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Notes About The Poem

10/26/2024

Poetry form: Octelle — The Octelle poetry form, created by Emily Romano, is a poem consisting of eight lines often using personification and symbolism in a telling manner. The syllable count structure for this verse is 8, 8, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8, and the rhyme scheme is aa/bb/cc/aa. The first two lines and the last two lines are identical.This poetry form not listed in PoetrySoup's "Type of Poems." As my October 2024 blog post mentioned, Brandy Nicole introduced me to the Octelle. PoetrySoup's syllable counter was used.

Image by Mark Toney using DALL-E (2024-10-26)

When Nature Pops

When Nature pops, kicks off her socks
Her dancing through the woodland rocks
Falling leaves on autumn breeze
Grateful pleas on bended knees
Clocks unwind, time falls behind
leaf-peeping pastimes spellbind
When Nature pops, kicks off her socks
Her dancing through the woodland rocks

Copyright © Mark Toney | Year Posted 2024

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Andrea Dietrich

November 15, 2025 at 8:06 PM

Great little poetry form there. Saw you at Brian's blog and thought I'd take a look. Cute imagery.

November 15, 2025 at 8:18 PM

Thank you, Andrea!

November 18, 2024 at 6:58 AM

Hi Mark, Love your words! Full of energy - as is the image. - Gail

November 19, 2024 at 9:15 AM

Thanks for brightening my day, Gail.

Unseeking Seeker

November 15, 2024 at 7:05 PM

An interesting couplet type form, I’ll give it a try!

November 15, 2024 at 7:31 PM

Great! Thank you Unseeking Seeker.

November 15, 2024 at 12:28 PM

Thank you for the example, Mark. Of course, I'll write for you.

November 15, 2024 at 12:35 PM

Much appreciated, Lin.

November 13, 2024 at 3:34 PM

I love the first two and last two lines

November 15, 2024 at 12:27 PM

lol David. You are one of a kind.

November 13, 2024 at 9:05 PM

David, thanks for taking time to stop by and comment during your special POTD day. :)

Constance La France

November 4, 2024 at 2:38 PM

Mark, I love your poem and the form, can I try it for the challenge ?

November 4, 2024 at 3:11 PM

Constance, I’m so glad you love the poem and form. That would be lovely if you used it.

October 26, 2024 at 11:22 AM

Lots of fun, Mark! Knicks my socks off, both the Autumn and your poem! Love the refrain! Hugs

October 26, 2024 at 12:50 PM

Your comment rocks, Kim!

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