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written for the prompt " when summer is gone" by JCB brul..

line count: 20  ,free verse

We learn to waltz and whirl through sunless spheres, amidst the frozen frangipanis, grieving in trembling stillness……
When summer is gone and the salmon sun slumbers in its somber sanctuary, waving silent farewells to skies glowing in apricot ink, I steal the amber and tuscan shade of twilight to shawl them in ballet pink, embroidered with champagne sequins. But am I to swirl through the melted haze of mauve, to wade through gloomy shadows befogged in dragonfly darkness, suffocating the balmy roses within my dusky heart of crimson thistles and thorns, like a weathered and greying garden of pixelated petals? Yet somehow, I find colors from crestfallen leaves, to paint my bleeding scars with singing stars. I still ponder: if grief had a color, would it be the gold and russet hues of autumnal foliage, or would it be the crystal blues of the ice-cold hues of winter? Perhaps there is no metaphor or seasonal tone to depict raining black dahlias, for the violin strings of a honeyed horizon now remain a mere memoir, where marigold memories flow within cluttered calligraphy. So tonight I’ll rise as the vermilion veil of the mulberry moon, amidst the faded streaks of saffron and cinnamon clemency.

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Date: 8/9/2024 7:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your poem being on the winners' list. Way to go. Great to see it there. Sara K
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Date: 7/25/2024 2:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a colorful write. I really enjoyed reading your wonderful "When Summer Is Gone" write. I love your line, "I still ponder: if grief had a color, would it be the gold and russet hues of autumnal foliage," I vote for russet. This would make for another great write... Have a wonderful day writing away................
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:29:00 PM
There is a definite loss when summer is gone. I appreciate reading your poem while summer is still here. Many thanks, Ink.
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Date: 7/19/2024 8:11:00 AM
Dear hilda it is always a pleasure hearing from you, thank you so much for leaving your thoughts. So grateful
Date: 7/18/2024 10:49:00 PM
I enjoyed your poem immensely, dear Ink. I loved 'raining black dahlias' and the final two lines blew me away. This is a fave. All good wishes, Evelyn
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Date: 7/19/2024 8:12:00 AM
Thank you so much dear evelyn so kind of you, truly grateful for your kindness
Date: 7/18/2024 8:48:00 PM
"When summer is gone and the salmon sun slumbers in its somber sanctuary, waving silent farewells to skies glowing in apricot ink," Wow... What a fantastic opening! Strikingly beautiful and alliterative...!The lines that follow are no less striking in metaphorical beauty and alliterative assonance. How you have made use of the three seasons, summer, autumn and winter to depict your emotions and mental state. Seasons bring on us noticeable changes in our moods. I feel most exuberant in summer and quite dull in rainy season... as we have only two prominent seasons. "Yet somehow, I find colors from crestfallen leaves, to paint my bleeding scars with singing stars." Another two lines that stand out. The whole poem is a marvel. Into my FAVE, dear Empress.
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Date: 7/19/2024 8:15:00 AM
Dear sweet valsa, you are so thoughtful and kind always, i appreciate also the fave very much. Thank you so very much
Date: 7/18/2024 4:31:00 PM
So many beautiful lines! Words fail me but not YOU! I adore this especially “ Perhaps there is no metaphor or seasonal tone to depict raining black dahlias, for the violin strings of a honeyed horizon now remain a mere memoir, where marigold memories flow within cluttered calligraphy.” You surely will do well in the contest!
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Date: 7/19/2024 8:16:00 AM
Dear karen it is alwYs an honor to hear from you, you are so kind and thoughtful. Thank you so very much for your heartfelt and sincere feedback
Date: 7/18/2024 4:26:00 PM
it's hard to wave goodbye to a season well loved, ink...your lyrical lines capture the sentiments of a summer so adored...enjoyed your alliteration and figures of speech...carry on!
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Date: 7/19/2024 8:18:00 AM
Thank you for being supportive
Date: 7/18/2024 3:15:00 PM
Oh wow. Such beaute of a poem. The best thing to do with grief is to paint it. Whether with brushes or ink. On paper on canvas. So well that it losses itself and colour. Lovely transition from summer to autumn and I'm not sure which I'll miss more. "Yet somehow, I find colours from crestfallen leaves to paint my bleeding scars with singing stars." It's amazing how we find a way through our scars, especially in the beauty of nature and paint our way through the pain and challenges. Such lovely-
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Date: 7/19/2024 11:06:00 AM
Awwn thank you queen you are such a generous and soulful soul that i can feel your sincerity from not just your comments but your poetry and the fact that you actually care , is what makes my heart warm! Thank you beautiful soul! I appreciate your poetic presence always
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Date: 7/18/2024 3:17:00 PM
Imagery Dearest Inky. Diverse emotions come with different seasons, and so do the experience, desires and inspirations. You have used vivid colours, metaphors and seasons to effectively express your emotional state. Solace and peace are the final healing of every rage. Lovely alliterations as always. "So tonight I’ll rise as the vermilion veil of the mulberry moon, amidst the faded streaks of saffron and cinnamon clemency." Yes. Yes queen.
Date: 7/18/2024 2:07:00 PM
Yes, grief probably would be well described with a dark color, a dark or cloudy cold day but who knows some may change that because we are each unique. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us about summer's end. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 7/20/2024 12:53:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading dear sara and leaving your thoughts
Date: 7/18/2024 2:06:00 PM
"Yet somehow, I find colors from crestfallen leaves, to paint my bleeding scars with singing stars." -- Extraordinary use of language and imagery. Love it! "Perhaps there is no metaphor or seasonal tone to depict raining black dahlias, for the violin strings of a honeyed horizon now remain a mere memoir," -- Great writing. Blessings.
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Date: 7/20/2024 12:53:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear joe appreciate your kindness and thoughtful support always
Date: 7/18/2024 1:38:00 PM
Rise as the "vermilion veil"- that's unique...very beautiful, enjoyed reading....
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:40:00 AM
I felt your poem poetically captures the melancholy transition from summer to autumn with its vivid imagery and profound emotional word weaving. Word pairings like the "salmon sun" slumbering in its "somber sanctuary" and the "apricot ink" skies evoke a serene yet poignant farewell to summer. Your ability to weave colours and emotions together is a sign or a talented poet, particularly in lines like "I steal the amber and tuscan shade of twilight to shawl them in ballet pink, embroidered with champagne sequins." Great use of alliteration also.. I think JCB will love this one.. BOL in contest
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:49:00 AM
Awn thank you silent one! I hope so because despite the colors its a poem that is close to my heart. Appreciate always your poetic presence
Date: 7/18/2024 11:15:00 AM
summer is gone and the salmon sun slumbers in its somber sanctuary,… ooo the alliterations!!! amber and tuscan shade of twilight to shawl them in ballet pink, embroidered with champagne sequins… mmm the way u paint with ur words… colors from crestfallen leaves, to paint my bleeding scars with singing stars… the kind of dreaminess you bring is absolutely magical!! violin strings of a honeyed horizon now remain a mere memoir, marigold memories flow within cluttered calligraphy..a heavenly weave
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:17:00 AM
Oh papi thank you for reading hah! Its about time u post a poem too here

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