this is my condition now. How could you write so well? & when I I will be able to write so well Like that of yours ?
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 4:12:00 PM
You are young. People improve with time... Thanks
Date: 3/28/2018 9:05:00 AM
The depths of her sadness are so beautifully and elegantly expressed in your title and poignant poetic lines, Silent One. I love how you constructed your compelling poem - her song clutches my heart strings and your amazing alliteration is so emotionally meaningful and vivid; 'vexatious voices vibrate inside' - gorgeous! Melancholic heartbreak at its best.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/28/2018 7:25:00 PM
Being a bit rushed does not show in the quality of your superb write, that's for sure...
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 4:11:00 PM
Thank you Susan, wrote them really quick, I was a bit rushed..
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/28/2018 9:46:00 AM
I think the lyrics of your poem's song flows rhythmically with rippling 'heartfelt emotions', which is your expertise..
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 9:15:00 AM
Thank you Susan, this was inspired one morning when it was raining, I tried some lyrics, but i'm no expert on them...
Date: 3/28/2018 5:18:00 AM
WOW! Is all I can say...A MASTERPIECE!
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 8:49:00 AM
Thank you Elaine..
Date: 3/27/2018 9:59:00 PM
So sad and moving, S.O.! Janice
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 8:49:00 AM
Thank you Janice..
Date: 3/27/2018 8:39:00 PM
Yes, the first half is filled with very good alliteration, Silent One. I like how flowing this is. the last part, like refrains, would work so well in a song.
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 8:49:00 AM
It was a rushed poem, really need to take my time.. The second part was my poor attempt at song lyrics! Thanks Andrea..
Date: 3/27/2018 7:37:00 PM
Silent One,nicely done and enjoyed reading your are so talented. Bless you and have a great Easter. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 8:50:00 AM
Thank you Eve..
Date: 3/27/2018 5:32:00 PM
if the intent of this incredible piece is to prompt me to be woeful, wretched, S.O, this successfully sings to me,,, huggs ( pardon the awkward use of alliteration, ayy!..:)
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Silent One
Date: 3/28/2018 8:50:00 AM
Good attempt at alliteration.. thanks Nette..
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